Undergraduate / "My journey from high school to college of business" - UC Prompt [4]

I will say that personally I am not a good writer. Please help me make any corrections to improve my personal statement. Thank you :)

What is your intended major? Discuss how your interest in the subject developed and describe any experience you have had in the field - such as volunteer work, internships and employment, participation in student organizations and activities - and what you have gained from your involvement.

My intended major is Business Administration with concentration in accounting. For me, Accounting is not only a major I'm looking forward to study, it is a challenge to my interest that one day I will be successful accountant in the future. I believe I have the necessary skills and potentials to pursue it as my major. I have dreamed about myself working in an office and interact with other business members in a conference room since I was little. Considering from what I was saying, my main goal is to be one of the top business people in the entire world. I will work extremely hard to help myself reach that goal.

One crucial moment that I will remember for rest of my life is my senior year in high school. Mr. Gonzales gave me a D for Algebra 2. He said, "One day, you will come back and thank me for what I did." I was frustrated for the grade that I received; at the same time, I did not like Mr. Gonzales because of the result he gave me. The reason I did not receive the letter grade I wanted because I did not do any homework or paid any attention in class. All of these change when I get to attend community college while taking College Algebra as one of my full time courses. I vowed to myself that I was willing to do my homework, finish every assignment the teacher assigned, and put in extra time to study for more. The result at the end of the semester was unreal; I finally get my first A for college Algebra. First A I received since the junior year in high school. The GPA I got for that semester was 3.7 and I received Dean's Honors and an academic award. Having excelled one of the courses, I was so proud of myself for what I have done. I started to believe that I got the grip of college classes so I took Stats in the summer section after that and received another A. With the achievements that I received, I can proudly say that I'm ready for university as my next step.

Beside my talent with numbers, there are many skills that I'm good at and one of them is communicating. During this summer of internship for Wells Fargo Bank, I got to apply all these skills to prove to the managers that I'm qualified as one of the banker. During stage direct, I approached customers with in a professional way and asked them to open a bank account with me. My result was neutral that full with success and disappointments. By the end of my internship month, I succeed with opening five personal bank accounts for five different customers. This experience has made me self-motivated and highly passionate with the job. I hope that these skills will get me a place in university and more challenges that it has to offer.

Undergraduate / "Different personalities and talents" - UC Prompt #2 [4]

Please check on my grammar, organized and uses good sentence and also advanced words. I really appreciate with your help. Thank you.

Tell us about a personal quality, talent, accomplishment, contribution or experience that is important to you. What about this quality or accomplishment makes you proud and how does it relate to the person you are?

Our personalities make us different from one another human being. Each one of us has different personalities and talents that make us unique and special. For me, communication is one of the talents that will land me a good job in the future. I was born in a business environment in Vietnam, where my parents came from. They owned the biggest rice company in my hometown and they were the most well known people around the town. I spent most of my life at the company, which is my own home that I live in with three of my siblings. I saw my parents engage with customers as I was growing up, from a friendly greets to a business conversation. My parents taught me it is important to build friendly relationship as well as professional manner toward your customers. Knowing your customer is one of the most important aspects to keep your business running successfully. Since then, I had the ability to social with any person that I met. Groups of people I always looking forward to interact with are business and old people that willing to share their life experience. I am the type of person that learns from my own and other's mistakes in order to stop making the same old mistakes again.

The journey of my family did not end there even when we moved to America. My parents gave up the company they owed for the education for their four kids. From being the owners of the company, they work for other company and under the supervisor of their boss. "We're willing to sacrifice for anything when it comes to you guys. We don't ask for any favor from u guys but just work hard and get a good education for yourself," my mom told me during my first year of college. The statement that she made had impacted me since then and I'm sure it also had affected my other 3 siblings. I turn out to be the person that I am today because of my parents.

I have moved three times since we were here in America. I had to adapt to the new environment and make new friends each time. Most of the people saw it as a struggle but to me it was just another life style you need to adapt to. I made friends very quickly because I had the confident to engage in conversation; also how to connect with people from the early age. I know that my communication skill will land me a really good job in the future. My parents had sacrificed so much for me that I will set my mind to achieve all the goals. I also know that nothing will come easy; however, if it's easy, the result would not be as satisfying.