Undergraduate / UC Prompt 1 - Coming from a world of technology [4]

Hi,

Can anyone please help me with my introduction

Prompt- Describe the world you come from- for example, your family, communtiy, or school-0 and tell us how your world has shaped your dreams and aspirations.

Coming to America, a whole new country where you do not know the language or the culture must be hard, but having a newborn baby in a whole new country with no money or job has to be the hardest of all. My parents came from India in search of a life full of prosperity and happiness. My parents worked hard day and night having multiple jobs and there main job of taking care of me; they earned a lot of money and slowly but surely bought everything needed to have a home and bright future. I remember my parents buying a T.V. and how I use to watch the people in the T.V. and learn from them. Technology has helped me today in learning English and has helped me be aware of my Indian culture and my American culture. My name is Rinam and I come from a world full of technology.

P.S. does any one have any more ideas i could use in my essay
Thanks

Undergraduate / UC prompt 2 " Taking responsibility for your actions" [5]

Hi everyone,
Can any one please help me and tell me if my essay sounds good or bad. I take any form of criticism.
I also would like to know in our essay do we put a title or not ?

Prompt: Tell us about a personal quality, talent, accomplishment, contribution or experience that is important to you. What about this quality or accomplishment makes you proud and how does it relate to the person you are?

My father and I arrived at the hospital; I was very confused, all I knew was that I was going to get a big surprise from my mother. When I hear the word" hospital" I automatically think that someone has gotten sick. I knew for sure my mom was not sick, because she would eat apples all the time. As the saying going goes "an apple a day keeps the doctor away" was true because she never would get sick. My mother was/is "healthy as a horse". When I entered my mom's hospital room, I saw that she was holding something, but I was not sure what it was. As I got closer to my mom I saw that it was a baby girl my mom was holding. The day my sister was born was the day that impacted my life.

I was a little girl, who loved having the attention of both of her parents. Growing up I never had to share anything, I thought I had everything I ever desired and it was all mine. Whenever, my parents had friends over and they brought kids, I was expected to share my toys with them. The saying "sharing is caring" never really suited me. I was the child who would share my toys only when my parents told me to, otherwise I never really shared or cared about the other kids. When my new baby sister arrived everything changed. I felt as if I was being replaced. I started rebelling to my parents by acting up and doing things I would never do. I was so frustrated; I just wanted my little sister to go away. One day, I did something very terrible to my baby sister. My baby sister was on the sofa sleeping, I pushed her on to the floor. I was mad, because my parents gave my favorite plush elephant to her. As she fell to the ground, all you could hear were her cries heard throughout the house. My parents rushed immediately to my sister. I grew nervous, as my parents questioned me on what happened. My parents decided to take my sister to the hospital to check her out. As my sister was getting checked on the doctor, I told my parents on what happened. To say that my parents were mad was out of the question, my parents were extremely furious. The doctor told us that my sister was fine, that was when I felt so relieved to hear that.

The day my sister was in the hospital made me realize that I have to be responsible for my actions. Looking back, I felt that I was a bad sister who was impregnated with jealousy and anger. I never truly felt the quality "responsibility" before my sister was born. Growing up, I have learned to take care of my sister and be responsible for her. What I went through that day as made me become a more responsible person I am today.

Thanks for all the help