Undergraduate / 'A guest visited our Pirate School' - Common App extracurricular short answer [NEW]

One day, an extraordinary guest visited our Pirate School. It was an aged gentleman wearing a hat down close to his nose and clothed in tatters. As I saw him walking slowly towards my tattoo table among many little kids, I started to fear as though he was meant to cause unforeseen problem. It was at that moment when he asked me of a very surprising yet conventional favor: "Could you draw me the Skulls and Crossbones?"

When I finally raised my head after finishing the tattoo on his hand, I saw that he was smiling, just like, or perhaps more heavenly than, those other little kids that I've ever met. I then went through the strangest mixed feeling of shame and happiness. I soon realized that I had been foolishly refusing to see people's real value by arrogantly judging their appearance. Today, I not only draw but share warmth and emotion with each hand I embrace in my palm.

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Undergraduate / "Career Advising and Advising Programs" - Why UChicago Essay [2]

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The unique aspects of the academic programs and the university's mission have greatly attracted my interests in attending University of Chicago. I believe that to learn politics, one must gain a better understanding of our society and the structure in which we are governed, and the people who are representing our society by transcending the barriers of custom, language, geography, and history in the contemporary globalized world. I consider the University of Chicago's multi-disciplinary approach and the "Chicago Schools" of thought a great fit for me. Interdisciplinary workshops and Core program will allow me to comprehend 'people' from a variety of differing perspectives, including both scientific and artistic, and to learn how to critically analyze these knowledge without forming a fixed, parochial perception or judging people in a stereotypical way. Furthermore, with the help of SITG, I plan to expand my understanding of people's cultural values. Once this is accomplished, I will finally be able to learn how to 'settle different interests' between countries and answer 'Who Gets What, When, How,' which is the essential inquiry of politics as the American social scientist Harold Lasswell puts it.

The Career Advising and Advising Programs is another exceptional factor at UChicago. Careers in Public and Social Service (CCIPSS) will help me advance further to incorporate my theoretical knowledge about society and the world into public affairs. Likewise, pre-professional programs, such as Chicago Careers in Law and the ABG Career Externship Program will provide me opportunities to re-consider and confirm my career interests in law and foreign affairs.

Through UChicago's civic engagement program, especially the Community Service Leadership Training Corps (CSLTC), I plan to participate actively in serving people from our local level, and gain a broader perspective of what is real-world. By investigating the problematic side of our society- perhaps poverty, discrimination, or injustice, I want to obtain a true understanding of our current world and seek effective ways, that are neither sugar-coated, nor ostensibly labeled as "good" by some self-interest groups, but that are truly altruistic in accordance to everyone's needs.

My future goal at UChicago is to utilize all of my intellectual gains from these various fields of studies and hands-on opportunities, both theoretical and realistic, and form a fair, complete view to determine the apparent social gaps and fallacies, and successfully conduct faculty-mentored research on important social issues that affect our lives. This way, I hope to become a lawyer who can make a right and appropriate judgment.

Undergraduate / Favorite books/movies/poems list [6]

Question 2 (Optional): Share with us a few of your favorite books, poems, authors, films, plays, pieces of music, musicians, performers, paintings, artists, blogs, magazines, or newspapers. Feel free to touch on one, some, or all of the categories listed, or add a category of your own. (I am not sure whether this means I'll have to elaborate on them as well. Anyone can help me?) -> Please comment on my list!

Personally, I like books and movies that question about the existence of a four dimensional or an extraordinary world that are often critical about human beings, because they allow me to reflect on my own moral behaviors. Also, I like emotional stories that, in some way, resemble my own life story (I always prepare myself to 'agonize' before starting a book or movie.)

My Favorite Books"Third World" - Farenheit 451, The Brave New World, The Alchemist by Paulo Coelho, and Le Papillon des étoiles by Bernard Werber

Emotional Kind - Catcher In The Rye, Still Alice, The Great Gatsby, and Howl's Moving Castle (Not a manga.)

My Favorite Movies
"Third World" - A.I, The Matrix, Big Fish, Stranger Than Fiction, and Inception
Emotional Kind- P.S I Love You, and Up in the Air.

My Favorite Poems
I like all the poems written by my mother, __name___. Her poetry vividly brings back my memories from my childhood and allows me to see her from a different perspective, other than as a daughter.' Although her poetry is currently only available in _a foreign language__, I plan to translate it into English in the future, so it can be read world-widely.