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temiajare   
Nov 15, 2020
Undergraduate / Well-balanced and fulfilling life - APPLICATION FOR UBC -- TELL US ABOUT WHO ARE [4]

Generally well written essay but I would advise a look at your sentence beginnings. Variety is the hallmark of a good writer and this is especially true in regards to sentence starts. Creatively arranging sentence beginnings breaks up the monotony and choppy style associated with a simple noun phrase followed by a verb.
temiajare   
Nov 17, 2020
Undergraduate / Extremely opinionated - Tell us about who you are. UBC application essay [4]

Tell us about who you are



As a teenager, being asked to describe yourself can be the easiest question to answer. It can also be the hardest. On several occasions, I have been driven to sit down and decide who I want to be. But I have not given much thought to who I am right now. Not because I do not have a character. But owing to the fact that it is difficult to cram multiple facets of a human being's character into one word, or sentence, or even essay.

The majority of my teachers would describe me as extremely opinionated and I always seek an opportunity to voice these opinions. In my opinion, this is one of the reasons I excel at debating.

Most of my family members view me as a bookworm. I love to read books and write books. My all-time favourite book is Pride and Prejudice by Jane Austen closely followed by the Twilight Saga by Stephanie Meyers.

My friends would describe me as the mother of the group. I have an especially protective instinct when it comes to my friends and I always advise them.

I am especially proud of the relationships I have forged with people everywhere I find myself and my ability to express my opinions.

Any and all feedback is welcome.
temiajare   
Nov 17, 2020
Undergraduate / Freedom - the right to choose. What is most important to you and why? [4]

the privilege of freedom



The most important thing to me is freedom. I believe that everyone should have the right to choose from a variety of options but at the same time, we must not jeopardize the freedom of others. To be free means to live and earn a living as a free and honest person. To be free means to express your opinion and build your future, freedom is the ability to be true to your ideas and principles. To be free is the most wonderful thing that humanity can afford to give to you. Unfortunately, many people do not have this basic freedom. In some societies, women are children as second class citizens. They do not have the same type of freedom that men in these societies have.

Furthermore, in some places, freedom is relative to wealth or status. In these societies, the wealthy class are the only ones who have the freedom to do some things which everyone should ordinarily be allowed to do.

As someone who is highly opinionated, I have been told in the past that I should not voice these opinions for one reason or the other. I believe that everyone should be allowed to express themselves in any way as long as it does not affect the freedom of another person. I long to live in a world where everyone has this freedom because no one deserves to be second class or to be anything less than equal to other humans.
temiajare   
Nov 19, 2020
Undergraduate / Extremely opinionated - Tell us about who you are. UBC application essay [4]

@Mazid1989
I appreciate your contribution. The question was "Tell us about who you are. How would your family, friends, and/or members of your community describe you? If possible, please include something about yourself that you are most proud of and why." So I thought the essay should reflect more on how others see me and not really how I see myself. What do you think?
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