Undergraduate / Love at first sight; Why Hamilton college? [6]

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Just like how a year dies and a new year is born, my love for Hamilton College was instantaneous. Attracted to Hamilton upon first site in my college search, I was compelled to explore what the school actually held. It was then I realized my attraction to Hamilton was genuine and it was the place where I should be.

I believe Hamilton is the place which can help me nurture my dream due to its tolerance. A school which gives students a voice, Hamilton presents an open educational curriculum and challenges the faculties of students in their academic field. Students have the free option to choose courses they believe they can thrive, and the small class size with students fewer than twenty as well as a student to faculty ratio of nine is to one, students are almost assured to learn a great deal from each lesson. The small class size i believe will also create a healthy relationship between students and lecturers, thus students can exploit a great deal of knowledge from them which prepares the Hamilton student to face the challenges of the world as well finding solutions to them.

Hamilton with its rural setting merged with its racial diversity presents a culturally assimilated atmosphere where students can learn cultures from one another. Its Greek life also introduces its students to some ancient experience.

I being an individual who advocate strongly for tolerance in all spheres of life, I couldn't have chosen a more perfect match. I believe at Hamilton all my abilities will be refined through intensive class work and extracurricular activities and I can almost be certain to obtain a solid foundation on which I can build my future of being a neurosurgeon. Being a person who also loves to learn a lot about different cultures the atmosphere at Hamilton will just be sublime.

Undergraduate / MY WORLD AT THE TOP OF THE HILL; WHY HAMILTON COLLEGE? [3]

MY WORLD AT THE TOP OF THE HILL
Climbing the hill may seem like drinking a can of worms to many people but when one is able to break the back of the breast; one finds real freedom and diversity; I was therefore enthused to become a hill climber.

On the Hill, I will not be forced to learn the physics which I always detested; I will probably find myself in a pool of biology, mathematics and chemistry which I have always loved, and in that pool, I will find the skills and knowledge which will lay the path for me to become the Neurosurgeon I want to be. I won't be crowded with people who love biology like me but rather, I will find myself in a small group of people who will greatly interact with one another and share ideas on the same interest.

On the Hill, I will not only see my fellow Ghanians dancing "Adowa, Kpanlogo or Kete" nor only hear my people speaking "Akan or Ewe" but I will experience the real feel of the Samba dance of the Brazilians, the Dragon Dance of the Chinese; hear people speaking Dutch, French, Portuguese and many other languages producing a homogeneously cultural environment where I will bring my rich Ghanaian culture to bare and assimilate the cultures of others.

By the time I descend the Hill, I will be holding an experience that will tell me I am a citizen of every nation, an experience that will make me love my math, biology and chemistry the more, and an experience that will show the true meaning of freedom. As someone who aspires to be a resource for the world, I must be made up of the world. That is why I chose the college on the hill-Hamilton.