Undergraduate / 'constantly on the move' - Why do you feel Seattle University [6]

why do you feel seattle university is a good match with your educational goals?
Hey guys I'm having a writer's block...I literally squeezed this whole thing out of my butt. I don't really like the flow of my essay&I feel it comes off weak in some parts. Would someone please kindly help me rephrase/change things around a bit? constructive criticism is always welcomed. Thanks!!

Growing up as a child, I was constantly on the move. Whether it was to a new school, or another country, changes in culture or language were inevitable. However, numbers were unchanging throughout. As a result, I love working with numbers and have come to appreciate the diversity in this world. I feel that Seattle University's Alber's school of business and economics would be a great fit for my educational goals. Not only will I be given the opportunity to study finance in a nationally recognized business school, but do so with students from different cultural and ethnic backgrounds as well. Just as Elif Shafak said, "If you want to destroy something in this life, be it an acne, blemish, a human soul, surround it with thick walls, and it will dry up inside"Cultural expression has always fascinated me, and I feel that as an individual, connection with the rest of the world is of great importance.

Upon research, Seattle University's strong Jesuits tradition is what initially grabbed my attention. Alber's business school incorporates Christian values into the character development of their student body. Being a Christian myself, I want to make my beliefs a lifestyle and opt for a learning environment would allow me to improve myself spiritually. Furthermore, the broad variety of undergraduate programs offered by the university will allow me to explore my interests in other fields such as art, and foreign language.

I have lived on Guam, an island in the Pacfic Ocean, for the most of my childhood. Having lived in the metropolitan capital of China prior to this slow paced island life, a part of me still longs for the city. As a soon to be high school graduate, I've outgrown this island and in need of a different, more fast paced lifestyle. Seattle University's location in downtown Seattle is what attracts me. Never having been to Seattle, I can only imagine the energy and opportunities that the city will bring. My love of numbers, of cultures and people, caters to my love of learning, and with the study abroad opportunities and diversity on campus, Seattle University offers an unparalleled study experience, which will enable me to further my knowledge in both business and the world around me.

Scholarship / (Liberal art / China life / a Puzzle cube) - Skidmore essays [3]

hey guys please check my essays?are they any good? also each has a 700 character limit.

why is skidmore a good match for my educational/personal goals.

Upon research, Skidmore's liberal arts environment and location is what initially attracted me. Though I plan on pursuing a career in business management, Skidmore's liberal art program will allow me to explore my other interests such as art and foreign language. Never having been to New York, I can only imagine the energy, the internship opportunities, the people. My love of numbers, cultures, people, and of hands-on experience caters to my love of learning, and with the study abroad opportunities and diversity on campus, Skidmore college offers an unparalleled study experience, which will enable me to further my knowledge in both business and the world around me.

Skidmore College is committed to creating and supporting a diverse and inclusive community. Please share a personal experience from which you gained a greater understanding of the value of diversity OR describe what you are seeking in a diverse campus community.

In my seventeen years of life I've lived in Saipan, Guam, China, and the mainland U.S. As a result, I've been in contact with numerous cultures and have come to appreciate diversity as a whole. Meeting people of different ethnic backgrounds allowed me to gain a new perspective on life and understanding of the world, and overtime, it taught me to be accepting of others' opinions and beliefs, no matter how different it might be from my own. Cultural expression has always fascinated me. To me, an individual's connection with the rest of the world is of great importance. Just as Elif Shafak said, we must "transcend through cultural ghetto", or "we too run the risk of being dried on the inside".

Please share an example of an instance when you feel creative thought really did matter. (Feel free to draw upon history or your own experience.)

During my junior year of high school, I was asked to design a puzzle cube for our semester project in intro to engineering class. Each puzzle cube could not have more than five puzzle pieces, while each piece cannot exceed the limit of five wooden cubes. With the criteria given, the possibilities were endless. I realized then, whether one aspires to be an engineer, artist, or businessman, we are always challenged to "think outside the box". Looking back on history, creativity is what allowed for the invention of ipad, android, or any other popular gadgets of the 21st century. It is only through innovative thoughts, are we able to do the unthinkable and improve our standard of living.

Undergraduate / "transcend through cultural ghettos" - UMICH SUPPLEMENT [2]

Everyone belongs to many different communities and/or groups defined by (among other things) shared geography, religion, ethnicity, income, cuisine, interest, race, ideology, or intellectual heritage. Choose one of the communities to which you belong, and describe that community and your place within it. (Approximately 250 words)

On the outside, most people see me as a private school student, attending the most prestigious college prep high school on an island in the Pacific called Guam. However I'm unlike other private school students, who have their future planned out by their parents, and readily follows along. I belong to the community of online bloggers, many of whom are champions of free thinking. With the rising engagement of teenagers on the internet, I soon found tumblr to be my second home. At first, blogging allowed me to freely voice my opinions and proved to be an escape from the stress of daily life. But it soon evolved into a melting pot of intellectual exchange, where I was able to interact with bloggers from all over the world. I feel that though I am physically on Guam, mentally I was able to travel the world and witness not only the beauty but also the cruelty of mankind.

