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Posts by mika1998
Name: mina k
Joined: Nov 27, 2013
Last Post: Feb 11, 2014
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mika1998   
Nov 28, 2013
Letters / A letter to a British friend in 180-120 words about an important festival in your country [5]

My darling Emma:
Hi, everything is OK? Are you still safe and sound? Did you keep on studying for exams? Well, I was interested in your recent letter written about Henley Royal Regatta. Now I'd like to make you familiar with one of the well-kept festivals of my country.

We celebrate Bon festival in July which comes back to a story which seems to be about a disciple of Buddha using his power to release her mother suffering in hungry ghosts' realm and he becomes successful. Also Bon dance originates from the time he starts to dance for his joy.

The festival lasts for three days in summer, so we wear yukata or light cotton kimonos. It usually consists of a huge carnival and foods like watermelon. We lit up paper lanterns and float them down rivers, mixed with fireworks at the end.

Much more things to say, yet I'll be happy to see you next July in here to experience it yourself.
Anyway drop me a line soon.
Best wishes
Mina
mika1998   
Nov 28, 2013
Writing Feedback / "Every coin has two sides"; Effects of globalization - discuss [7]

at first i guess some words need to be replaced. also you had better talk about other effects of globalization, not only Internet but also economic impacts,etc. and also instead of " there are few disadvantages because of globalization." you had better said:globalization has also some disadvantages, and instead of "Having said all these"you could say : having mentioned both sides/pros and cons of globalization,.

after that in the same line as you mean the whole time you shouldn't bring it plural.
good luck:)
mika1998   
Dec 15, 2013
Writing Feedback / 'Dorothy: a reflection' - Creative writing about belonging [2]

hi:)
I couldn't look away that u had written,i just think its better 2 say i just couldnt take my eyes off it.
and instead of These symbols of transcendence added to my sense of adventure. , its better to replace added to with increased
:)good luck
mika1998   
Dec 15, 2013
Undergraduate / A SHORT STORY STARTING WITH" I felt so excited when I looked at the envelope"IN 120-180 W [3]

I felt so excited when I looked at the envelope. Well, it has been passed about two months since I had sent my application off and I was gradually starting to lose my hope. When on this rainy pitch-dark evening, checking mails on the doormat, trying to prevent them being wet, the letter mark as Harvard University caught my eyes.

Looking at the envelope enthusiastically, I just tried to open it as fast as I could, tearing with my hands. Although I was not certain if they applied me or not, I was just curious about what it has been written there. After reading the first sentence, I thought I am going to be in for a surprise. As I was reading the rest of the letter, I felt as if I was in a haze, hard to come out of, so I read it over and over to become certain about it.

Having become certain, I just talked to my mother about it and it simply began to spread out like a wildfire!!!
mika1998   
Feb 4, 2014
Writing Feedback / Has ease of cooking improved life? [7]

hi
i think its better to substitute the sentence"Preparing food was not as easy as we do today." its better 2 say:"many years ago, it was not easy to prepare food as it is today."

also our life in 2nd line must be our lives
this sentence is grammatically wrong dear"Besides, our way of looking to providing food is changed largely." u must use has instead of is, or changing instead of change.

the word sport in 3rd line must b sports.
u must use a noun in 4th line, not just obese, u must say obesity.n also in 4th line effect must become plural.
instead of in the past preparation of food by hunting was demanding and hard action. its better to say"in the past preparation of food by hunting was not only demanding but also a difficult job."

good luck:)
mika1998   
Feb 5, 2014
Writing Feedback / Effects of plastic surgery (500-800 words) [4]

hi ,that's a great n impressive essay:)
in 5th line "Therefore, plastic surgery can promote happiness, self-esteem, self-confidence" / u'd better use and b4 self confidence n also the same thin in 6th n 7th n 12th line.

i think danger in 3rd paragraph,1st line is better2 b plural if it refers 2 the meaning as"s.th that will harm or kill us". again in the same line after one of we use a plural noun, so mistakes not mistake .

in 3rd line of 3rd paragraph,"Another disadvantage of plastic surgery is that it can have negative effect on health", it must be plural-->effects

The most common complaints reported are headaches, vomiting and prolonged pain, excessive bleeding, temporary numbness... instead of ... u must use a comma and etc.
good luck :-)
mika1998   
Feb 5, 2014
Writing Feedback / there should be a complete ban on the advertising of dangerous products (120-180 words) [11]

Some people believe that advertising dangerous products like cigarettes should be completely banned, although some others disagree. I will consider both sides of the matter in my essay.

First of all, on one hand, advertisements on cigarettes or any other dangerous products are not only one of the most solid reasons of initiating wrong social habits among young people but also a drastic pretext for them to both be inclined to it and continue doing it. Therefore there are negative complaints from people concerned about their society health to these advertisements.

On the other hand, the opponents of the ban argue that as long as they are legal products, there need not be any limitations for such advertisements. In fact, it is better for beholders to use well-known and authenticated products rather than poor and unqualified ones, although there might be a risk for not interested people to become interested in such devitalizing products.

Considering both ideas, the cons surplus the pros of such advertisements, certainly claiming why should we consume such products while they have no benefits for us?!!
mika1998   
Feb 6, 2014
Writing Feedback / Has ease of cooking improved life? [7]

i meant that is change is grammatically wrong. it must be has changed or is changing.
good luck:)
mika1998   
Feb 6, 2014
Writing Feedback / there should be a complete ban on the advertising of dangerous products (120-180 words) [11]

hi.tnx for ur comment.its an FCE writing task dumi..well, it must be about 120-180 words, n my essay is exactly180 words...i made it much shorter than what it really was

and i have a question.do u think i must state two supports of ideas instead of agreement n disagreement?

n i meant in our society by there . n also tnx 4 ur helpful advices:)
mika1998   
Feb 11, 2014
Poetry / my first poem. have some difficulties with a title for it [3]

it was really great:)
just in here i think voice must have an article such as that or the.

Voice reminds me what I've had

n also i think its better 2 say noise of voice that is also suitable for choice in next verse n more grammatically true

I'm possessed by voice's noise
I'm afraid I have no choice

nice poet, good luck:))
mika1998   
Feb 11, 2014
Graduate / market development and export; reverse engineering (abstract) [4]

In recent years, issues such as market development and export included the greatest concern to senior managers of engineering and manufacturing organizations. The question is how can we reduce the technological gap with developed countries and promote our rank in global marketing? Investigating countries like Iran, that didn't acquire technologies over time, shows that the first step, to the widespread use of reverse engineering approach is to understand the primary products and upgrading them according to our needs.

Promoting and supervising the implementation of a systematic process using reverse engineering and process engineering tools and techniques could be effective in achieving the technical knowledge (still no sequences due to the lack of systematic procedures) with the least time and cost consuming.

In this paper, in addition to explaining different strategies, technology, research and development positions in reverse engineering, I discuss it as an appropriate way of progress for developing countries with summarized methodology.
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