Writing Feedback / Writing IELTS task 1 - Inflow of Foreign Workers in Australia 1992-2001 [2]

australia - destination for the jobseekers

The chart shows the changes in the number of workers immigrating into Australia over period of nine years

Overall, Temporary workers had bigger numbers of people rather than worker who become permanent settlers. Furthermore, both kind of workers had similar trend in last few years.

In 1992, around 40,000 people came to Australia becoming permanent settlers while the number of people who emigrated temporarily at slightly under 15,000. The patterns were always similar which permanent workers had larger number of people rather than transient one until 1996. Temporary community reached double rank from 15,000 to over 30,000 in 1997 and it gradually rose to peak at 45,000 in 2001. Whereas permanent settlers started at 20,000 and it slowly grew to approximately 35,000 in the same period.

Transient employees fluctuated in number to 15,000 from 1992 to 1996. However, it increased dramatically in 1997 that numbered more than 30,000 and steadily peaked at 45,000 in 2001. Even though permanent labour force had great number in 1992, it was also stable around 20,000 from 1993 to 1997. The numbers increased significantly in 1998 at over 25,000. The workers rose in number noticeably and had 35,000 employees in 2001.

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Writing Feedback / Driving offenders must face consequences [2]

Some people think that strict punishment for driving offenses are the key to reduce traffic accidents. Other, however, believe that other measures could be more effective in improving road safety.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

serious law enforcement for reckless drivers

It is common believe that traffic lawbreakers should be sentenced to severe punishment is preferred solution to answer the high rank of traffic accidents. While other though said that constructing enchanted infrastructures to improve physical safety of road should exceed more positive impacts. I personally believe that bold decision to make proper punishment would be better to overcome this issue.

It is general for highway to be equipped by traffic tools to ensure users are comfort and safe. For instance, it is an obligation for local authority providing sufficient numbers of traffic signs particularly in area where it has more risk to crash to occur. Those would be very helpful for public to be noticed when they are spotted in right place. In contrast, the warnings should cost much expense of budget while it continues to use in future because high numbers of signs do not identically reflect the success of traffic accidents reducing.

On the other hand, user's attitude and behaviour would impact more benefits through serious law enforcement. This kind of measure could be executed by officers to sentence the offenders with equal punishment with no exception from all of groups. Furthermore, it would educate people to understand how essential the law is in daily life where it should accidentally build the sense of law awareness. When the awareness are maintaining, preferable attitude in driving would be being part of habitual tradition. Thus, citizens may contribute to create a harmony to each other and to lead a firm obedience of official rules.

To sum up, traffic rules breaking which causes more accidents should be tackled by firmly practical regulation for those who offend. It is cost-effective and most suitable to vouch the rules would be obeyed by public.

Writing Feedback / Traffic jumps are observed in many cities in the world. Writing IELTS task 2 about car belonging [4]

The cars belonging are increasing by last 30 years. It causes many traffic jumps in many cities in the world. What causes of this issue? What action should government do to overcome?

Nowadays, people involve the car as the property that should possess in their life. The ownership of car is growing in number for the last three decades. Hence, that account for traffic congestion in various cities in the world. I believe that there are reasons which are responsible and attempts that government should take to tackle this issue.

The possible reason is public transports have failed to produce proper services for people. As we see, most public transports treat the passengers as they wish. They may drive with the relatively high speed making people be afraid and feel uncomfortable. Besides, the driver may also give unfriendly services as they just do their duty. Many passengers should feel that government is careless of what they experience. For example, in Indonesia, large numbers of minibuses for domestic service might have loss attention in quality of service. Frequently, they would have out of passengers in one time route so the numbers of seats are unavailable. It is more likely recommended for government creating the pure quality of public transport management to cover the amount of demands.

Furthermore, people could easily own new car by credit payment services that is provided by private agencies. Cash payment should not be highly required of the system because it allows people to have the car through the several times of payment. Thus, it is encouraging public to take the chance to have car even more than one in once. I think that the government should intervene this trend by introducing the laws regarding to this issue that include the management and technical measures to accommodate the people's effort in belonging cars.

In summarize, the causes of this term might come from the improper management in transport affairs. It should be handled by government to solve.