Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 1 - The hierarchical structure in a marketing company [5]

Then, the third is who fill the position as advertising executive, he is Mr. Gartner.

She is Ms. Clack who occupies as an Advertising Manager.

Writing Feedback / Attention should be given to colour schemes when decorating places such as offices and hospitals [5]

Hi, thanks for your feedback :)

here my suggestions

Google Company uses many attractive colours which are based on their theme, >> passive

This is because of lack of attention towards colour for decorating the building. For instance, if a patient or employee has dark-coloured room, patient is going towill feel depressed, and worker will feel bored. >> parallel structure

overall is remarkable, I know you will do better ..

Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 2 - The major cities in the world are growing fast, as well as their problems [6]

Hi madmoiselle ,, thank you for ur feedback
Majority of the cities have been developingflourishingrapidly recently. This growing, leads to the problem that mademakes it harder thefor young people struggle .

... accommodations are higher than in the urban rural al[/b] areas. This is due to the firm competition of business among city dwellers is firm .

... many of them prefer using their own vehicle torather than using public transportation.
... bottleneck is the problem that makes the youngsters struggle.

For instance, they should not buy unnecessary items, should more often eat more at home ...
Therefore, teenagersthey arewill be able to save deposit for a rainy day.

However, the problems they facingface are a challenge, in order to they become a goodremarkable citizens who are able to adapt ...

Writing Feedback / Improved medical care. With many recent major breakthroughs in medication, humans are now accessible [4]

Hi, here some suggestions

As far as I'm concerned I concern[/b], the positiveseffectsmay outweigh all the drawbacks.
As a result, people are given more chances to fulfil their innumerable wishes and gain a lot moreof experiences while living.

... leading toa tranquil and peaceful lifestyle with their family's whole-hearted appreciation.

However, human's life expectancy being lenghthened has a detrimental ..

... human may be forced to come to terms with a large number of crisisescrises= plural .

In addition, a multitude of people making use of transports engenders traffic jam, noise, air pollution contributing adversely to the environment.

On balance, bettered medical care helps us lead a more blissful, dedicative and adventurous life ...

well, be careful of misspelling
and as a result is connector in mini conclusion
and sorry, I couldn't find the meaning of lenghthened and dedicative words