Writing Feedback / 'coming up with solution for social problems' - essay about issues and young people [4]

Young people are much more aware of and concerned about issues like the environment, poverty, and animal welfare than previous generations. What is your own opinion?

Practice writing

The rapid development of the society leads to many social problems such as environment, poverty and animal welfare. Many people blame for young generation for make these problems more ominous. However, in my personal view, they are much more conscious than previous generation

To begin with, one cannot deny that social problems like pollution or poverty have been becoming worse in recent decades. It is so easy to hear about a number of bad news such as poverty in an African country, or air pollution in a developing country. Almost all recent research indicates that these problems tend to be more serious over times. This has set for human today the requirement of balance between economic development and social problems.

In fact, young generation have been early aware of these social problems as they directly have impact on their lives. There have a significant change in human's attitude toward social problems. Just a few decades before, the most general main goal of countries is get long steps in developing economics or technology. Most countries did not pay enough attention, or even ignore side-effects of development. Differently, young generation is believed to be more concerned about these issues. A typical evidence is the appearance of more and more social groups and organizations which struggle for environment protection or appeal to treat animal fairly.

In addition, with the help of high technology, human today can do more than their counterpart in the past. Information of social problems is on television, media channels or the Internet everyday partly helps raise conscious of people. Furthermore, governments have applied achievement of high technology to solve consequences of pollution, poverty.

In conclusion, more serious social problems are inevitable, not young generation's fault. Moreover, young generation now is much more sensible than their ancestors. They, with high technology, are also able to come up with solution for social problems.

Writing Feedback / IELTS-What kind of problems can be caused by people resisting to accommodate changes? [2]

People naturally resist making changes in their lives?
What kind of problems can this cause? What solution can you suggest?

And here is my practice writing, any help is welcomed

Human's life always changes day by day. Therefore, it sets requirements for us to change toward new conditions of living. However, many analyses have pointed out that most people naturally resist making change in their lives. This nature respond actually leads to many problems.

On the one hand, many people consider avoiding changes as a way to avoid troubles. For example, a worker chooses to keep using the old machine instead of new one just because he or she does not want to learn how to use the new. They feel better when just working in familiar condition. This natural though is understandable because safety is one of the most important needs for everyone.

On the other hand, changeable people claim that making changes is necessary to reach higher success in life. A successful business man said that if we just do what we have done, we just get what we have got. This statement partly implies important role of changes in human's life. When we avoid making changes, we also by ourselves ignore all opportunities to go further in career. And in a rapid development society, this means that we become backward people.

More seriously, what if young generation become passive, and is never ready to change? This will create a weak and low quality labor force in the near future. Of course, a weak labor force cannot help develop country as we desire. That is because they avoid changes, avoid new modern technology or other things, and so they cannot catch with rapid development of the world.