Writing Feedback / Toefl ; Independence from parents [2]

In the following essay I would like to express my opinion in regard to the thesis "It is better to be independent from the parents as soon as possible" .I think this way because people who gain independence early develop a lot of useful skill , they are more responsible and they are free to do anything.

To begin with, independent adults live separately from their parents , so that they have to know how to cook, clean up apartment and how to earn money .These skills are very vital to survive alone or with partner ,because person cannot live without dwelling , without money and without something to eat .Also, earning money explains how money is hard to find, because no one will give money , so you must earn it yourself.

Addingly, adults tend to be more responsible if they live without parents because parents usually take responsibility and do not allow to make very important decisions. To illustrate that , mature people can marry and consequently have their own children and have private apartments. Marriage teaches adults how to behave with their husband or wives and how to upbring children.This example shows how living separately from parents is very crucial in order to be responsible.

And lastly , adults who are independent have really a lot of freedom to anything you want .This is because there are no parents who control everywhere all your moves, every your decision and says to do their own opinion. Therefore, there are a lot of good thing to do your own without parents . To show that, adults can make party in their apartments and travel alone or with partner anywhere. So, as a result freedom make you very happy.

Ultimately , living separately and without parents is a very useful thing . Adults become more mature because they learn how to earn money , learn responsibility and gain total freedom of their parents.

Writing Feedback / Toefl. Should countries engage with others or they should isolate from other countries. [7]

Nowadays we live in a very fast developing world .I believe that countries in order to develop should not isolate from the world but instead engage with other countries. I feel this way because countries which are engaged with others strengthen their economy, increase popularity of the tourism and share knowledge and technology with other countries.

To begin with, countries which are partners develop faster compared to the isolated countries .First of all, to develop faster countries must increase money in its treasury. This can be made by trading with partner countries , especially trading expensive and necessary products such as petroleum , diamonds, gold and other precious materials .Also increase in the economic stability can be made by investments into the country's business by foreign entrepreneurs .For example , investments in the building factories, mining industry , department stores and food products.

Also ,engaging with other countries causes increase in number of tourists. Tourists will learn new things from the foreigners and explore their traditions and rites. This causes both cultural involvement between countries and causes friendship to become stronger .For example , laws that allow visitors to enter the country without the visa and to stay there for a long period of time will be very comfortable for tourists.

Another reason I think this way is that involvement between countries promotes sharing of knowledge because knowledge was valuable in all eras. Countries can share their technologies , share their university basis and can exchange students between each other. This is very crucial because exchange students , technologies are important in order to make the nation more intelligent. From my personal experience , I have a lot of friends who are studying currently in USA , South Korea ,Singapore and they all will come back and develop my country in the future.

To conclude, I think that countries should never isolate because it will not make the country stronger in all aspects but instead make the country more vulnerable.