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newworld   
Aug 14, 2008
Essays / Help with an Argument/research essay about "Animals in research" [9]

Hello Gloria,
Thanks for your editing. I feel bad, I made you more work. I will work on your comments.
I use MLA style. I will recheck again. Here I have some doubts. CAn you please clarify those please?
There is no words to about your help. I really apriciate it.
Thanks a lot
Newworld.

1.For this , I got this whole paragraph fom PETA animal Times magazine. The part before qouation that I paraphrased. After that I use the quation mark. Is this right or do I need to show the source in between? please explain to me.

Also In laboratories mice and rats are commonly used. There is no law required to protect this kind of animals with pain medication or veterinary care. So they are infected with disease, cut open, poisoned, and killed with no pain relief. " In a recent study published in the journal Alternatives to Laboratory Animals (ATLA), researchers studied more than 100 cases in UK and US, rats and mice were used in "surgical or other potentially painful procedures" also found that post perative pain medication was given only 20% of the time" (PETA's Animal Times 20).

2.For this paragraph, I got this whole paragraph from the book (haugen 130). The quoation from the paragraph is already quoated. But i don't know how to write the quouations within the paragraph. Biologist is the publication name. Can you please help me.

"In biologist, according to zoology professor Edmunds, point of view on limiting experimentation, he believes that some research work should continue because of the medical and other reasons. But he also believes that some medical and biological scientist not seriously following the three Rs. They have a particular type of argument for several years; they see no reason to alter or abandon a "proven" procedure. Statements such as "there is no alternative to using animal for this type of work" (Where is this quote from?) are easy to make and difficult to either challenge or sustain with sound evidence. Too many physiologists and other researchers are simply not prepared to step back and themselves if they really should be doing so many experiments using live animals" (Haugen 130).

3.Here quote is not reproduced but those are the original staements. So I put quotations. IS that wrong?
By analyzing data, scientists trying to determine what behaviors put people at risk. For example, doctors understand causes of heart disease through the decades of medical survey. "Recently they have analyzed many cases of sudden infant death syndrome(SIDS). With this a healthy infant suddenly dies for an unexplained reason. Researchers have found that certain sleeping positions and overheated rooms may increase the risk of SIDS" (Woods 26). (Is this quote reproduced here exactly as in the original text?)
newworld   
Aug 13, 2008
Essays / Help with an Argument/research essay about "Animals in research" [9]

Hello,
I am so sorry about my work. Acually i got most of the information from home work help at the Schaumburg Public library in Il. I sware I didn't know it was palgiarized. I really apolozise. I didn't mean to do that.

Here I rewrite again. My citaion is from books and magazines and one webpage(I give the link). Could you please give your opinion. Tomorrow is the due of my paper. Again sorry about my work.

Thanks
Newworld.

Animals should only be used for research when absolutely necessary.

Since the last century, Animal testing is going on. Animal testing is a test done by the researchers in the laboratories with animals. Some people believe that it is a cruel and inhumane practice. While others believe animal research is needed to advance, especially in the medical field, also important in improving human health. Deaths through research are absolutely unnecessary and are morally no different from Murder. When locked up they suffer tremendous stress. Can we know they don't feel pain? However, Animal testing has helped to develop vaccines against diseases like rabies, polio, measles, mumps, rubella and TB. Operations on animals helped to develop organ transplant and open-heart surgery techniques. So in our new technological society, I believe that animals should only be used for research when absolutely necessary.

Because animals are like humans. There is no doubt they experience a life. Like us, animals can feel pain and fear, but also excitement and satisfaction. Certainly animals have don't abilities as humans like talking, driving cars, writing books. But regardless of intelligence , their life still has value to them. Exactly same is true of animals. Animals are having stress, when they are used for research including artificial marking and tagging procedures for biomedical and wildlife experimentation. The US department of the Agriculture livestock behavior research unit's Dr. Heng-Wei Cheng and graduate researchers Rachel L. Dennis and Alan G. Fahey reports, the potential side effect of four popular identification systems used in poultry research. The birds behavioral and physiological changes are associated with leg and, wing band, and neck band. From this research, because of the leg and wing band, birds are having more stress and they also having a slower growth during the research period(AWI Quarterly 21).

