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Wambat   
Nov 20, 2012
Undergraduate / 'An adventure of a year abroad in Italy' - UC Application: an acomplishment relate [3]

Prompt:Tell us about a personal quality, talent, accomplishment, contribution or experience that is
important to you. What about this quality or accomplishment makes you proud, and how does it
relate to the person you are?

Almost three months ago after graduating high school, I embarked on an adventure of a year
abroad in Italy. I expected a fun and enriching experience of living in another country and
experiencing a new culture with only one problem - I don't speak Italian. I knew that learning
a new language would be difficult, but since I'm smart and hard working, I knew I could do
it. Although I started with a basic grasp of the language using online tools and videos (e.g.
Pimsleur), I tried my best to communicate and learn as much as I could. Despite my best
efforts, I was barely part of conversations and spent most of my time with no clue about what's
going on. However, that was to be expected after only being there 1 week, then 2 weeks, then
3 weeks. "Well it takes a while", I told myself, "I'll be doing fine after 2 months". Then two
months rolled around faster than I expected and I was still terrible; when I was in a group, I
avoided talking because I felt so stupid for not being able to say things how I wanted and wait
for someone to ask me a question,. It was very disheartening as I felt confused and lonely every
day, and I thought that I would never improve.

But with the advice of my host brother, I realized something that I've known for a while and just
forgot to put into practice; whining and complaining about stupid things doesn't help, and if you
want something to change, change it! I only had to change one thing: my mindset. I stopped
accepting being confused and not understanding and I stopped worrying if people thought
poorly of me for not understanding or for speaking incorrectly. Once I started just speaking and
asking questions, I learned so much more and actually participated in conversations even if most
of my comments were "Io non capito"(I don't understand) and "che cos'è" (What is that). Who
would have thought that actually speaking a language helps you learn to speak it? I learned so
much faster than before and now I'm well on my way to fluency.

Learning Italian is a great accomplishment for me. It has been more then just a difficult
intellectual challenge, which I'm used to, but it has also pushed me out side my comfort zone
and forced me to become less shy and self-conscious. This has shown me that when things
get difficult, with a little help and by putting myself out there, I'll push through and rise to the
challenge. I've also discovered that while many things may come easy for me, it is overcoming
the difficult challenges that is most rewarding and allows me to grow intellectually and
personally.
Wambat   
Nov 20, 2012
Undergraduate / Greetings fellow Stanfor Admit; Stanford roommate essay [6]

The second point seems like you are combative,

I will challenge even the slightest difference in opinion.

because I am always right,

so you might want to tone it down and focus on how debating helps you reaffirm your beliefs and see the opinion of others.
Wambat   
Nov 20, 2012
Undergraduate / UC; "Never say Never," really is more than just a title of a James Bond movie [2]

not to mention my overly tenacious parents, who seem to have nothing to do but to badger me all day

This seems overly negativity towards your parents

stress began to stack itself with me as a host

this sentence is a bit akward

It ends very touching and strong but I'm not sure about

my children.

it almost sounds like you are a mother or is that referencing the kids you work with
Wambat   
Nov 20, 2012
Undergraduate / UC Application Prompt #1: How am I supposed to know what I want to do with my life? [2]

Describe the world you come from - for example, your family, community or school - and tell us how your world has shaped your dreams and aspirations.

The world I live in is one where we are expected to make some of the biggest decisions of our lives at 18. We have to choose what to do after high school; study at a university, study at community college, join the military, or start work straight away. Even if we eliminate the last two and just narrow the decision to going to college, the decision remains large as there are over 7690 colleges in the Unites States and even more in the world, so we are expected to narrow this down to where we will spend the next 4 years of our lives. We are still faced with a hard decision: what major. How are 18 year olds supposed to know what we want to do for the rest of our lives? As kids, we are exposed to all the easily marketed jobs like fireman, policeman, accountant, doctor, salesman, nurse, teacher or astronaut, and that's what you choose from. I chose astronaut. But, then we grow and discover more. Through career days and meeting parent's coworkers and friends, we discover more diverse careers. I discovered engineering and realized that that might be a more reasonable career choice than an astronaut and leverages my strength in math and science. Then we start exploring these new found career paths, find a subset and hone in on what we will do for your entire life. After talking to several civil engineers and working with them at the COSMOS summer program at UC San Diego, I decided on civil structural engineering. And for a time, I was sure this was what I would do.

But then the troubling part comes, when I started to discover other opportunities and the hard truth comes out. There is no way I am ready to make this decision as my under prepared 18 year old mind can barely decide where to go surfing or what to eat for lunch let alone long term career plans. With so much worry and self-doubt, I kept reconsidering if I was really making the right choice of school and major or maybe I should go right back to the top and choose a different path or just not even go to college.

But when I was riding my bike to school, I had an epiphany; I had figured it all out. The simple fact of being a teen is not that you have to have it all figured out, but instead that you are always in the process of figuring it out. So many people go to college undecided because college is designed to be a place where we can discover what to do in the future. It's fine that I may prefer civil engineering now and aerospace next week, I'll just give one a try and fully apply myself to that direction and I can always change. I know that there is more than just one major that will take me to my long term goal of being an astronaut (I never really out grew that one). I know I'll be fine in the end. I do what I love and I work hard. So, I know I may not have it all figured out now, and circumstances can always change, but I know whatever direction I go it will be just fine.
Wambat   
Nov 20, 2012
Undergraduate / Stanford Supplement; "Write a note to your future roommate"; four facts about me [8]

I would recommend that you cut down the intro because it doesn't really say anything about you and instead use those extra words to add another point.

does make

I think "makes" would sound better

only when

I think "once" would sound better
I like the visuals and descriptions

And I love point 2 because I too love monopoly although I am not as skilled as you
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