Undergraduate / To assist people with problems - Cornell College of Arts and Sciences Supplement [8]

overall,your idea is great but the essay needs some work. You did not really say what makes your intellectual interests exciting to you. By saying you want to specialize in business, pre-med and social science you have to include WHY (your previous reason doesn't make you seem like you have much passion). As much as you have a broad range of interests, the Admissions Office will expect atleast one or two to particularly stand out to you. talk about them. it will be beneficial if you cut out some part of the second paragraph so you can answer the prompt more appropriately and stick to the word limit of 500.BTW i hope this isn't too late!

Undergraduate / Russia daughters and fathers names - Cornell essay-- College of Arts and sciences [7]

I really like this essay. It's really genuine unlike others i've read. However, you need to say more specifically how you will utilize the programs at Cornell- its a key part of the essay. Let them know you did your research on them properly. don't change anything else though.BTW good luck!i'm also applying to Cornell;hope it goes well.

Undergraduate / Essay about the emergence of China - "For when China wakes, it will shake the world" [5]

you wrote a lot about China's evolution but i can't see much about YOUR intellectual evolution.don't you think you should say more?

Student Talk / Application Question January [127]

as long as you receive a confirmation email that your app and its supplement have been received, you're fine. sometimes the red button won't change to green not because you haven't submitted but because they haven't had the time to aknowlege it.

Undergraduate / I am half Filipino, a quarter Sri Lankan and a quarter Anglo Indian; Roomate/Babson [4]

this letter doesn't catch the reader's attention. Will you be this formal if you met your roommate in person? Give the letter a more natural voice.I'm not saying you should be sloppy with your vocabulary but don't you think saying



sounds really stuffy and formal. Also I'm not sure you should say


Personally, i would be freaked out if my roommate said that to me.


This part makes you sound like you really don't have passion; more like you're into business because your family is. BTW I hope my comments are useful. This can become a great letter if you cut out the faulty parts.

Undergraduate / "You are perfect just the way you are" - Villanova lesson i have learned [8]

As I read your essay I noticed you said


. You should definitely scrap that; you don't wan't to appear overconfident! BTW i hope you have reworked the last paragraph;like everyone said,its too cliche. Overall, your idea's great;i hope this isn't too late!

Undergraduate / 'similar ideologies as my own' - Babson supplement- Dear Roommate [8]

the second is definitely better!