Of course animal research is vital to medicine. The American Physiological Society(APS), national non profit organization for scientific research, said animal research has led to some of the most important medical discoveries in history. Though experiments using animals have played a crucial role in the development of medical research, It continues to help humans, as well as animals, live longer and healthier lives. Discoveries made through animal experimentation are heart diseases, diabetes,obesity,TB,some cancers, arthritis like treatments and some vaccines like rabies, tetanus, pneumonias, hepatitides and polio are wiped out.. Also they said animals are the better choice than humans, because some animals are biologically similar to humans,and humans share more than two hundred fifty diseases with animals. In addition animals shorter life cycle make it easier to study for scientists. They can control the animals through variables such as diet ,age,weight, and physical activities. They also change the animal's gene to study the genetic disease (Haugen 138-140).

For many centuries scientists and testers in research have used animals of all kinds. Most of the animals are small ones like rodents - rats, mice, and hamsters. Some dogs, cats and a variety of goats, monkeys and rabbits have also been used. In worldwide 58.3 million animals used in 2005. Animals used for research in United sates in 2004 were 1,101,958 (Haugen 122). That amount of animals sacrificed each year is horrible especially when a lot of the test turn out to be inaccurate.

According to the New Zealand animal report for 2005 statics, total number of animals used was 263,214 - a 6.9% increased from 2004. In New Zealand only 14.7% animals experienced moderate to severe suffering. It is a stress report about animals in lab.(New Zealand national animal ethics committee advisory). Also In laboratories, mice and rats are commonly used. That are not required by law to provide this kind of animals with pain medication or veterinary care. So they are infected with disease, cut open, poisoned and killed because of no pain relief. In a recent study published in the journal Alternatives to Laboratory Animals (ATLA), researchers studied more than 100 cases in UK and US, rat and mice were used in "surgical or other potentially painful procedures" also found that post operative pain medication was given only 20% of the time (PETA's animal times 20)

Some people said, animal suffering should be tolerated only when both research quality and certainty of benefit are high. The contribution of animals to human health is lot such as animals have been burnt, electrocuted, tortured with drugs, poisoned with toxic chemicals, and tormented in psychological testing. But, certain level of animal suffering is unacceptable regardless of the quality of research and benefit. So animal experimentation should be regulated sufficiently. Animal Welfare Act is organization stated at 1966, through this animals receive adequate protection. It (AWA) sets forth a minimum standard of care for animals used in research. These standards relates to specifics such as sanitation, housing, ventilation, transportation and the provision of adequate veterinary care, also it specifies that pain and distress must be minimized in experimental procedure(Cothran 100).

Also we have to use the alternatives to reduce animal experimentation like "Three R's alternatives" to promote a more humane use of animal in research. "The Three R's are: refinement of procedures to minimize or eliminate animal pain; reduction in the number of animals used; and replacement, where possible ,of animal use with non-animal alternatives"(Cothran 136).

If necessary we can limit the use of animals in research before do the alternatives methods. In biologist, according to zoology professor, Edmunds, point of view on limiting experimentation, he believes that some research work should continues because of the medical and other reasons. But he also believes that "some medical and biological scientist not seriously following the Three Rs. They have particular type of argument for several years they see no reason to alter or abandon a 'proven' procedure. Statement such as 'there is no alternative to using animal for this type of work' are easy to make and difficult to either challenge or sustain with sound evidence. Too many physiologists and other researchers are simply not prepared to step back and themselves if they really should be doing so many experiments using live animals"(Haugen 130).

