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Posts by inderGTR
Name: Inderjeet Singh
Joined: Jan 13, 2018
Last Post: Feb 20, 2018
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From: India
School: Little Flower Public High

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inderGTR   
Jan 13, 2018
Writing Feedback / IELTS- Are the arts a good government investment? [4]

Writing Task 2- Government investment in arts, such as music and theater, is a waste of money. Government must invest this money in public services instead. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

Art valuation



The perceptions among people for issues in pursuit of revenue made and equivocally invested in various sectors by the government of their country has always been au contraire. However, it is undoubtedly the affair of utmost significance and must be with all options, addressed and recognized. These convictions, at times, establish a propaganda that if not moderated can render the future for a social domain, bleak. The hypothesis based on these convictions proposes that art, such as music and theater, does not stand the rightful recipient of government expense as do other public services; such as health care, transportation, education, infrastructure et cetera. I vociferously disagree with the given statement.

Some people have proven to be resourceful, tenacious with a commendable ability to convince others that their way is the right way, the way that needs to be followed, pursued despite the obvious repercussions such actions may incur. The primacy of these dominant yet dissimilar to the subjugated is undeniable. However, art in all its forms; be it music, theater, painting, is a constructive element of society. It cannot be disregarded in comparison to former. Music and entertainment provides people escape from the assiduous livelihood that they have fashioned for theirselves; consequently recuperating them for modus operandi. Government should remain the constituent pillar and should encourage all forms of art; for art is not only just a notion of luxury and delicacy, but the genesis of all cultures. The constitution of a country mandates the progress of bourgeoisie, thereby preservation of its cultural artifacts accentuates its merit and manifests the country as a positive contributor to the history.

William Shakespeare, Van Gogh, Leonardo da Vinci, Ludwig van Beethoven and many others in the ambit have delivered art ne plus ultra which, till Armageddon exists reverenced. So conclusively, foregrounding other domains that seem substantial, with the capital meant for art is not legitimate.
inderGTR   
Jan 13, 2018
Writing Feedback / IELTS- Are the arts a good government investment? [4]

@Holt
I sincerely appreciate your thorough analysis in regard my format; and in your words "ancient English". I would indeed take it as a compliment. I am constantly in search of a manner of writing that would forthwith advance the composition desired by myself. I not long ago discovered this website and the very first piece of article I read was bettered by your insightfulness. I would very much appreciate if I could have the pleasure of you aiding me on my venture to comprehend the language. You have already established that I successfully fail at the attempt to mimic Shakespeare and the fact that I am very influenced by him. I plead if you would be so kind as to guide me to perfection.

Hope to read your response.
inderGTR   
Jan 15, 2018
Grammar, Usage / My obligation to work hard [5]

Leo, Mary Rose @Holt has very helpfully suggested you to write your ideas into separate sentences. It will make them clearer to the reader of your message. I am assuming you are writing this in your college application. In my words, it should look something like this.

I have a strong attitude motivating me to overcome problems in the academic environment. This will help me in choosing my subjects in (insert degree name) that will lead me to career of my choice.
inderGTR   
Feb 18, 2018
Writing Feedback / Facebook, Twitter etcetera. What have they done to our society as a whole? [5]

Hello @PeterBrown. Contemplating the essay I sense, you have had a little or no time left in the 20 minute period sanctioned for an IELTS task and therefore assume the lack of thorough revaluation on your part. But however I recognize the effort put into the article and I appreciate that. There only are two complications that limit this essay from its full potential.

1. You are trying too hard to seem scholarly. Keep it simple Normal vocab never hurt anyone. Being a sesquipedalian does not help in IELTS
2. Use didactic format.

God speed.
inderGTR   
Feb 20, 2018
Letters / You have just spent a week with a friend on holiday, you realised you had left your wallet. [2]

the letter of request



Dearest Meischka,

I hope to have spelled your name in correctness and may this letter finds you in good health. I am consummately charmed to have had the pleasure to share a week long holiday with you and your family. I'm absolutely delighted and thankful for your gracious hospitality and this week has been the highlight of my year.

I anterior present my apologies for my request, should it cause any discomfort or inconvenience to you. On the night of the last day of my holiday, we went out for an alfresco dinner and it was really sweet of you to show me the marketplace. Upon our arrival, I started packing for my journey back home and hurriedly discounted my wallet. It was only after when I had reached home that I realized to have forgotten it erroneously.

I would very much appreciate if you could kindly send it to me on my home address that I have already inscribed on enclosed envelope. You might find my wallet on the mantelpiece in your lounge area. I would not have troubled you, had it been insignificant. But it contains inter alia, my driving license and company card.

I would also love to have the pleasure of you to write to me in the future and wish you would find in your grace, the pleasure to accompany me in your holidays.

Fondly,

Klaus
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