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Posts by Helio
Joined: May 22, 2013
Last Post: May 24, 2013
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Helio   
May 23, 2013
Writing Feedback / People are now more interested in using seafood and some products from seafoods than ever before [3]

overfishing of the world's oceans threatens many species with extinction and putting the livelihood of millions of people around the world at risk. What are the causes of this problem and what can be done to prevent it from happening?

Answer:
It is undenied that nowadays, many ocean species have to confront to the risk of extinction due to the human over-fishing throughout the world. There are a number of undoubted reason causing this issue and each problem needs to dealt in a particular way.

It is likely that one of the most prominent cause giving rise to this problem is the sharp increase of demand for some kinds of seafood and the considerably enlarged market comparing with before. In addition to that, the innovation of fishing exploiting techniques are now leading fishermen to pick up a lot of fish in a catch. For instance, some fishermen often use dynamites or electricity in fishing to have a fine batch of fish. As a result, the more fish they catch, the more dangerous species of the ocean world have to face to.

Eventhough this issue is more and more significantly raise all over the world, there are some realizable solutions to copw with this phenomenon. Firstly, we have to solve the original root of this problem by providing alternative forms of livelihoods for people living nearby the sea. By that way, fishermen do not have to over-exploit the ocean resources and turn oceans become exhausted. Furthermore, the government should educate widely the society on how dangerous over-fishing could effect on ourlives.

To sum up, people are now more interested in using seafood and some products from seafoods than ever before. Therefore, it is resulting in the issue of overfishing of the world's oceans. However, governments could use their authorities to solve this problem effectively.
Helio   
May 23, 2013
Writing Feedback / Living in the countryside better in Vietnam [6]

i think your essay had some problems. The first problem is the length of this essay, it is too short with around 200 words. it should have more than 250 words in the task 2 essay. The second one is that the words and sentences using in this essay are quite simple. You should use more academic words and complex sentences to make it more attractive. Your idea is quite good but it is better if you put some examples into your essay
Helio   
May 24, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS: profits from natural resources make people ignore to preserve natural world [4]

People are not paying attention to environmental protection. What is the cause and suggest solutions to deal with this issue?
ANSWER:
Despite the acknowledge of human about how serious the environmental problems are, we now seem to concentrate on something else, rather than on the persevation for the natural world. There are a number of reason causing this issue and each problem needs to be dealt in a particular way.

It is likely that one of the most prominent cause giving rise to this problem is people now could earn a lof of money by exploiting natural resources at the hard-line. As a result, they almost neglect to save environment. In addition to that, in some countries, especially developing countries, there is the lack of serious efforts and law enforcement on environment protection. For instance, punishment to the ecosystem destruction is not determent and radical.

Eventhough this issue is more and more consideralbly increasing throughout the world, there are some realizable solutions to cope with. Firstly, governments should apply the mineral exploiting standard to prevent misusing natural resources. As well as, authorities need to promulgate some serious laws to reduce the devastation and make all types of sectors in soviety coordinate more closely in protceting global environment. Furthermore, when every individual recognizes how serious the environment effects on their own lives, they will take interest in enviromental protection.

To conclude, the profits from natural resources make people ignore to preserve natural world. However, the opportune interference of government could prevent the environmental destruction.
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