First alternative method is called "In Vitro" method means "in glass". The name probably comes in glass test tubes in labs. Animal tests are sometimes called "in vivo" or "in life". In this test non animals cell cultures are used. This can be used for some cancer and heart drugs. "Researchers have created artificial organ from human cells and other ingredients. TESTLUNG is an artificial lung. This organ are used in wound and drug research. Animals cell are also worked in Vitro work. Instead of hundred of animals for one experiment, a single pig liver might supply a hundred experiment".(Woods 25).

Second alternative method is using computers instead of animals. In this method we can analyze how chemical or drug harms the body through computers. For example , A substance in human body called P450. If the new drug interacts the into the human substance, it is safe otherwise it will dangerous. Here we can use the computer to check the structure of the drug to see weather it is safe or not. In another type of test, the chemical is dropped into a machine called pH meter. This machine tells weather the chemical is a neutral, acid or base. If they are a chemical and base, they are rejected without further testing. Because acid and base are always irritated the human skin and eyes (Woods 26)

Third one is called epidemiology-medical surveys. In this method, we have to take some information like eating, exercise on other habits from large groups of people. By analyzing data, scientists trying to determine what behaviors put people at risk. For example, doctors understand causes of heart disease through the decades of medical survey. "Recently they have analyzed many cases of sudden infant death syndrome(SIDS). With this a healthy infant suddenly dies for an unexplained reason. Researchers have found that certain sleeping positions and overheated rooms may increase the risk of SIDS"(woods 26).

Animals contribute their life for humans. Why don't we use human experiments for healthy human life. Doctors have to use people who are ill to learn about the causes of diseases such as people who suffered a brain damage from a stroke, or a tumor. The last alternative method of animal experimentation is using vitro practice for education in medical schools. Here instead of working with animals, we can use computers or special life size dolls or human corpses(Woods 27-28).

We have to give up the unnecessary animal research or find the alternative if some research failed again and again. We can avoid unnecessary repetition of experiments by adhering o the through search of the technical literature, peer review prior to experimentation and the rapid publication of scientific journals. By researching one topic thoroughly, it may found that a particular experiment has already conducted elsewhere. Peer review will aid minimum number of animal used in each procedure when inexperienced researchers designing their experiments(Monamy 81)

Works Cited

Cothran, Helen, ed. Animal Experimentation Opposing View points. California: Green haven Press, 2002.
Dennis, Rachel, and Fahey, Alan. "Marked for Success?" AWI Quarterly 56. 26 Nov. 2007: 21
Haugen, David M., ed. Animal experimentation Opposing View Points. MI: Green haven Press, 2007.
Monamy, Vaughan. Animal Experimentation A Guide to the Issues UK: Cambridge University Press,2000.
"New Zealand Animal Use Statics for 2005" The Human Society of the United States on the Web Volume6, Issue5, Dec 2006.
"PETA to Experimenters: Rats Deserve Rights!" PETA's Animal Times 25 July.2008: 20.
Woods, Geraldine. Animal Experimentation and Testing: A Pro/Con Issue. NewJersy: Enslow Publishers, Inc,1999.
newworld   
Aug 1, 2008
Essays / Spring and Fall weather season - comparison essay [5]

Hello Gloria,

Thank you so much. I really appriciate it. I wonder your sincerity and want to keep it myself . These words are not for my work only, you are doing extradinary service to students like me. Really you are doing a great service. God bless you!

Thanks a lot
Newworld.
newworld   
Jul 31, 2008
Essays / Spring and Fall weather season - comparison essay [5]

Spring Vs Fall - Need help on my comparision essay

Hello Gloria,

This is my comparison essay. Could you please edit my grammer mistakes ,also give some feed back please? Thanks in advance. My teacher always said "mind your word choices" did I do anything like that in this essay? help me please!

Thanks
newworld.


