Writing Feedback / In many countries, traditional foods are being replaced by international fast foods. [2]

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In many countries, traditional foods are being replaced by international fast foods. This is having a negative effect on both families and societies. To what extent to you agree or disagree?

Essay:

Nowadays, our society have dramatically changed by globalization, which will contribute the country's economic development, therefore , we can see an increasing number of international fast foods throughout everywhere around the world. However , whether international fast foods are become more popular and it bring more harmful than good is a controversial issue. My view is that the international fast foods have really bring more negative effects to our society, especially is young generation.

Firstly, an increasing number of children are become more and more obesity, due to their eating habits are influenced by fast food outlets. They selling all unhealthy foods at low prices, which foods extremely high fat , salty and sweet , all of this can damage their healthy.

Moreover, fast food outlets are caused a great threaten of the local traditional foods. For example , Mc Donald is one of the most popular with children , it always promote pleasure and delicious foods for them. The parents in order to make their kids happy, therefore , they will always consume in fast food restaurants. In addition , the traditional restaurants due to their business are sharply decreased , consequently , they need to collapse.

That is not to say that international fast foods have obtained a large number of employment opportunities for local inhabitants, which will improve the standard of living of their families and individuals. Of course , our country also benefit, which help to contribute our country's economic development . But the parents should be more careful about their children eating habit, always consumption in fast food outlets can lead them obesity.

In summary , most fast foods are always unhealthy , therefore , the parents should be provide their children nourishing foods rather than fast foods, they are even cultivate their good eating habit. by doing we can make sure that our children will being more healthy.

Writing Feedback / About Technology Effect [NEW]

" Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology."
" In what ways has technology affected the types of relationship people make? "
" Has this become a positive or negative development ? "

In the past, fewer people could have imagined that the internet would impact us so greatly. Even now , people are beginning to realize that its potential. In this short period of decade, our society has dramatically changed by modern technology, whether in shopping , media or business have a greatly difference. When weighing the pros an the cons, it is clear that its may have some drawback to our society and individuals, but the positive clearly outweigh them.

First of all , it is obvious that online world has make our lives infinitely more convenient. We sending a letter is as easy as typing and pressing "send" ; We can compare prices and shop with the click of a mouse, and without ever leaving the comfort of our home. Now more and more people can work remotely and thus spend more quality times with their family and friends.

Despite many obvious benefits of internet, it is not without its problems. It brought a lots of negative factors like cyber crimes. For example , ID theft , credit card fraud have a negative impact to our society. Moreover , the absence of boundaries of the world, through technology could create harmful to the people. For instance , children can watching pornography easily, and it has also led to people to social isolation, and they are even living in a virtual world.

From what has been discussed above , we may safely draw the conclusion that we should harness the potential of new technology that make our life more convenience. Meanwhile we need to be more careful in the way we use it. Only by doing , I believe we can find a way to let internet be shaped by our lives and not vice versa.