Writing Feedback / IELTS; Gender equality should be exercised in universities? [3]

Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There is no doubt that men and women should be treated equally in modern world. While somebody believes that there should be the same numbers of male and female students in every subject in universities, I do not agree with this view.

The idea that universities should accept equal numbers of men and women in every discipline is right on some perspective. Firstly, males and females should have access to the same educational opportunities. Furthermore, it is wrong to discriminate against students because of their gender. For example, a male student should have a chance to study nursing or a female student could be a pilot one day.

On the other hand, I strongly argue that there should not have gender equality in every subject because of some reasons. To begin with, some major is more suitable for one sex than the other. For instance, women's characteristic is gentle and careful. So it is better for them to study some discipline like nursing and teaching. In contrast, men are interested in the subjects relating to technology just as computer science and mechanics. This leads to the different rates of males and females in several particular majors.

Besides, choosing which subject to learn is depending on everyone. The universities must not accept the equal percentages of both genders in every discipline while men do not want to study these subjects vice versa. For instance, we can not let the universities accept the equal numbers of both sexes in computing class because most of men like to study this major while women do not.

To sum up, the equality of two genders is good. But it is no need to let the universities only accept the equal percentages of male and female students in every discipline.

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Writing Feedback / Percentage of clear differences between the national consumer expenditure of five various countries [3]

A glance at the table provided reveals a percentage of clear differences between the national consumer expenditure of five various countries namely Ireland, Italy, Spain, Sweden and Turkey in 2002.

One particularly interesting fact highlighted by the figure is that Turkey had by far the highest rates of consumption in terms of Food, Drinks, Tobacco and Leisure, Education at 32.14 percent and 4.35 percent respectively. Spending 28.91 percent on the former category, Ireland was likely to be the second highest, making the three other nations came last at approximately 17 percent. With regard to Leisure, Education group, Sweden and Italy were equal at somewhere in the vicinity of 3.2 percent. Come out last in leisure and education spending was Spain with 1.98, marginally higher than Ireland with 2.21 percent.

Turning to Clothing, Footwear category, Italian expenditure saw a staggering rate of 9.00 percent while the four remain countries only spent some 6 percent on this item.

In general overall, Food, Drinks, Tobacco outnumbered the two other groups of consumer spending in all five sample nations.

Thank you for your help.

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