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Posts by festivo [Suspended]
Name: Utsav Bhetwal
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Last Post: Nov 10, 2016
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festivo   
Nov 9, 2016
Graduate / SOP - a course that will broaden my knowledge base and challenge me to work harder [2]

what i think is you can deduct your low moment category if you really require 3 page of applicaiton because it can be easily seen in your transcript, and whatever you have written in that is indifferent to the professor of the university and even they don't show any sympathy on you for your admission in graduation program.
festivo   
Nov 9, 2016
Writing Feedback / The university should not discriminate people based on gender, religion, culture, etc. [3]

University should accept equal numbers of males and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

For a person to be intellectually capable, university education satiates his/her desire. The university should not discriminate people based on gender, religion, culture and so on. The question here arises that should there be equal number of man and woman students in every subjects the university have. In my opinion, such type of obligation is irrelevant in any of the university because of the following reasons.

Firstly, the university mightn't' have any kind of records that how many students, male and female, are going to study in any particular field. Even if they know the number of students either through the application form or by any means, it is ridiculous to admit equal number of students in any field because sometimes there might be more girl's application and some other times there might be more boy's application. Ultimately, it hampers the overall system of the university and rights of the student to choose the field of course they want to study.

Secondly, there are some field where there are only girls such as in nursing, air hostess and so on. In such kind of field, there will be no man and what if the university wants equal number of man and woman in such field. Won't the program go fail. Of course, the university can not run its program.

In sum, though it is nice to think about the gender equality in every subject the university have, such thing can never happen in any university because the process of choosing the field is dynamic in nature. The applicants in any field changes over time. Hence the university can not make same number of male and female students in every subject it provides.
festivo   
Nov 8, 2016
Writing Feedback / Does tourism has greater advantages? No doubt it has direct impact on the socio-economic condition [4]

Some countries have come to rely on tourism as their major source of income. However, many people believe that the problems caused by tourism are more serious than those it has solved. Discuss both views. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Tourism, one of the leading industry in most of the countries, has direct impact on the socio-economic condition of the people living in that country. But also, it has negative impact on the cultural, religious and environmental sectors as it tends to change the uniqueness of the countries where they visit.

Tourism industry has great advantage in improving the lifestyle of the local people and hence it improves the quality of life. It also helps in the modernization and because of the tourism, the development of the rural areas, introduction of newer technologies can be possible.

Despite the few advantages, tourism has brought numerous negative repercussions in its religious, cultural and linguistic aspects.Moreover, it has degraded the nature by polluting the nature. For example, in the route of Mt. Everest , once there has been recorded huge collection almost 1 ton of rubbish due to the haphazard spreading fo waste by tourists. A perfect example of cultural and religious deterioration was took place in the southern part of Thailand because of tourists. Similarly in Nepal, we can easily see that the clout of the western culture and religion is slowly spreading over time. The people are unnecessarily quibbling in trivial matters such as religion, language, culture and customs and so on that ultimately disturbing the unity of the people living here. In similar fashion, tourists even can bring violence in the country. Some tourists commute others intending to harm such as spreading some noisome scandals that can hamper the serenity of the country. Even some tourists can involve in criminal activities like girls trafficking, drugs dealing and decimating activities. Once in Nepal, there found 3 tourists who were actively participating in the revolutionary campaign. Therefore, tourism has greater negative effects than its counterparts.

To recapitulate, tourism can be the most important source of income generating activities of one country, but one must analyze its negative aspects. The government officials must be meticulous whether its positive aspects is greater or not.
festivo   
Nov 8, 2016
Writing Feedback / The types of things purchased in five regions of the world in 2002 is provided by the table [4]

I think the question is just like the ielts writing task-1 and you have written in a similar fashion. Your task achievement is wonderful as you have separated the paragraphs nicely. Your word selection is also nice and has got great cohesion in your writing.

If it is a long essay, then you must elaborate a bit more on this topic. Otherwise it seems nice to me.
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