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divina   
Dec 30, 2011
Undergraduate / "Battling for Passion" - Evaluate an experience (Common app) [4]

Please, I really need your feedback! Harsh critique is welcomed. I'm an int'l student, so if there are any mistakes, or something just doesn't sound right, pls let me know. And also maybe you could suggest any better heading?

"You waste your time. It's useless. Quit. Concentrate on math instead" -"I don't quit, dad. And I hate math." He gives me that I-know-better-than-you kind of look, receiving in response the I-doubt-it one. This dialog will go on, since I'm not going to give up on my greatest obsession - learning languages.

Melodic Ukrainian, rich Russian, concise English, eloquent French, romantic Italian, passionate Spanish, sophisticated Latin - so different, yet so similar at times - are now a part of me. But it all started when I was three. My mom decided to refresh her English learned at school. Because of 25 years that passed since her graduation, I only could count up to 100 differently colored dogs, cats, and elephants. Although my mother did satisfy her hunger for teaching, my craving for knowledge had just began. Which eventually led me to polyglotism.

And now he wants me to quit?

No, my father never experienced the divine pleasure of reading Flaubert in French, understanding Beatles'songs, or distinguishing actors' intonations in "La Strada." He has no idea how much self-discipline and devotion I need to fill those few precious hours between homework and bedtime with studying Spanish subjunctive or memorizing a long list of Russian orthographic rules. He claims that fluency is unachievable without real communication not knowing how many hours I've spent discussing causes of modern political crisis or debating over a controversial social issue with... a mirror. He can't imagine the amount of diligence and aspiration I need to persevere through after tens of unsuccessful tries to grasp a difficult lexical or morphological concept. I've learned to work hard, concentrate and keep on going no matter what thank to my hobby.

And he says it's not beneficial enough?

My volunteering experience at International High School in the US proved that my efforts were not in vain. Refugees from all over the world who spoke no English would attend it. Having lived in poverty and suffering, they all had stories to be told. I conversed with children from Latin America, Africa, and Asia in their languages. I taught English to students who survived events I had only seen in nightmares. I inspired to work harder those, who had worked more than I ever had. As we read books, learned new words, created poems together, I felt like I was making a positive impact on their lives. As I saw the progress they made before my eyes and on report cards, I knew I was empowered to change things, even by doing so little. I grew along with my students, becoming more open-minded, global- and self-aware.

And he says my knowledge is inapplicable?

Every new word broadens my outlook, every new phrase deepens my knowledge of myself, every new language makes me a different person. l imbibe the wisdom, the way of thinking, the culture of a nation, leaving my prejudice behind. I change.

And he believes it's pointless? Well, I've got some reasons to disagree, haven't I?

TH
divina   
Dec 31, 2011
Undergraduate / "Sadness"- Yale supplement [9]

I really thought I was pretty unique with ECs like polyphasic sleep, speed-reading, meditations and lucid dreaming. Well, I was wrong, apparently:)
The essay is well-written and I do love it, but I'd definitely agree with jp4ever. Make it a bit more personal. Try to further explain what impact it had on you, your life. Or what do you do with all the time you have. But I like it just the way it is.

Good luck with Yale, I'm applying there too.
divina   
Dec 31, 2011
Undergraduate / 'Meditation is my daily routine' - Common App EC short answer - Meditation [3]

Please, be honest and harsh!

It's been 3 years since I implemented meditation into my daily routine. Immediately after the beginning my breathing calms down, my body relaxes, and gentle current flows through it. Thoughts are fast fading. Joy and love fill my heart. All boundaries disappear - I become one with the Universe and experience bliss. I feel like a diamond: clear, pure, and still. I listen to my inner voice, getting acquainted with my true self. Deep sense of communion with everything and everyone along with indescribable feeling of happiness remain after. As I walk down the street, warm energy of affection flows out of me, diffusing through the air. Meditations help me to deal with problems easily and peacefully, harmonizing my life. I learned to control my thoughts and feelings, instead of letting them dominate over me. I know now what I want and who I am. Uncertainty and frustration are gone. I've grown enormously already and will only continue to grow, reaching out for enlightenment.

Thank you!
divina   
Dec 31, 2011
Undergraduate / 'The Biology program' - NYU Supplement [6]

Because NYU's Undergraduate Biology Program offers a variety of courses within Biology, I will be able to find which aspect of Biology I want to focus on.

You use the word "biology" too often, I think. Try to substitute it with, say, "subject" or a synonym.
I do like it in general, but maybe you could elaborate a bit more on other aspects of NYU?
divina   
Dec 31, 2011
Undergraduate / 'I look at my watch' - Yale Supplement [5]

I have to agree with all the above-mentioned. It's very engaging and interesting. I felt like I was standing there next to you. But yes, try to elaborate more on why is that matters to you, how it affects you. I think basketball made very accurate observations, I'd take them into account.

Good luck!
divina   
Jan 1, 2012
Undergraduate / Common App Essay ~ Marchin' On [4]

I did enjoy reading your essay a lot. As a huge fan of OneRepublic myself, I get what you're talking about. I don't really pay attention to cliches, so it didn't bother me. I would definitely listen to Jackyt, but I honestly like it just the way it is.
divina   
Jan 1, 2012
Undergraduate / 'travelling all over the world' - NYU supplement [2]

Why NYU?

Ever since I was a little girl I dreamt of travelling all over the world, speaking ten languages, and trying unusual foods. I pictured myself sitting next to Eiffel's Tower in Paris, tasting a scorpion in China, and watching a Broadway show in New York. As a teenager, I modified my dreams: now I want to explore other cultures, meet people from various backgrounds, and become a truly global citizen. I believe that NYU AD can provide me with all these, in addition to world-class education. With its astonishing 80% of international students, numerous campuses throughout the world, and countless opportunities that allow to pursue any interest, your University seems to be a perfect fit for me. I'm thrilled with an idea of practicing my Italian in Florence, writing for the "Fishbowl tribune", and participating in a horseback riding club. As I'm interested in many areas of study, I would seize the opportunity to further expand my knowledge in these areas: from studying politics in modern Europe to better understanding of research methods used in psychology. Because I live in a small rural town with homogeneous community and no social life, Abu Dhabi's cosmopolitanism and active life fascinate me. Dreams do come true. With NYU AD I'm assured that mine will too.
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