Writing Feedback / Ielts writing task 2 about migrating to urban areas (solution and problem essay) [4]

@hiepaz
you have SERIOUS mistakes of grammar and spelling in your essay. I will capitalize your mistakes. YOU HAVE GOOD OPINIONS WHEN YOU WRITE THE TOPIC, BUT YOU HAVE TO BE CAREFUL TO USE GRAMMAR.

"Increasing of villagerS WHO move to urban areaS haS become a social phenomenon BECAUSE PEOPLE WANT TO FIND fascinating opportunitIES from ... benefits OF CITY LIFE . In my opinion, governmentS ...

... between THE cost of living (...) electricity in citiES is TWICE AS EXPENSIVE AS THE RURAL SITES' IS.

Furthermore, THE environmental ... problems FOR CITIZENS SINCE tonS of carbon dioxide emissionS from vehicleS and industrial factories THAT CAN MAKE water and air pollutED. THE Other remarkable ... to larger citIES is that PEOPLE TEND TO suffer negative influences from THE HIGH CRIME RATE IN BIG CITIES.

Firstly, ONLY BY ENACTING SOME POLICIES of affordable AND social housing for LOW-INCOME inhabitants can GOVERNMENTS GET RID OF ALL OF PEOPLE'S stress of daily life's fees IN URBAN AREAS. Secondly , they could invest IN public transportation to THE NUMBER OF CARS IN CENTERS, WHICH WILL HELP REDUCE AIR POLLUTION. A further method is that GOVERNMENTS can also ... them use NON-CARBON POWER from ... Moreover, politicians also need to encourage citizens to ... (I DONT UNDERSTAND YOUR IDEA IN THE SENTENCE)

Writing Feedback / The birth rate in New Zealand has been much higher than the death rate from 1901 to the present time [3]

@Holt
Thank you for your assessment. I will correct my mistakes. I hope you will help me to improve my writing skill.

Writing Feedback / Learning by a failure? Mistakes can teach you a lesson. [6]

Your writing skill is so good. I believe that you have a lot of failures in writing that now you can apply to your essay effectively.

I recommend that you should use more conjunctions in your essay. In addition, I do not agree with your opinions that failures can make people to work harder since some ones can be encouraged by their high scores that they get in their classes without failures and study or work better to get higher scores. In contrast, people can be driven to despair when they have got failures at the start.

Writing Feedback / Compare and contrast essay: The culture of small towns and cities [2]

Your essay is very good because your brilliant ideas and vocabularies used in the essay. however, you made some mistakes.
1.abode( not abide)
2.compared to difficulties..( I do not know where is the relative clause used in the sentence)
3.resulting in some...(I do not know where is the relative clause used in the sentence)