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Name: Jimi C
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JCWinner   
Oct 22, 2016
Writing Feedback / Car accidents frequently caused by reckless drivers than faulty vehicles [2]

Car accidents frequently caused by reckless drivers than faulty vehicles

An objective narrative essay



While waiting for the bus I heard screeching noise followed by a very loud bang. Everyone turned their heads around to investigate where the sound came from. Then, we discovered it was a car accident at the intersection. Two cars collided almost head on; a large Ford SUV with a smaller Honda station wagon. Immediately, I followed with some onlookers ran toward to the accident scene trying to help.

The SUV was slightly larger and higher than the Honda. The Honda had significant damages. The collision caused both car windshields shattered. The Honda's radiator was totally smashed by SUV's front bumpers. Hot water with steam was leaking onto the road. The impact was so great that the Honda's hood pressed into half barely hang on the car. Broken glasses and debris from the headlights and windshields were scattered distance away from both vehicles.

I look through the car door windows and saw two men inside the Honda car pinned on their seats with inflated airbags. The driver was conscious and struggled to release himself from the airbag and seat belt. The passenger was trembling with both hands holding the inflated airbag. Broken glasses were all over on the dash top penal, but I did not notice any blood. The car engine was running with black smoke and a strong odor of gasoline. People attempted conscientiously to pull open the car doors to release the men. It was impossible since both doors were jammed or locked from inside.

The driver of the SUV was in a state of shock. However, he managed to step out from his car. He was mumbling and nobody understood him, strong smell of alcohol on his breath. Meanwhile, I heard fire truck siren approaching and I quickly walked back to the bus terminate. It was a horrific experience to witness a car accident.

An subjective narrative essay



Michael and I were listening to the news on the car radio. Suddenly, we noticed a large SUV approaching from the opposite direction. It seemed like the driver lost control and was speeding directly toward us. I heard Michael kept shouting at me to watch out. Instantly, he attempted to slam the break as hard as he could to stop the car to avoid the collision. However, the car brake was screeching caused the car shook violently skidded sideways.

Either Michael's was too slow to react or the speed of the SUV was too fast. I was horrific to see the SUV almost in front of me. Immediately my reaction was to hold my head on my knee. When the SUV hit us and I felt a vicious jolt likes I was falling off a roller coaster. It was such a great impact that I sensed the inflated airbag hit my face like a knockout punch, aggressively struck me toward my seat.

I was in a state of shock and struggled to release the seatbelt. My whole body was numb and trembling. I wanted to scream for help but was speechless. My rapid heartbeat felt like a big rock rested on my chest. The smell of gasoline was frightening that enough to kill me. I heard noises, but could not distinguish where it came from. It was like a nightmare I was afraid to open my eyes and fearful to sleep again. Finally, I heard a faint sound of siren like a dream I slowly regained my awareness.
JCWinner   
Oct 23, 2016
Writing Feedback / Large number students in the class don't help them to focus enough [2]

Hi cachaaa,
Interesting essay. however, a couple of points I am not clear. Perhaps, you should make some changes or insert additional details.

Are you talking about class sizes for school children? college? or university?

Can you include any research findings or suggestion from the experts e.g. high school in Singapore have maximum 20 students per class (Time Magazine, 2013). In Canada some special needs children receive almost one to one tutor because of their learning abilities. (Ascool.ca )

Hope that helps,
JC
JCWinner   
Oct 23, 2016
Writing Feedback / Common Painkillers 'increase heart failure risk' [6]

Hi sari
My suggestion for this sentences..

For young people who consume the painkiller regularly, their kidneys ...

Research findings show that regular consumption of this drug might cause kidneys failure. especially for young people. It is advisable to understand the harms and benefits.

Cheer,
JC
JCWinner   
Jan 5, 2017
Essays / How to write an essay in World Poverty - answering some questions [3]

I need to write a 10 pages research paper on

"World poverty"



Can someone please suggestion some guidelines what to write since the subject is so broad.

Or direct me where to seek for it..

I was thinking to answer some questions such as;

What is poverty?
What caused world poverty?
How to eliminate poverty?
The future?

Any suggestions are appropriated !!!
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