Spring Vs Fall

Spring is the season between winter and summer. Autumn, or fall, is the season between summer and winter. Both seasons are beautiful; they are often wet. Although there is exquisite beauty in the seasons of Fall and spring, there are also some distinctions there such as, weather, color, activities. I like both seasons, but I prefer the Fall season, because I am from different continent,Asia. Over there we have fall season, but it has a different name called "Autumn". The specialty here is color changing, In my place there is no color change.

In spring, the air begins to warm; temperatures slowly rise as the days get longer. I first came in Chicago during the Spring time. Initially I wasn't impress much, but later years I love spring weather after suffering the cold days of icy weather. Snow and ice melt and more rain tend to fall during this season. I hear the sound of the last frost crackling under my feet. Spring is showery and flowery. Leaves on trees start budding out and turns greening, flowers and grass start growing and blowing, due to the temperatures getting warmer and warmer. Color flowers with nice smell announces the spring to everybody ; we also smell the first cut of grass on a warm spring day. People do gardening in spring time.

Not only me, every body loves to be free and feel light with thin pants and short sleeves in spring. Especially kids love to go out and play. They ride their bikes and if it is a windy day, it would fun to fly kites. Spring is the time for base ball. Most of the children get out their bats and ball. Spring is a busy time for animals; they slept all winter and become active again. A small green frog, on a big brown log; A black and yellow bee, In a little green tree; All sit and listen to red bird sing. Many animals will have their young in the spring, when food is plentiful. Furthermore, their young will have time to grow before experiencing a cold winter themselves. Spring is busy time for people too. Farmers take care of the newborn animals; they plant seeds in the fields. People do swimming and sailing for their pleasure. Totally I can feel the butterflies, swarming around me, landing on me for luck. Who can forget the way lemonade tastes on the first day of spring?

In fall the air begins to cool. So fall season is a cool, frost and sleet weather. Nothing compares to the color of autumn leaves at the peak of their splendor. Leaves of some trees will turn colors such as red, yellow; gold,orange and brown and all they fall off. I love to see the fall color again and again. My first fall season is unforgettable. My husband took me a vacation to looked some fall color in Minneapolis state. The air was turning crisp and cold. So we put on long pants and sleeves and jackets to keep us warm. It was a wonderful experience to see such nice mixed color trees and leaves. First I thought Is bright yellow and orange sun hiding behind the those trees. Wow! It was marvelous! Autumn leaves crunched and crackled under my feet and whooshed and whirled all around me. If winds swoops up, more leaves fell down. There was a big big piles of leaves, I jumped in and hide inside like a child. Leaves were prickled and tickled all over me after that I popped out. The sun went down so early and we wait to saw the big harvest moon; finally the the full moon rose up and up. Even now, I see the fall season on my home whenever I crossed the beautiful picture mounted on the wall. Not only me, everyone likes the magic of the fall color. Some plants bear fruit, such as apple trees; ripe apples falls for eating, baking and caramel apple making. Next interesting thing is pumpkin; I can't think about eating pumpkin pie is delicious and Yum!. People choose a great big pumpkin; carve a face and make jack-o-lantern.; and roast the seeds. Halloween and thanksgiving are the main holidays in Fall. Football is a favorite game in Fall. People do hiking and bicycling activities in fall season.

One day trees are all bare; leaves have fallen every where; there is an icy chill in the air; very soon winter will be here. Some animals will begin to migrate, or move to warmer areas for the coming winter. Other animals will store and eat food to prepare for hibernation or dormancy. Earth worms tunnel down where the earth doesn't freeze; a raccoon finds a safe place in a hollow log; a chipmunk stores some seeds in undergrounds. We can hear honking of geese when migrating; also can smell burning leaves and smoking woods. We can find scattering dry seeds everywhere we go.

