Undergraduate / EEC/ I crave for Computer & Math; MIT Short answer - which department/program & why? [5]

There are many approach to answer this question. You can answer it from your passion point of view, but make sure it sounds interesting. I applied for a certain science camp and i read several similar essay.

Just sharing, it's not the best, but here's my style for answering such question : "I watched a film about worldwide pandemic. It was an incurable disease and create horrible suffering. People willing to do crazy things just to survive. They rob, they kill, they forget humanity. In such chaos, only doctors have the power to end the problems. Since then, i believe in how big a doctor can do for people's lives."

There are tons of people who love math like you do, but show them you are different in way that you have strong vision of what you want to do in your life

Undergraduate / "My Escape"; Common App; The Experience of failing and how I changed! [5]

yeah agree... the ending really hit! but about the content, i think it's hard to be read. My first language is not english indeed, but i think your sentences are not arranged in logical way (??)

Example :
After the presentation, except frustrations, I started to recall the time when preparing the research, what caused me to run away from the challenge?

What i read first was 'after the presentation, except frustrations..'. After that i hoped something like 'i don't feel anything..' or such. But i got 'i started to recall..' instead. Frustration is not something to be recalled.

Until now i still didn't get what's the meaning of the sentence. If I rephrase it based on why i interpreted : 'After the presentation, other than frustrated i started to recall...'

By the way, i'm really waiting for the pollished essay. You have the basic skill of advance vocabulary and that should help you make a great essay.

Undergraduate / Exercising/MIT's EECS /Initiativeness/; MIT Short Responses [4]

Fantastic! your first essay show you have interesting point of view and your third essay show you have a great and inspiring life! (a glimpse of scientific words in second essay makes me runaway from reading it, sorry :\ )

Let me know when the MIT result is out okay :)
(ps : i know you demanded short answer but i just cant hold it :p)

Undergraduate / What attribute of your personality are you most proud of...? MIT Essay [3]

for me it's more like 'department' essay rather than 'personality' essay, especially the closing sentence.
i suggest you to explain more about your curiosity and what interesting experience you have in life because of your special curiosity

Undergraduate / Leadership is an art, not a quality; North Carolina / Leadership [7]

I like your essay.. Philosophical view in the beginning, personal experience for the main part, and convincing final statement