Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 2 'man should share evenly household chores' [3]

Men and women employed in full-time jobs have to share evenly household chores and caring for children at home. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

With the society developing, the majority of women have a full time job, instead of staying at home do the housework and take care of the baby. Basic on this situation, some experts point out that the husband should share evenly the job at home with the wife.

In my opinions, I realty support this argument. The most critical reason is man has physical advantage, which is stronger and energetic, even taller than woman. So man can do the heavy job with less sweat, and leave those works which need patient to the woman, such as do some laundry, check the crying baby.

And the other reason, I think this way is the woman already contributed to the family a lot. The man does have to carry the baby for 40 weeks, not to mention labor, which is the highest painful level of human. At this point, what is so hard to the husband helps their lovely wife do some household chores.

However, I think the man and woman should division of work, so they can do the thing they are good at, then they can be effective. For instance, the man can cook, clean and carry heavy stuff, while woman can take care the baby and wish the dishes. In this case, they can share the work at home and both can have time for their career.

To sum up, I am full convinced that man should share evenly household chores and caring for children and the woman can share the job at the office, so the society can be more effective and productive.

Writing Feedback / IELTS - 'choosing own career by young people' [3]

Some say young people should choose the career they want to follow on their own. Others on the contrary say that the choice should be made by teachers and parents. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your statements and include any relevant examples from your experience.

More and more people pay attention to career direction. Some people point out that career should be chose whatever they want, totally making their own mind.I am agreed with the front one.

They argued that no one have the right to decide the career for the other people, no matter how close they are, because they don't know better than yourself. Career is very important; it is the direction of your life. Like someone says: choose the job and the person you actually like, so you can happy the 8 hours at work and very happy the rest hours. Image this, if you choose the wrong job, you would feel suck 8 hours a day in the whole life.

Bill Gates, one of the wealthiest man in the world is the vividly example of choosing the career by himself. He has to fight his parent for drop off Harvard university in junior year, because he is crazy about computer, while majoring law. But we know what happen next, he achieved something more expected.

However, some people don't think this way, they believed it is better to leave the choice to the people have experiences. The people, who still choose their career, is green, so listen to the people who know you better and also got in the industry, might be able to give the best advice.

To sum up, I am full convinced the idea of choosing your own career, it might more difficult do by your own, but when the time you succeed, you would get the happy forever.

Writing Feedback / SOCIETY essay; In China students have to take the classes at least 9 hours a day [NEW]

Some people think that teachers at school are more responsible for children's intellectual and social development than parents. To what extend do you agree or disagree? What is your personal opinion?

In this days, child stay more time at school with their teachers than at home with their parents. Therefore, some experts pointed out that the teachers have more obligations for the children than the parents.

The most important reason that supported this argument is the time. In china, students have to take the classes at least 9 hours a day, and when they finally at home, they go to dealing their homework that the teacher told them to do. After they done, it is time for them to go to bed. Clearly, the teacher is playing a very key role on children development, no matter intellectual or moral part.

And the other convinced reason is the teacher is more knowledgeable and skillful on teaching for most time. In school, the teacher have advantage on particular side, such as math teacher is good at math, English teacher is good at writing. For the students, they take it for grants that follow the lead of the teachers, and that is a huge responsibility for the teacher, since they are the experts.

However, not everyone believes this point. Because no matter how is talented and brilliant the teacher, would make mistake. If the children learn everything from teacher, would learn the wrong thing too. So the parent should not just leave kids to school and say: it is all yours now.

After compared to these two arguments, I prefer the front one. Despite the teacher is not perfect, neither the parent, while teacher is indeed more professional.

To sum up, children is huge responsibility, so teacher should not only delivery knowledge, but also teach them how to be a good person. To some extent, they do more job for the children than parents.