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kurnia   
Dec 8, 2016
Writing Feedback / People can freely choose clothes they like, while they cannot be assessed from their appearance [3]

Q: some people say that the clothes people wear are the most important indication of what they are like. Others, however, say that people should not be judged by the clothes they wear.

Answer:
In the last decade, there has been a considerable debate whether people can be judge from what they wear. It is undeniable to say that people can freely choose clothes they like while they cannot be assessed from their appearance. However, honestly I totally agree about that contention, because someone is eligible to choose clothes which they like.

In fact, the majority of people in the world contend that their looks is pointing out their images, particularly their behavior and attitude. It can be happen because many of people often assumed of others according their appearance. However, in my opinion , everyone should be not doing that because someone has a unique style which is diverse with others. For instance, someone who admire a rock star would imitate how his idol looks like. Nevertheless, his personality is very different from his idol. While the person he like is violent, he does not. In short, we cannot judge people characteristic from their appearance.

In addition, certain people also tend to wear clothes according colour, for example someone only like to wear blue t-shirt and blue jeans. Furthermore, some people like to wear anything clothes but it must comfortable to them. In my point of view, it is no matter to someone wearing anything, nevertheless the main important it must polite and suitable for occasion. For instance someone wear fence clothes when attend funeral occasion. I think is not suitable and very impolite.

To sum up, briefly, regarding that issue, I would like to reiterate that every people do not eligible to judge others according their looks and style because clothes not certain determine people's behavior.
kurnia   
Dec 8, 2016
Writing Feedback / Jamie Oliver has started a social project, called food revolution. [2]

Hello faiz,
Here my advice for you, hope it can help you and feel free to correction me too.

First, when you summarize from article or video particularly in TED, please using less common vocabulary which diverse with original one. you must paraprase with new word, you can search in Oxford thesaurus, but you must alter with proper vocab, and must connect with previous word.

Second, do you know idioms? if you know, USING IT! it can help you to make your summarize better.
kurnia   
Dec 8, 2016
Writing Feedback / Supervisor vs co-employees - the graph show about result of survey to employee [5]

The graph show about result of survey to employees regarding their activity involves with their supervisor and co-employees in 2005 and 2009. The most significant facts to emerge from the pie graph are that employees who answer very good become the biggest result according that survey, and there was a slight increase in 2005 and 2009.

As can be clearly seen, that in 2005 employees who do not have a supervisor and also co-employees are equal only 1 percent. In addition, who answer fair has a few different. Moreover, in 2009 who answer do not have supervisor and co-employees increased slightly, otherwise who answer fair was dramatic fell.

From the graph, as we know most of employees has tend to has good relationship with co-employees than supervisor, it was showed from answer which were resulted very good and good where co-employees was higher than supervisor in 2005 and 2009.
kurnia   
Dec 8, 2016
Writing Feedback / Businesses have many essential purposes, such as profits and decreasing the unemployment [3]

Hello Yurike,
Here my advice for you

1. please you must check what 250 words look like in your own handwriting
2 you must give example from your own experience if asked
3. Use idioms and expression which image your answer
4. Use punctuation correctly

this my advice to make you has higher score:
1. Read many essay topics
2. Read many sample essays
3. Know the right structure for all essay types
4. Know when to give your opinion

thankyou
kurnia   
Dec 8, 2016
Writing Feedback / The occurrence of heat loss and energy waste in the house comes from many household appliances [5]

Hello yuri,
Here my advice for you

The process of air leaking out of and into the house which affect >> (effect is noun > using affect is suitable for your sentence because is verb )

I think your sentences, consist of many error grammatical and repeated words, if you want to repair your essay, you must start from vocabulary spelling and grammar such as sentence agreement and singular plural. thanks
kurnia   
Dec 6, 2016
Writing Feedback / Writing task 1 (The graph shows information about kinds of important communication ability) [5]

The graph shows information about kinds of important communication ability which asked to workers in 1997 and 2006. The most significant facts from the graph are that skills which asked by surveyors divided into 2 types are internal and external communication. The most esential skill according the survey is dealing with people.

As can be clearly seen, almost all of percentage of people who answer the survey was increased, besides selling a product of service was moderate decrease from 24 in 1997 to 21 in 2006. The most grow up percentage was listening carefully to collegues, from 38 in 1997 and rose dramatically to 47 in 2006. Otherwise, the ability of planning the activities of other just rose slightly by 1 in 2006.

The graph also shows that dealing with people was most popular answer than other. Even the percentage of that increase from 60 in 1997 to 65 in 2006.
kurnia   
Dec 6, 2016
Writing Feedback / The Truth of Turkey and Tryptophan [9]

Dear Yurike,
here my advice for you. your writing actually good, but you write so short sentence, so I'm very confused to correction your writing. while write sentence don't forget fulfill the sentence with complex sentence agreement. and there are certain error grammarar and i will give my correction for you. so, feel free to correction me to.

The turkey's meat has a bad ... > (you can alter with this) The turkey's meat has a bad reputation because to can cause eaters sleepy
kurnia   
Dec 6, 2016
Writing Feedback / Reduced number of people who keep in touch with others and disrupted personal relationship [6]

The globalization era, the majority of people have accustomed to use electronic media. However, it caused numerous problems such as reduced number of people who keep in touch with others and disrupted personal relationship. I personally disagree with that idea, because my opinion electronic media has more positive impact than negative effect.

Furthermore, as we know that most of people always using electronic media in their life particularly to communicate with others. Nevertheless, they forget about meet face to face is more important. Even, in a new study, the researchers find that the average people who using handphone or electronic media reach approximately 10-12 hours in a day.

In my point of view, actually there are many advantages from electronic media such as, we can find information easily from my handphone everytime and everywhere. When we want to intensify own knowledge and discover new thing we just click on google to find it. Then electronic media also cheaper and more convenience than other media. In the past we usually keep in touch with family,friends using mail post, but now we just type to keyboard and sending directly to receiver.

In conclusion, electronic media is essential for our life. It can make our life easier particularly to get mush information and connect with people, but unconsciously it can disturb our relationship with surroundings. However, in my view electronic media still become most important thing and cannot stop to using it.