Acioncion
Jan 15, 2015
Undergraduate / Helping others is as my second nature - UT Austin Upper Division Nursing Class Application Essay [3]
I like your essay, I think it's full of enthusiasm and energy. As my English grammar is not so good, I can tell anything about this aspect. Talking about the content,there is only one point in the end of your essay which is difficult to accept for me is that you said "I can assure you that I have never met anyone in my carer who has regretted making me part of their clinical team. " From my prospective is little bit exaggerating to say that you know what people really think, but maybe it attracted my eye because of cultural background, according to it being modest is a virtue. Wish you best luck to get into this university!
I like your essay, I think it's full of enthusiasm and energy. As my English grammar is not so good, I can tell anything about this aspect. Talking about the content,there is only one point in the end of your essay which is difficult to accept for me is that you said "I can assure you that I have never met anyone in my carer who has regretted making me part of their clinical team. " From my prospective is little bit exaggerating to say that you know what people really think, but maybe it attracted my eye because of cultural background, according to it being modest is a virtue. Wish you best luck to get into this university!