Even though lots of differences between them, there are couple of similarities too, 1) the length of day and night are the same, 2) both season are transition seasons. Spring precedes summer and fall precedes winter. On the day of spring and fall starts (Mar21 & sep22) the sun shines exactly over the equator at that time the day and night time are same almost all places in the world. In both seasons people like to travel. Both seasons are great in many ways. However, I admires the magic of Fall colors.
newworld   
Jul 31, 2008
Essays / Help with an Argument/research essay about "Animals in research" [9]

Hello Gloria

Thanks for your ideas. I will follow the outline. My teacher did not say anything about the content of the essay. If I make a rough copy, could you please give some corrections and opinioin about my essay?

Thanks
newworld
newworld   
Jul 30, 2008
Essays / Help with an Argument/research essay about "Animals in research" [9]

Hello,

I need a help on Argument/Research Essay.
Here is my topic
"in our new technological society, I believe that animals should only be used for research when absolutely necessary"

I dont know, How to start. Do I have to write the pros and cons first then I can tell my opinion or Do I have to tell only the opposing views about animals in research? Help me please!

Thanks in advance
newworld
newworld   
Jul 22, 2008
Writing Feedback / "Interview Essay" - My life has been filled with people who have taught me many valuable lessons [2]

Hello,

I wrote the Interview essay about the person who is influenced my life. I want your feed back. Is it like a interview essay? What changes do I nedd to do? This is my first time.to write the interview essay.Could please correct the grammer mistakes also? I really apriciated your help.

newworld.

Interview Essay

My life has been filled with a lot of people who have taught me many valuable lessons. When thinking of people I could possibly interview, Most of them are not interested. However, I decided to interview a person, who has most influenced also most interested in my life. She is my best friend's mother named Mrs Santhi Duraisamy, Director of Sakthi Masala Pvt Ltd, India.. She is from Erode,Tamil Nadu, South India. Intially it is small town in southern region of India. Now Erode is the fourth largest city in Tamil Nadu. When I was in India, I got a chance to interview her. Absolutely I learned a lot from her life. Particularly , you don't have to give up and have to keep on trying what ever happens in your life. Another important things is be supportive others.

She studied up to sixth grade , beginning her life as a house wife, took to small-time turmeric trade 30 years ago along with her husband. Her enthusiastic participation and perseverance had led to transforming the trade into a brand-owner of the most popular 'Sakthi Masala'. Now she got the Tree Sakthi Puraskar Award by the Union Ministry of Women and Child Development, for her role in administration and her contribution towards rural women employment, particularly for the physically challenged women, for 2006. Secret of her success is her hard work. She strongly believes "Success is not the destination but a journey". Because of that she is very special to me.

Mrs.santhi is very kind and associated with several voluntary bodies. She also runs Shakthi Rehabilitation Center in Erode which is exclusively involved in treating and training the disabled children. She is a caring and great person to be around.

She is a hotelier's daughter. She is married to Mr.Duraisamy, son of grocery shop owner, ventured in turmeric powder business. Naturally, the journey he undertook was not smooth but with lot of bumps and potholes. The weather was inclement with a lot of storms, floods and droughts. He had great loss in his business. No body respect to them especially their relatives and business partners. Life is totally changed all of a sudden. She feels very bad because she couldn't hep her husband financially because of her lack of studies.. But she keep saying to her husband positively and she is being with him very supportively. She change her husband's mind to start a different new business. She often said " No business exists without obstacles, So dig under it or climb over it" She found and realized that masala-aromatic spice blend- grinding as a preparation was a difficult task to the Indian house wife. She decided to prepare masala for them. Thus after the initial birth pangs, Shakthi Masala was born. He packed them into small sachets and sold them aggressively in local shops. Yet, like a sailor in a rough sea, with his perseverance and hard work with his supportive and enthusiastic wife, Mrs. Santhi Duraisamy made it possible to reach new avenues, climb the mountain and stay at the peak. She strongly believes its all God of small things.

