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Name: Harry Lam
Joined: May 12, 2014
Last Post: Jun 3, 2014
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School: Shatin Pui Ying College

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harry137181143   
May 12, 2014
Writing Feedback / IELTS : An enjoyable job or a good salary? Discuss both sides and give your view [7]

Question: Some people argue that it is more important to have an enjoyable job than to earn a lot of money. Others disagree and think that a good salary leads to a better life. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays, there is a heated debate on what the most important factor is when considering about a job. For this, it is common to find people divided into two camps which emphasise on finding an enjoyable job and receiving a decent salary respectively. Both sides raise sound arguments.

For those who believe having a pleasurable job should receive more concern, psychological satisfaction of their jobs outweighs the salaries they gain. Having a harmonious working environment and job satisfaction can bring them unmeasurable happiness which can hardly be bought by enormous wealth from their perspectives. Moreover, it is undeniable that we need to face fierce competition to secure a well-paid job. In this highly competitive society, winning over other competitors always requires one to work extremely hard. This, in other words, means to be exhausted, physically and psychologically. Doctors and lawyers are two good examples of such problem, which will undermine their job satisfaction.

On the other hand, earning a decent income can bring some people a better life. Advocates claim that happiness can only be achieved if basic living conditions, e.g. housing and clothing, are achieved. To lead a materially abundant life, it is also incontrovertible that we need to have good salaries. What's more, they argue that earning decent salaries can bring them dignity and recognition as they are, to some extent, successful. Such belief can be proved because it is common to find the rich with high social status, like Bill Gates.

The above arguments may all stand in some conditions. As for me, I agree that having a good salary can set up a fundamental base for a better life. When our life is financially supported, we can then look for more enjoyable jobs to be psychologically contented. I believe this approach is practical as a good salary and an enjoyable job are not necessarily contradictory in today's diversified job market.
harry137181143   
Jun 1, 2014
Writing Feedback / [IELTS] FUTURE INFORMATION TECHNOLOGY: POSITIVE OR NEGATIVE? [7]

Your essay is a good example for us on how to use varied vocabulary and sentence structures. But I do think you can be more detailed when discussing the negative effects of IT, say, Facebook.
harry137181143   
Jun 1, 2014
Writing Feedback / IELTS: Learning a foreign language at elementary school brings lots of benefits [6]

Question: Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? ( Cambridge English IELTS 9, Test 1, Task 2 )

In an era of globalisation, learning a foreign language becomes an important, if not fundamental, course in many countries, for its growing importance in international communication and global trade. And recently, some experts believe that it is better to start the course at primary school rather than secondary school. While doing so may be advantageous, it also has some disadvantages. And I do think its advantages outweigh its disadvantages.

Learning a foreign language at elementary school brings lots of benefits. To begin with, this can lay a sound foundation for the children. It is undeniable that to have a good grasp of a language, we must have solid base of the language. This should be done earlier at primary school in order to make the advanced studying process later more efficient. Besides, the learning process can be more interesting. Thanks to the strong curiosity of kids, they will find the study way more interesting than they will do at secondary school. Thus the stronger learning incentive can lead to a happier learning process as well as a better result. Moreover, it has been proved by scientific research that children are keen on emulating and accepting new knowledge. Therefore, through long-term immersion in the foreign language, primary students can learn the new language faster.

Apart from the above advantages, however, it may also bring detrimental effects on children. Firstly, it may bring undue pressure on primary students who deserve to have less pressure in childhood. Learning a foreign language at primary school means the set up of a new subject. Kids may then be stressed by a sharp increase in schoolwork. What's more, increasing their workload too much so early may interrupt their learning processes on other subjects, including their mother language. So this may in turn hinder their original development, as they lack the ability of planning and time management.

While it is true that this can have some disadvantages, I still believe its advantages outweigh its disadvantages. The foundation laid and increase in incentive due to their curiosity is invaluable for their future study on the foreign language. And the negative impact can be offset by clear subject planning of schools. So in conclusion, its benefits exceeds its drawbacks and it is desirable for schools to carry out this policy.

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