Writing Feedback / Which would be cooler, a castle or a tree house? Language advice needed! ;) [4]

Please give any feedback! This is just casual 5 minute work! Don't worry about structure, just tell me if I persuaded you! :) Language advice would be great!

Prompt: Which would be cooler, a castle or a tree house?

Castle or Tree house?

Castles are one of the most historic man made landmarks in the world. Imagine playing hide and seek in a place so wondrous! Why not pretend to be King Arthur without the fear of judgement. Castles are a place of magic, creativity and amusement. Who doesn't mind the medieval vibe! Tree houses do not compliment history. Neither do they bring out the fantasies of characters we love. Tree houses have no connectivity to the world, so high in trees and to see nothing for kilometres out into the land. It's just plain boring! A clump of wood in the trees. At least castles have proper materials for shelter in a storm!

Speeches / The key quality for being a hero is.... (you wouldn't believe it!) :) [2]

The key quality for being a hero is.... (Discuss)

A hero may be depicted to be brave, courageous and overwhelmingly bold. But all these magnificent qualities are under the ark of one word... Empathy is one of the major qualities of a being hero. For a hero to help people, they must be empathetic. Understanding the situation, can provide what the victim needs. Empathy is a world-renowned word that brings people together, an empathetic person can change anyone. Empathy is understanding which is the first step to action.

Whether it's Rosa Parks fighting for the rights of African Americans or Save the Children, giving a child a home these people are all heroes, using their empathy and acting upon it. Rosa Parks understood the struggles of African Americans. Having been African American herself, she saw the segregation and acted upon it, by refusing to give her seat to a white American. Save the Children showed not only empathy, but compassion, that lead to the founding of this helpful foundation. A hero helps people and that's what these people have done. Empathy opens one's mind to reality of the things going on in life which brings people together as a community.

A hero is naturally empathetic towards the community. To be empathetic is inspirational to others creating a community of understanding. Anyone can be a hero by spreading the idea of understanding. Whether its understanding each other's differences, cultures, abilities and strengths, empathy allows people to understand the best in a person. Gandhi is responsible for world renowned peace between nations. He is global hero that has used empathy to reason with the British Empire. Empathy is used by the all-out brave and courageous Superman saving the world.

Empathy takes into the consideration of all the other qualities a hero needs. According to an article from "Brain knows better" Superman uses empathy to relax an entire city. Superman is courageous, bold, kind and understanding. "And on my soul, I swear: Until my dreams become a reality we all share, I'll never stop fighting." Superman isn't even from Earth, yet he shows empathy more than the average human in our world! Although, Superman is a fictional character, he is a hero that thousands of children admire. Sometimes the best action to take is to do nothing, that believe it or not, is also being empathetic, like leaving someone for a minute of silence on Anzac Day. It's not just because of his all his super qualities that Superman is a hero, but because of his empathy, that makes him such a lovable character.

Being empathetic is one of the most important qualities for becoming a hero. Empathy reunites societies because it forms an understanding. Just one person being empathetic can change a community. Empathy brings all the qualities a hero needs into one. It opens people's eyes to possibility for change. Empathy can influence anyone and is in a necessity to our huge and expanding world. To be a hero, empathy is a quality they can't live without.

Thanks a lot for reading! :) Please give any helpful feedback, that would be appreciated. Did I persuade you? List any persuasive prompts below.

Writing Feedback / What does it mean to be an "Aussie?" [3]

This is just casual 5 minute writing practise! Structure isn't much of big deal because I'm just writing to improve my language techniques! Today's topic for me is:

What does it mean to be my nationality?

Australians are stereotyped as those hooligans in the outback. Us, Australians are much more than you think. Being an Aussie is to be unique, it is a part of my identity. I might not ride a kangaroo to school, but the flora and fauna here are so unique. There's the Tasmanian Devil, Wombat, Kangaroo, Platypus, Koala, there are so many I could ramble on for days. Our languages are so unique we casually throw around the phrase "Dead Horse" (ketchup) on a picnic. We also shortened the British "Good day to you, madam!" to "G'day mate! Let's put a shrimp on the barbie." Australia is also a very multicultural place. around 28.2% of Australia's population were born overseas, according Australian Bureau Of Statistics. Imagine all these people of different ethnicities! I might not be a a typical Aussie Bogan, but mate, Australia is my home. From the animals to the language to the way multicultralism has bought us together. Being Australian to me means that I am unique.