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Posts by Datnguyen
Name: Dat Nguyen
Joined: Mar 23, 2017
Last Post: Mar 27, 2017
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From: Viet Nam
School: Ho Chi Minh

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Datnguyen   
Mar 26, 2017
Writing Feedback / Writing IELTS TASK 2 - Topic: Paper NEWS importance [3]

Please comment, Please check and correct my mistakes (Grammar and Vocabulary)

TOPIC: Although more and more people read the news on the internet, newspaper will remain the most important source of news for the majority of people. Do you agree or disagree with that statement?

News Printed and Online



Advances in technology have given impact on life of people. Some people believe that despite the widespread popularity of online media, but traditional newspaper still hold the most vital position among news readers. In my perspective, the news on the internet will has become important role than printed newspaper.

It is true that have many reasons to attract people read news on the internet. First of all, the news of source is easy access huge storage of news, you only type the keyword and wait for a few seconds. Secondly, online media is quickly update information by hours. In fact, for example terrorist attacks, would be updated immediately on CNN or other online media. By contrast, with process waste time editing and printing, traditional newspaper might not compete with the internet in terms of the updating speed. Besides, one limitation of newspaper is that it can not convey visual messages to people who read news on a regular basis. Meanwhile, online media has allowed you to upload photos, voice records and videos on online websites. For instance, football fans can re-watch their favorite matches anytime they want with only a laptop connected to the internet, which a paper can not do.

In conclusion, I absolutely disagree that printed paper would continue to be the role of importance because more and more people will use the internet who will be receive benefits from it.
Datnguyen   
Mar 26, 2017
Writing Feedback / Fastfood is good or bad for our lives? [5]

@AndreiWindy
AndreiWindy, Your essay is quite good, you have presented a somewhat impressive essay. You have used simple vocabularies and linking words to make reader can easy understand what you want to convey. However, I think you should quote figures to prove your opinion and maybe attract attention from reader.

I believe that it can easily score a 5 with this essay!
Datnguyen   
Mar 26, 2017
Writing Feedback / "The importance of biodiversity" task 2 writng module IELTS [4]

@Sabrena_amal
Sabrena, In my opinion, I think you need more support sentences for each thesis (Use examples or further explanation to support the claim made in the topic sentence). Besides, you are not necessary argument in this essay. You should give mean point in first sentence of paragraphs to reader can understand what you mean.
Datnguyen   
Mar 23, 2017
Writing Feedback / Writing IELTS TASK 2 - Topic: Tourism - influence for visited places. [6]

Topic: Some people say that tourism has many negative effects on the countries that people travel to. How true is this statement? What can tourists do to reduce the harmful effects of tourism on local cultures and environments? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience.

Tourism Growth



Nowadays, the growth of tourism and the numbers of people traveling to other countries for their holidays have led to discuss about it has many negative effects on the places. In my view, I think that the tourism have also benefits for economies and yourself.

First of all, for individual, it helps in spreading of culture. We can learn more knowledge such as: life styles, foods, experience and so on. For instance, when you go to Thailand you can discover culinary which existing and interesting, you understand what they do in everyday or traditional vacations. Moreover, you will be attractive by customs of people in this place. Secondly, the traveling with my friends make us become closer and has great time together. Specially, you have never forgotten with memories of talking photos. In contrast, It has some harmful that not only environment but also personality impacts. You waste a lot money and time preparing for journey. The addition, the solid wasting and littering influence environment pollution issue, cause the death of marine animals. All of them lead us to question "What can tourist do to increase the disadvantage effects of tourism?" You should make detail plans before you start as soft skills for communication and survival, knowledge about international law to prepare for emergency causes and the most important is journey energy of you. The next, the investor should build green resorts, environment friendly, more trash bin, encourage tourist protection and harmony with nature. The tourist should use green transportation to reduce air pollution and the noise.

In summary, tourism brings benefit for people, but it still negative impacts so the governments and individuals need good ways to solve and increase effects. People have to responsible about environment for places where they want to travel.