They started this new business in 1976 with small investment. Cooking is a problem of people in th fast moving world, Shakti masala readily accepted with their variety of spice and curry powders. She made superior quality,mouthwatering product and he sell those with reasonable price. Simply their product made cooking easier and tastier. Their acceptance and awareness have made the company work harder and to bring out better products and they expand their kingdom including abroad. absolute hygienic work place, matching international standards have been created and the process & products are constantly upgraded to meet the global demands. Today SAKTHI MASALA is No.1 place. She got everything again, But she is not stop . She works hard and hard and company gets lot of awards for their quality products. This the largest spice company to use the solar and wind energy to keep the environment cleaner and greener.

After she shared her story with me, I got a lot of self confidence; awareness around small things. Mainly, what I got most valuable lesson from her life is no matter what your qualification is, you have to be very confident and focus what you want. Then you can defiantly get the success one day until don't discourage.
newworld   
Jul 11, 2008
Essays / Spring and Fall weather season - comparison essay [5]

Hi,
I am planning to write an Comparison essay about Spring and Fall weather season. Could please help me about the similarities and differences about these two seasons? Please give some outline points.

Thanks
newworld.
newworld   
Jun 12, 2008
Essays / A day at the mall with/without kids - Descriptive essay [4]

Hello Gloria,
Thanks for your ideas. I wrote the essay. But I need some suggetions that
Does this essay have enough description?
Am I into the essay topic or out of topic?
Do I need to add some other details?
how about the conclusion?
I look forward your reply.

Thanks again
Newworld.

On the outside of Wood field Mall lines after lines of cars are parked in the gigantic parking lots. It's not that noisy but every once in a while you hear the beeping of a car alarm. The sliding glass doors swish open as I step near them. As I walk in to the inside, the volume of sound changes. I can hear people chattering and kids screaming. The pitter patter feet on the tile floor make echoes through the mall. I also hear the crinkle of bags and jingle of purses; a happy child with a new toy; smell the mixed food aroma from restaurants; hear someone laugh out loud; look bright signs advertising things; some kids dragged along, not wanting to be there. Other decorations remind me of the season and why I am there. Overall walking, talking, and laughing people! People! Everywhere people.

It was a busy Saturday afternoon, visiting the mall is quite an experience for kids. It's a place where they can snack, see movies, ride escalators, enjoy holiday shows and socialize with peers. They ice skated. They ate in the food court, tried on clothes, listened to new music, and threw pennies in the fountain. Some of them brought their roller blades and zipped through the cool, dark parking lots until security threw them out.

I observed most families with kids, went to the kids clothing stores like carters and children's place, I also hear the nice piece of music when open the door. cashier greets everybody; bright colors and sales tags everywhere; racks are organized by stylish and high quality clothes and are arranged by designs and colors .while parents does the sale hunting kids mess the shopping too.

Next stop is the toy store. This is kids' most favorite part. No one miss the word from the toys "please try me". Different kinds of toys are there such as Mrs. Potato Heads, remote-control turbo cars, Barbie hot tubs, Hula-hoops, jungle gyms, G.I. Joes, video games and plain old pinwheels. Part Monster, Part Human and More... When I was a kid, people were people and machines were machines. Some adults were overwhelmed, not just by the variety, but by the toys themselves, like composite creatures that looked part monster, part soldier, part computer and part human. But an hour inside the store somehow changes the experience. Eyes glaze over. Parents become cranky. Finally kids pick their toys.

Stepping inside to the food court, the first thing that hits me is the sound. It crashes over me, engulfing me, drawing me in. I step closer, into the midst of it. In the mean time, I smell the mixed greasy aromas, together in one heavy, thick smell that crawls into my pores. It is a clean bright, modern decorative indoor place. People carry fries, Chinese chicken, and pizzas as well, and some of them bite juicy burgers. To my left sit a young couple, anxiously feeding their toddler chicken nuggets dipped in tomato sauce. The two year old cries and whines because of crankiness. The group of young people to my right are laughing, shouting and flirting. However, some people especially with kids dine out the restaurant such as "rainforest cafe". The restaurant is decorative like a rainforest and has apes, elephants and alligators and snakes hanging in the tree and they are making noises. It is very fantastic place to take the children.

