Writing Feedback / Task 1: Development of Chorleywood village from the nineteenth to the twentieth century [2]

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analisys of the village near London

Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the nineteenth century. The map below shows the development of the village.

Since the second half of the nineteenth century, population in Chorleywood, London increased in a gradual way, which leads to essential development and infrastructure changes.

In general, from 1986 to 1994, there were many areas built through year by year. Besides, two roads as Motorway and Railway were also opened.

Firstly, railway was built in 1909 and located in South of Chorleywood. It is a way connecting between East and West of Chorleywood. In 1970, motorway went into operation which lay along from North to South. Moreover, the road had an intersection with main road at Northeast.

Around Chorleywood Park and Golf course, from 1868 to 1994, new areas were developed quickly and clearly. Especially, Chorleywood station which was near the intersection between main road and railway was a big place built from 1883 to 1922. After that, South west area was focused on developing until 1970. From 1970 to 1994, development of areas spread along with motorway in East of Chorleywood.

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Writing Feedback / Task 2 Ielts: having a single career or having several careers [3]

is it better to have many jobs in life or not?

The idea of having a single career is becoming an old fashioned one. The new fashion will be to have several careers or ways of earning money and further education will be something that countries throughout life.

Nowadays, having many jobs in life is seemed to be a trend while having only one job is something old-fashioned. However, some people give some different arguments to this problem.

On the one hand, receiving several careers brings many advantages about experience, money and even soft skills. In the world with quick growth speed, dynamic and energetic young generation has motivation to explore new experience in many fields. Besides, they also get some lessons to support their fledging ability as community, time-management,... It's obvious that money is the biggest thing people care about. The more careers you change, of course, the more knowledge you have to choose which job's salary is better.

On the other hand, there are a lot of reasons that make people chose having only one job in their life. Firstly, the job settles down their life with a stable salary or increasing gradually from period one. Secondly, as status quote bias in economics, they have no interest in changing their work environment their relationships around, even though the benefits are clear. In developing countries, ancient conception said that women should find a fixed career for their whole life to spend time taking care of the family and children.

In my opinion, I believe that experiencing various careers in our life helps ourselves realize what is really suitable for us besides benefits we can get above. In conclusion, it depends on private views whether a single career or several careers is better but each one has own special feature for people to consider.

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