Ultimately, blogging has allowed me to "transcend through cultural ghettos"; it has shaped my view of the world, taught me to be more open-minded and to look at matters in different perspectives. (Elif Shafak) Now I blog not only as a hobby, but do so to promote global awareness to other teenagers and adults alike. The blogging community offers me two things I value the most, a place to express myself without limitations and an opportunity to make a difference in someone else life; it's a place where I truly belong.

Undergraduate / 'sent to live with relatives' - u mich supplement [NEW]

Describe the unique qualities that attract you to the specific undergraduate College or School (including preferred admission and dual degree programs) to which you are applying at the University of Michigan. How would that curriculum support your interests?

I was kind of drunk when i wrote this please don't mind. I can tell the essay is weak or at least it's not good enough for me, so please critique and help me rephrase things!!

Throughout my childhood, I was sent to live with relatives from time to time due to my mother's inability to support me. Changes were hard for me to cope with, and moving to a new school or a new country was never a fun experience. I would never want to return to those places. However, Ann Arbor is an exception.

I moved to Ann Arbor during my junior year of high school. What struck me first about the place was how friendly people were and how easy it was for me to fit in. Furthermore, living with my cousin, who happened to be doing her masters at University of Michigan's College of Engineering, allowed to me catch a glimpse of the students' daily life and gave me opportunities to visit the University of Michigan campuses. Like my cousin, I would love to be immersed in challenging classes with rigorous workloads. Ann Arbor, being a college town, gives a studious vibe and few distractions outside of school. As an eager learner, I opt for a learning environment which will provide me with motivation, help me concentrate and push me to do my best.

Upon research what attracted me the most about University of Michigan is the actuarial and financial mathematics major offered by the College of Literature, Science, and the Arts. I've always enjoyed working with numbers, which provides me a sense of familiarity, and am especially interested in pursuing a career in actuarial science, which is not offered by many schools. University of Michigan's actuarial science program, one of the most outstanding ones in the country, pave path for my future actuary career. Conveniently, thebroad variety of variety of other undergraduate programs offered by the College of Literature, Science, and the Arts will allow me to explore my interests in other fields such as, art and foreign language.

In addition, University of Michigan is well known for its multicultural student body. In my seventeen years of life, I've lived in China, Saipan, Guam and the mainland U.S. Whether it was to a new school, new neighborhood or a different country, changes in language and culture were inevitable. As a result, I have learned to appreciate the diversity in this world. The numerous people I've encountered with different ethnic background has greatly altered my worldview and broaden my horizon. In college I hope to be on a campus which will main same level of diversity,and I feel that University of Michigan would be a great fit for my educational goals. Not only will I be able to study in a nationally-recognized actuarial science program, but I'd also be able to do so with students from different cultural and ethnic backgrounds as well. My love of numbers, of cultures and people, caters to my love of learning, and with the study abroad opportunities and diversity on campus, University of Michigan offers an unparalleled study experience, which will enable me to advance my knowledge in both business and the world around me.

Everyone belongs to many different communities and/or groups defined by (among other things) shared geography, religion, ethnicity, income, cuisine, interest, race, ideology, or intellectual heritage. Choose one of the communities to which you belong, and describe that community and your place within it. (Approximately 250 words)

On the outside, most people see me as a private school student, attending the most prestigious college prep high school on an island in the Pacific called Guam. However I'm unlike other private school students, who have their future planned out by their parents, and readily follows along. I belong to the community of online bloggers, many of whom are champions of free thinking. With the rising engagement of teenagers on the internet, I soon found tumblr to be my second home. At first, blogging allowed me to freely voice my opinions and proved to be an escape from the stress of daily life. But it soon evolved into a melting pot of intellectual exchange, where I was able to interact with bloggers from all over the world. I feel that though I am physically on Guam, mentally I was able to travel the world and witness not only the beauty but also the cruelty of mankind.

Ultimately, blogging has allowed me to "transcend through cultural ghettos"; it has shaped my view of the world, taught me to be more open-minded and to look at matters in different perspectives. (Elif Shafak) Now I blog not only as a hobby, but do so to promote global awareness to other teenagers and adults alike. The blogging community offers me two things I value the most, a place to express myself without limitations and an opportunity to make a difference in someone else life; it's a place where I truly belong.