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latkhan

Aug 1, 2014

Writing Feedback / IELTS: In many countries recently young single people have been living far from their parent [6]

In many countries recently young single people have been living far from their parent, from time they began studies or work and until they married. Do you think there are more advantages or disadvantages to this trend?

Students and workers mobility is ever increasing trend. In current economic climate it has become more common for young adults to relocate. This is often due to local circumstance or the desire to gain higher education for their later careers. I believe it advantages outweigh its disadvantages.

Perhaps, the major argument that is made in favor of this trend is financial. Typically, young people travel for better financial prospects and opportunities available to broaden their skills for their future careers. For example it is often notice and identified that the unemployment rate in rural areas is much higher as compared to urban regions due weak trade and unstable infrastructure, which results in lack of employment opportunities for young local residents. Therefore young individuals prefer to travel to different regions to achieve financial stability and gain practical experience for their later careers. [..]

latkhan

Aug 4, 2014

Writing Feedback / IELTS: In many countries recently young single people have been living far from their parent [6]

Pahan and dumi thank you for your valuable feedback i totally agree with your comments that my introduction fails to do the job i believe i have misunderstood the question after going through the question again i have re-written the essay. i truly appreciate your feedback and comments

In current economic climate it has become more common for young adults to relocate, this is often due to better employment prospects or to gain higher education for their later careers. Although there are some drawbacks young individual faces living far from their home yet I believe its advantages outweigh its disadvantages.

Perhaps, the major advantage for students living by themselves is it helps them to gain practical confidence. Typically, young people, while living with their parents do not have frequent liberty to deal with practical world .For example living by own provides them the opportunity to deal with people from all walks of life and this instills the sense of confidence in young adults. A further point is that people can broaden their skills and gain hands-on experience by engaging in employment opportunities available in other regions. Therefore, it is clear that living away from home can bring significant benefits and prepare youth for their future challenges.

While there are benefits to this trend, there are also a number of potential dangers. Perhaps the most serious of these would be that young children are not mature enough to distinguish reality form fiction and can easily get influenced by bad company. For example, recent studies have shown that there is higher probability for a young person to get addicted to drugs and crime due to lack of guidance and supervision from their guardians. Thus, this shows that allowing individuals to live far from their home can not only affects their lives negatively but also harm their parents in many ways.

To sum up, my views are on par with the idea that living by own provides an adolescent person opportunity to gain confidence and learn valuable skills for their practical life which are highly beneficial for themselves and society. However parents need to pay regular visits to their children's home to monitor their activities.

latkhan

Aug 4, 2014

Writing Feedback / IELTS: In many countries recently young single people have been living far from their parent [6]

Thanks for your prompt reply and pointing out my errors definitely I'll work on it. At the moment I'm struggling to improve my writing skills as I am targeting band 8 any suggestion to improve would be a great help.

latkhan

Aug 8, 2014

Writing Feedback / IELTS: Taxpayers don't need pay for public education system in which their children are not enrolled [2]

For instance, the recent bridge construction scam exposed by the media amounts to more than $100 million of public money. Situations like these demotivate the average tax payer.

For instance, the recent bridge construction scam exposed by the media amounts Where ?

I am new to this forum and trying to improve my writing skills.For me, your essay is perfect wish i could write like that. just one minor addition i would like to suggest i believe it would be better to be more specific and add a location in your example. That's my personal view and wait for others' comments :D

latkhan

Aug 8, 2014

Writing Feedback / Those who are aware of where to go, customs and life are likely to experience satisfactory journey [4]

Misunderstanding of culture would cause many problems for both sides : the native and the foreigner.

Take for example someone who use body language without taking into account inhabitants' culture, would insulting religious customs

For me this is bit unclear, its better to use one example per paragraph to avoid confusion

Misunderstanding of culture would cause many problems for both sides : the native and the foreigner. ~~Take for example someone who use body language without taking into account inhabitants' culture, would insulting religious customs~~
For instance, in Muslim countries shaking hand with alien women is forbidden; Moreover wearing scarf and loose-fitting clothes is common among Muslims nations due to feeling secure as written in holy Quran

Well i am a learner too, trying to improve my writing skills these are my personal views lets wait for others to comments :D

latkhan

Aug 10, 2014

Writing Feedback / IELTS : Lately more and more work has to be done by machines. [3]

Lately more and more work has to be done by machines. Do you think positive effects of this development outweigh the negative effects on individual and society?

Many organizations and factories have revolutionized their workforce by adopting automated system to meet the growing demand of today's business world yet it is argued that, this transition has negative impact on workers and communities. In my view, its benefits outweigh its drawbacks.

Perhaps, the major argument that is made against this development is, it may result in higher unemployment rate. This means, a single machine can easily make hundreds of employees redundant. Moreover, People failing to support their families may instill the sense of injustice and resentment and this is often one of the reasons that, people turn to crime to fulfill their basic needs of life, when they are unable to find work. Thus, this clearly shows that replacing humans with machines to perform jobs can cause irreparable damage to both, individuals and societies.

However, while there are some drawbacks to this approach, there are also numbers of potential benefits to this technology. Firstly, machines can perform work more efficiently in comparison to human employees as these automated machines are carefully designed to utilize less resource and increase productivity. Secondly, there are occasions where it is more sensible to use machines than to perform jobs manually such as, coal mining industry, where workers health can be seriously affected and even sometimes put their lives in grave danger. Lastly, this technology encourages people to learn new skills and enforce societies to educate rather being stuck for lifetime of unskilled job. Therefore, as a result, this development can improve productivity, save lives and even educate societies.

