Writing Feedback / Question one, two and three - several introduction of IELTS task 2 [2]

Question 1 : as global trade increases, many goods, including those we use on a daily basis, are produced in other and have to be transported long distance.

Do the benefits of this trend outweigh the drawbacks?

Introduction :
The increasing of global trade leads several countries in distributing some kinds of daily needs and it needs long distances to allocate them. However, there are several advantages and disadvantages of this trend.

Question 2 : in many countries, children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong while others consider it as valuable work experience.

Discuss both opinions and give your opinion

Introduction :
These days, children are involved in several kinds of paid work in many parts of the world. Children workers are bastard based on some people opinions while others think that they will be extravagant for the future because of having a lot of work experiences. In my view, children are better to focus on education than work. However, some children have reasons why they need to have a job.

Question 3 : Unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programs (for example, working for a charity, improving the neighborhood, or teaching sports to younger children).

To what extend do you agree or disagree?

Introduction:
Learning in unpaid community service becomes one of the obligation subjects in senior high school for instance, working for a charity, improving the neighborhood, or teaching sports to younger children. There are several reasons why I believe that learning in unpaid community service has several advantages to the senior school students.

Writing Feedback / How to See the Upcoming 'Great American Eclipse' (SUMMARY) [3]

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news.nationalgeographic.com/2016/08/how-to-see-american-solar-eclipse-2017/

How to see the upcoming "great American eclipse"
Since 1979, total eclipse never crosses American continent but in August 2017 you can get a scarce experience in your life because the total eclipse will cross the continental U.S.

On August 21, 2017, for the first time since 1979, the shadow of a total solar eclipse will sweep from sea to shining sea, following a 8.600-mile path that takes it from Oregon to South Carolina.

It can be predicted that almost 200 million Americans will come to Carbondal, Illinois to see the total solar eclipse. Therefore, if you want to get the best viewing spot, you should make your travel plans now.

If you miss this celestial event, there will be another total solar eclipse in the United States, sweeping from California to Florida, on August 12, 2045. Therefore, you need to be patient to wait this celestial event.

Writing Feedback / Citizens obligation and business cooperation - "Only large companies can improve environment" [2]

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Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment. Only large companies and businesses can make difference.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The improvement of environment only can be handled by huge companies and businesses, while people are too limited to make difference on this issue. Although, those companies and businesses have pivotal role in this issue, but from my own perspective, every person also can make our surroundings neat and tidy.

The large firms have possession to contribute the environmental improvement. The firms could maintain the employees' life to keep the environment clean and the firm could manage the waste disposal. Therefore, the waste of factory could not flow to the river. Besides that, the firms could raise public awareness easily through some approaches, for instance make public service advertising and promote it to society. By making this advertising can attract people to keep the environment and become an alarm to the society in their life.

However, every individual has obligation to take care the environment. There several ways that the people could do to save the environment, such as throwing rubbish in the right place, controlling the use of water and using public transportation to reduce the amount of smoke that be produced by private vehicles. By using public transportation, it could decline the rate of pollution. Furthermore, people need to work together in maintaining these ways. As a human being, we need to remind the people in cleaning the surroundings.

To sum up, the huge enterprises and business should cooperate in making good environment for the future. Furthermore, the citizen should realize their obligation to keep their surroundings clean and it could be started from small thing. Thus, every elements of society need to pull together for better environment.