Writing Feedback / Making life better [5]

Could anyone read and give me some comment on my following essay?

Nowadays, the demand of people more increase with every passing day . Someboby is pull folow material so they work hard to buy things . This has made our lives generally more comfortable but many traditional values and custom have been lost . In my opinion , it is not a good way to make our life better .

In morden lifestyles , what the people think is that materials so important . However thay forget that our life is also some spirit values to balance .If everybody just work hard to earn money day by day and don't care about traditional values or custom , it is synonymous with their life become nonsensical .

The hightly valuable traditional and custom are symbol for country . Moreover it is pride of the Vietnamese race is imparted for later generations to remind their always maintain and develop the nation's tradition . That is a reason why we frequently celebrate Tet holiday or Death anniversary of Hung King .

In addition to , the nation 's tradition help us introduce to friends on over the world about home country and Vietnamese . Therefore the foreigner will visit our country more and bring many advantures cooperate in business to develop country .

In general , even though the life is so busy and the people try to make their life more comfortable , a responsibility of everyone is protect and bring into play the nation's tradition . If they have been lost it , so a pity .

Thank you very much!

Writing Feedback / IELTS Writing - "clean learning environment" [3]

Topic:

In order to study well, students need an attractive, clean learning environment. Universities and colleges could make efforts to provide this.

Education condition is more and more improving about provide more equipment better. Universities and colleges are one of place could be providing this. However, I would argue that besides clean studying environment also have many factors impact and above all is the sense of self.

Firstly, it can not denied that environment in universities and colleges where is providing clean atmosphere and effort for student study well. This can be seen by the fact that there are many books in library and modern facilities and you can use computer to surf information in internet. Especially, campus where has grassplots and tree and clean atmosphere for you convenient focus on study.

This brings me to my second point. In fact, good learn condition is not enough due to many factors effect. For instance, when you work with your friend or small group, then you and your team can improve each other. In addition, you go to practice also one of ways to have more experience from practical and other people.

Finally, above all is selves's consciousness in learning. This is show by poor student is both learned and worked because they do not time to library or go to practice that they still study well, even they get high achievement. Therefore, they realize aware of study is very important in both now and future.

All in all, as can be seen clearly that study well depend on good study condition , many factors impact and above all is belong to sense of self.

Writing Feedback / TOEFL Writing: 2 short essays (reading versus doing things; Neighbors) [6]

Topic1:
Some people learn by reading about things. Others learn by doing things. Which of these methods of learning is better for you? Use specific reasons and examples to support your choice.

Essay:
Actually, there are a lot of ways for you to learn something. In there, learning by reading and by doing is the most popular. By reading, we have a number of useful information, and by doing we give more experiences. Personally, I learn better by doing than by reading.

I realize that I can do something more and more skillful whenever I redo if I learn by doing it. It meant, after I have done it first time ,then I will improve to do it better. Although we get knowledge and method, we may find very difficult as first time starting to work out. For instance, you have all firmly acquaintance with engine but you can not fix as fluently as one has particular experiences. You do not also solve a problem as quick as one practiced so many times to make a perfect solution. Further, more things I do, more interesting I get. At school, most of students prefer studying with practical lessons to reading a boring book. The enjoyment in study is motivation for people to enrich themselves.

In conclusion, I would like discover everything by doing them. However, the method to do is also very essential ,and I do not think that it is useless to read the instruction before I perform one. After all, I want to touch the world by my hands, but it not just with my eyes.

Topic2:
Neighbors are the people who live near us. In your opinion, what are the qualities of a good neighbors ? Use specific details and examples in your answer.

Essay :
Nowadays, everyone always lives in a groups like in apartments or in wards. And we all have some neighbors. They may be good or bad. Luckily, I lives in a ward with pretty nice neighbors. In my opinion, the qualities that make a good neighbor are kindly and delicated, it meant, they are not so curious.

My neighbors was very friendly when the first day I moved in there. When I met them, I felt unusual. They could be lightly remarkable as first sight because of kindliness. They often help us when we need to. In example, before leaving for my summer vacation for a week, I were really worried; but my neighbors helped me make sure my house was Ok for a that week. It is truly nice ! Furthermore, they haven't annoyed my privacy. Actually, my prior neighbors were too nosy so I had to relocate in here, but my present neighbors were not. I have not complained about anything they did. In present, I and my neighbors became to be good friends and usually help each other.

Getting on well with a neighbor is really great. I am please when live with my current neighbors. They are so friendly and sociable. I also learn that if you want to have a good neighbor, firstly you have to be a good neighbor yourself.