Undergraduate / Essay in Progress "Airman". [3]

Topic:
Evaluate a significant experience, achievement risk you have taken, or ethical dilemma you have faced and it's impact on you.

Essay(In progress):
Airman

Standing proud, a figure of extreme discipline and typically looked at as a man of principle. This individual is faithful to a proud heritage, a tradition of honor, and a legacy of valor. He understands what is expected of him and that he must never falter. I am this man; I serve my country as a member of the United States Air Force. Unfortunately I was not always this person.

(All I have for now, slowly working on my first body paragraph)

Goal: My goal in this essay is to show my transformation from an individual who lacked motivation, or a solid work ethic to a member of the united states military.

Undergraduate / "American Airman" | Topic #1 Common Application [5]

Topic:To evaluate a significat experience, achievment, risk you have taken, or ethical dilemma you have faced and its impact on you.

American Airman

Standing proud, a figure of principle and typically looked at as a man of discipline. This individual is faithful to a proud heritage, a tradition of honor, and a legacy of valor. He understands what is expected of him and that he must never falter. I am this man; I serve my country as a member of the United States Air Force. I have been molded into a person who is extremely motivated, dedicated, and has a strong work ethic; this is my greatest achievement.

Growing up as the oldest child, and the only male of three, the military was always apart of my life. A subject that intrigued me, with deep history and brotherhood bonds unmatched by other organizations. Like my grandfather, and father that served before me I have always had unconditional love for this country. Unfortunately I had a flawed perception that joining the military would only hurt furthering my education. This ignorance caused me to look over the very organization that I would dedicate myself to.

I progressed through school as an average student, with the ability to do well but lacking proper work ethic, and the desire to succeed. I continued through my later years in school knowing that I needed to improve but never entirely fixing the problem. The years flew by, and I was left with a flawed perception that I could continue on the path I was on and still end up being a productive individual. I was left with mediocre grades, and little to nothing that set me apart from the crowd.

Senior year rolled around, and like many of my classmates I began to prepare for college. As I did research, I noticed the number of students who started college straight out of high school high had a higher failure rate then those who didn't. The numbers stunned me, students that first attended community colleges or were members of the military had a much higher chance of graduating. Essentially students were being sent to school unprepared, they were challenged and weren't able to finish the task. In that moment I realized I wouldn't be able to justify spending money on furthering my education with the uncertainty of being able my degree.

"There are no secrets to success. "It is the result of preparation, hard work, and learning from failure." spoken by General Colin Powell. These words are what I lived by during the last few years, improving myself in every way possible. I had to put myself in the position to succeed, the military was that position. From the moment I raised my hand in defense of this nation, to the moment I graduated from one of the longest, and most demanding technical training schools the military has to offer I remained motivated, dedicated, and became an American Airman.

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