Writing Feedback / IELTS writing practice task 2 academic - Modern technology [4]

Question: Modern technology now allows rapid and uncontrolled access to and exchange of information.
Far from being beneficial, this is a danger to our society.
What are your views?
Task: Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

Modern technology and information exchange

In this technological era, rapid development of new technology has made our personal information being revealed easily. News headlines such as " A 25-year-olds lady lost $2000000 through her bank account, which is believed to be due to personal information disclosure." can often be seen. It is therefore my strong conviction that the advanced technology would bring more harm than good to our society.

My stance could be attributed to two main reasons. The first point to be noted is that the users of the devices are anonymous. They could simply get access to our personal accounts and plagiarize our information by their sophisticated computing skills. In fact, we, however, know nothing about who are "reading our minds", let alone finding out that there is even a guy screening our information. For instance, the Americans were shocked that all of their messages sent and received and calls they made have constantly been recorded. Despite not committing any crime, we would still find this offensive. Our "data" should be respected and privately protected, but not stolen and supervised.

Apart from the unknown stealers, the enhanced technology may also give rise to fights and wars.Undeniably, food, oil, land, fame, and fortune are all we would compete for, competitions therefore arise within individuals and groups. We would figure out the weaknesses of our opponents through accessing to their Intranet in a bid to triumph in the battles. Take China as an example. Countries begin to be aware of her as Chinese may have been behind the WannaCry ransomware, which may attack them soon. Thus, I am still in favor of the view that the fast-developing technology would adversely affect social harmony.

Judging from the above, it is obvious that permitting our information to be exchanged uncontrollably is not a good thing to our society.

Writing Feedback / The official forbiddance of smoking in public places - IELTS writing practice task 2 academic [5]

There is evidence that inhaling cigarette smoke causes health problems not only for smokers but for non-smokers who inhale other peoples smoke.
In view of this, smoking should be banned in all public places, even though this would restrict some people's freedom of action.
What are your views?
Give reasons for your answers and include any examples. Write at least 250 words.

Smoking ban in public places

The fact that smoke from cigarette not only harms the respiratory system of smokers but also that of passive smokers, leading to a suggestion of smoking ban in publicly used areas. While some people see this ban as restriction of freedom of action, I do not share the same point of view and in this essay, I will be presenting information that will help to support my opinion.

To begin with, it is noted that prohibiting smoking is only applicable to the public area, but not any of the private place, such as bars and restaurants, as these places are privately managed by its executives. If this law had implemented, people who wish to smoke can still have the rights to do so, and thus, not impeding their liberty.

Apart from that, undeniably, smokers have fewer places to choose for taking the tobacco. Yet, the rule on smoking is in fact concerning a greater issue: the well-being of most citizens. Health issues have always been the worldwide matter, but this requires actions from everyone. It seems to me that it is worthwhile to sacrifice or limit a small portion of people's choices on where to smoke, maintaining the health of most of our valued citizens.

To conclude, making smoking in the open areas illegal would be a smart decision when we put the healthiness of the majority into our first priority, because smokers contribute only a small part of our population, and these people can still smoke in other personal sites. The lawmakers should also understand that protecting people's health is far more important than fulfilling the will of a small percentage of people.

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