In conclusion, I believe, it is highly vital to adopt this development if we need to survive in today's competitive world. However, governments and authorities should establish regulations to overcome unemployment rate and compensate people by providing them trainings and more skill-full employment opportunities.

latkhan

Aug 10, 2014

Writing Feedback / Not only governments and big companies are responsible for environment but also the whole community [2]

Some people think that the responsibility for improving in environment constitutes the governments' and big companies'. In my opinion, I disagree with this perspective because, there are enormous ways which can be done by each individual to make our surrounding environment become better and heathier.

For me your introduction is bit unclear, I have rephrased your introduction. However i am a learner too, trying to improve my writing skills these are my personal views let's wait for others to comments: D

Some people think that, governments and big companies are responsible for improving the environment. However, in my opinion, I disagree with this perspective as there are enormous ways for individuals to contribute.

latkhan

Aug 10, 2014

Writing Feedback / IELTS: Living away from parents provide youngsters opportunity to meet variety of new people [8]

In recent years, Major cities have seen unprecedented growth and have become land of opportunities for all of us. Consequently, youngsters from small cities or even from large cities have to relocate for work or studies. This relocation has both advantages and disadvantages, however, overall, I think the advantages are far more than disadvantages.

Please do check i have written essay on similar topic. anyhow your essay is nice keep practicing.I have rephrased your introduction. However i am a learner too, trying to improve my writing skills these are my personal views let's wait for others to comments: D

In current economic climate it has become more common for young adults to relocate and this is often due to better employment prospects or to gain higher education for their later careers. Although there are some drawbacks young individual face living far from their home yet I believe its advantages outweigh its disadvantages.

latkhan

Aug 12, 2014

Writing Feedback / IELTS: Living away from parents provide youngsters opportunity to meet variety of new people [8]

Thanks for the correction see this is how we learn and improve. please if you have time do check my other essays too.
best of luck

latkhan

Aug 12, 2014

Writing Feedback / IELTS :Some people think that professional athletes make good role models for young people [5]

Some people think that professional athletes make good role models for young people, while others believe they don't.
Discuss both these points of views and give your own opinion.

The role sports stars plays in today's society have raised many doubts. Some people believe it is beneficial for a young individual to follow their national heroes yet others assert that it could harm youth in many ways. This essay will discuss both views before stating my opinion.

Perhaps, the major argument that is made in favor of idealizing a sport player is related to patriotism. Indeed, watching their favorite super stars preforming for their country usually instills the sense of pride. For example, when a player represents and wins for their nation it makes the whole young generation proud and increases their love and support for the country. A further point is that, following a sports player encourages a young person to adopt a healthy and disciplined lifestyle, as players often require maintaining a strict discipline to perform for their people. Thus, it clearly shows that sport athletes can have a great influence on young adults.

However, while they have positive influence on youth, there are also potential dangers following these so called national heroes. With the fame and money some player's insatiable greed for wealth also grows. For example, recently, many cricket stars were found guilty in match fixing cases. Incidents like this could seriously affect young individual's personality. In addition to that, young children are not mature enough to distinguish reality and fiction, especially when they cannot afford a lavish lifestyle as their role models leads them to the feeling of inadequacy and dissatisfaction. As a result, imitating national heroes can negatively influence young people.

In conclusion, I believe, sports celebrities plays a vital role in inspiring young generation, Although at times they can negatively influence youth yet an overwhelming majority of young generation is sensible enough to decide what is right for them.

latkhan

Aug 12, 2014

Writing Feedback / IELTS :Some people think that professional athletes make good role models for young people [5]

Thanks for your kind words, I truly appreciate your time and effort for helping me and I must say, I have learn a lot from your corrections. Please keep up the good work.

Thanks again.

latkhan

Aug 20, 2014

Writing Feedback / IELTS: Regulation regarding advertisements' unnecessary impact on people's lives [5]

It is always advisable that when a new item launch in the market, respective advertisement should be aired before to make it appraised among the people

For me this line is bit unclear. i believe in this paragraph its better to just discuss advantages, well i am new to this forum and trying to improve my writing skills , wait for others to comment.

latkhan

Aug 22, 2014

Writing Feedback / Learn variety of cultures, traditions by engaging with local people and visiting historical places [2]

When visiting foreign countries, visitors should take full advantage of learning the culture and traditions of that country. How can they learn about the culture and traditions? Why do some visitors strive to learn about culture and traditions while other are not interested at all?

Many travelers make great effort to learn the culture and customs of the country they visit, yet some visitors have other preferences. This essay will analyze both point of views and discuss the ways to gain cultural and traditional knowledge.

There are several ways travelers can learn about various cultures and customs while traveling. Perhaps, the easiest way is, by interacting with the local inhabitants. This will not only open up their mind, eyes and heart to a different way of life but this would also encourage understanding each other. For example, dinning in a local restaurant will provide them the opportunity to gain knowledge of traditional food and customs. In addition to that, travelers can also visit places of historic value and gain knowledge of their history and traditions.

People of course travel for various reasons and tourism is the top of these reasons. Indeed, it is possible to say that, many people are passionate to learn different cultures and customs and for this reason they love to travel. However, there are also people who travel to escape form their day to day routine and prefer to spend their time to relax rather to explore new culture and customs. Take Barbados for example, people travel there to enjoy their holidays and relax by spending time in front of the beach and they have less interest in learning new traditions. Thus, it is fairly easy to understand why people have different interest in learning various cultures and traditions.

In conclusion, undoubtedly, traveling provides the opportunity to learn variety of cultures' and traditions by engaging with local people and visiting historical places. However, people travel for different purposes and have limited time to learn new traditions.