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Jan 1, 2011
Writing Feedback / Violence against women - essay suggestions [NEW]

Violence against women

Since thousands of years human beings' lives have been affected by violence. Year after year this phenomenon becomes more serious and dangerous. It contains many kinds, and the most common one is the violence against women which needs to a radical treatment. Since this gender is the most vulnerable to violence, Not only organizations but also many laws were legislated as attempts to protect women from violence. There are many reasons for this phenomenon. According to psychologists, lack of education, media, and nature are the main reasons which lead to this Non-civilized phenomenon.

Most of people, based on recent studies, who are practicing violence against women are not educated people. Therefore, violence against women is more common in underdeveloped countries in education than developed countries in education. The recent studies tell us that 30% of women in U.S were exposed to violence whereas at least one of every three women were victims of violence in Egypt. WHO and UNICEF declared that at least one of every three women was exposed to batter, rape, or to other kinds of violence around the world. Psychologists believe, the violence against women is the most dangerous kind of violence. Because, this form of violence affects negatively on the women's psychology, it would lead to pillars vibration of the community. Psychologists believe, that educating people could be consider as a good start in the way of struggling violence.

Media, according to psychologists, can affect the way we think, respond, and act without knowing about. Because, according to psychologists, media can address our unconscious without our knowledge, it could make violence as a new way to deal with our obstacles or disobedience to our orders. Activists in the field of women's rights expressed their surprised about not covering the cases of violence against women by media. They say, there are many inspiration stories about women who were vulnerable to violence which deserve making movies about. They believe, media can have an essential role in their fight against the violence. psychologists resembled media to a double-edged sword, they believe that media can be a powerful element in struggling violence or inciting on violence.

Psychologists believe that human beings' nature could be consider as the main reason that leads to violence. They believe, because of the man's body structure is stronger than woman's body structure, the violence against women is more common. They confirm that the same man who uses verbal and physical abuse against a woman, won't use them against a man who is stronger than him. For example, we can imagine if a man got married from a bear and a woman from a cat who would use violence against his or her partner. They say it's very disappointed that we allow our nature to act instead of our minds.

However, violence is not a new issue, especially the violence against women. It exists since the beginning of existence. Eliminating this non-civilized phenomenon needs to all people's cooperation. We should incriminate this action by all its forms and the person who uses it should be convicted by society. Educating, and media could be good channels to spread the principles that invite to respect and protect women's rights. However, in intention to stop this dangerous phenomenon, there should be radical solutions since, not only the women are the victims of this action, but also the society.
hasgc   
Jan 1, 2011
Undergraduate / "Drivers in Saudi Arabia" Stanford roommate- feedback [5]

your idea in the essay is lost, i'm not sure what you are talking about. are you talking about drivers in suadi arabia or about your grand parents? make it more specific.
hasgc   
Jan 1, 2011
Writing Feedback / "Parents must stimulate their children to study" - essay help revision [2]

Although education became the main reason to have a comfortable life, most students wish everyday to be their last day of going to school. Since going to school became a scary matter for students, we should think about the reasons that make them terrified of school. Being alone, concern of doing bad at school and economic situation could be consider as the main reasons that make students terrified of school.

Being alone and having no friends are the main sources that make students terrified of school. Students are terrified of being alone because, it would make them feel that they are unpopular and unloved. For example, we see many students at the beginning of their semester are talking on their cell phone while, there is no one on phone that talks with them. Moreover, they would lie that they are busy and they have to go to do something or they are going with their friends while, they will stay at campus and they have nothing to do. They do all those and many other things just to show that they are not alone and they are popular.

The concern of doing bad on school is an important reason that terrifies students of school. This issue is related significantly to students' parents and the environment that they live. the parents practice a lot of pressure on their children so that their children to do their best on school. For example, setting high levels for their children's study leads children to exhaust themselves on study in attention, not to disappointed their parents. But what parents don't know is that they are exhausting their children which lead school to be a terrified matter to their children.

Economic situation is an important problem that makes students unwilling to go to school. Many students became maniac about their clothes, mobiles, watches etc. They compare their stuffs with each other to see whose stuffs are better. Parents and poor students are the victims of this problem Since, it could be consider as a lot of pressure that leads them to abandon school. For example, many students work after school in attention to buy modern things for school. So we can see that economic situation can lead to terrible consequences at school.

However, most of those problems are able to solve. for example, making students wear uniform at school could reduce economic differences between students. Parents and society, for sure, have the main role in facilitation the obstacles that students face in school. They should educating students that being a lone for a while at school is a normal thing that everyone faces in school. Parents must stimulate their children to study not to practice pressure on them otherwise, the desire of students would be abandon school instead of study at school.
hasgc   
Jan 2, 2011
Writing Feedback / what is your horoscope predictions and do you believe in it??... i want to improve it [NEW]

Although I do not believe in horoscope predictions. But, according to horoscope predictions, it seems that I would experience a year full of prosperity, traveling and health, and indigence in love and relationships with family and friends. It seems that I would have no problems in money which I doubt about. I would travel to many countries around the world this year. I would be in optimal health, all what I have to do are eating right, exercising and getting the rest that I need. I would suffer in dealing with the person who I love. My relationships with my friends and parents seem are going to encounter some problems.

I do not believe in horoscope forecasting and what it says about my character because, all what it has said were completely wrong. For example, I am the kind of people who changes his mind every second while, the horoscope tells me that I don't change my mind even if I know that it is wrong. But what I noticed that horoscope tells ,almost, the same thing to all people but in a different way. For example, it says that luck in most of the time is on the Leo side while, it tells another person that you are not lucky but, because of your intelligent plans luck would come on your side. See, it told both of them the same thing but in a different way. It's like paraphrasing. However, many people believe in what their horoscopes tell them and they plan for their life on horoscope says. I believe that a wise man should not rely very much on what a commercial newspaper tells him. What if it told you that you are going to die today, would you buy your gravestone?
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