The most interesting thing for kids is indoor play yard constructed of soft foam material. It consisting of a grand entrance facade, climbers, slides, tunnels, a play wall, shoe keepers and parent seating. And other interesting thing is carousel. Across from where I sat was the carousel. When it would start up a slight breeze would hit me lightly lifting my hair. You can hear the sound of the carousel going around and around, playing the typical amusement park music, making you feel like you're at the fair. The carousel sparkles with little lights that are pleasing to the eye. The beauty of it is just striking. The horses go up and down as it goes around and around. Each horse has different detailed designs making each one stand out from the others. Every time a parent walks by, their kids beg for permission to go on a ride. When they don't get there way they drag their feet and pout as mom or dad is struggling to keep calm while pulling their child through the mall. A little girl holding a giraffe asks for a ride with here eyes gleaming with anticipation. Other children anxiously wait for there turn to ride. They form a line trying their best to contain their excitement and stand still. When they finally get on, they smile from ear to ear.

Adults without kids, using the mall for their dating place. The moments of heart smiles include watching couples walking along hand in hand. The mall lounge is one of a hangout place to find a date for teenagers. Most of them see movie with their dates. Some of them walk around a large enclosed space to get exercise. while I walk see some teenagers and middle age women having their manicure and pedicure in the mall. Overall people with kids or without kids are all enjoying, relaxing, exercising and having fun in the mall.
newworld   
Jun 11, 2008
Essays / A day at the mall with/without kids - Descriptive essay [4]

Hello,
I really appreciate your service. I wonder about your sincereness because this is free site. Thanks again.
I have to write a descriptive essay about " Describe a day at the mall from the standpoint of someone with kids and someone without"

Can you please give some introductory ideas about this topic.
should I write in third person view in a moving vantage point?
Shall I write positive and negative sides of someone with kids and without like sad or happy mood?
I lookforward your reply.

Thanks
Newworld.
newworld   
Dec 14, 2007
Writing Feedback / Immigration - argument research paper [6]

Hello sarah,

Would you please check the grammer for my essay Please! I edited this paper after my teacher graded . Before to submit I want to get the feedback from you. Please help me. This is my last work.

Shanmugasundaram1
Restrictions on Immigration Are Not Necessary
Immigration: Immigration is a hotly debated topic in recent years, but a close look at the issue will show that immigrants contribute a lot to American society, bringing cultural diversity, a ready labor force, and many other benefits to the country. So United States Should allow legal Immigrants also should reduce the restrictions on immigration from all over the world . Immigration is a movement of people from one place to another. The U.S is the immigrant's nation that is often called "The melting pot".

It has been said that immigrants population impact America. Wattenberg, Senior fellow at the American Enterprise Institute, said "Immigration birthrate is decreasing; An Immigrant doesn't added to global population-he nearly moves from one spot on the planet to another" (Gale 84). Another point is immigrants will not "swamp" America. In 1910, 15 percent of Americans were foreign born; In 1999 our foreign-born were about 10percent of our total. Also between 1901 and 1910 total American population increased by 1 percent per year on the other hand legal immigrants growth only 0.36 percent (Gale 82). Also many immigrants go back. To begin with, article in LA Times said, the US INS estimates that 300,000 people illegally cross the US-Mexican border each year. The common assumption is they all stay here. But in reality, more than nine out of 10 don't . They go back and forth between Mexico and the United States, says the INS (James D1).

Immigrants are hard working, innovative skilled workers. In New York Times, the historic American pattern of striving immigrants building the economy. " Here in San Jose, the big city of Silicon Valley, Vietnamese are about 10 percent of the population, Vietnamese are thriving, and many a high school valedictorian is of Vietnamese origin" (Anthony A29). Another example is, in U.S

Shanmugasundaram2
universities continuing the decline of enrollments in advanced engineering training among the native born, the proportion of the foreign born has grown rapidly. By 1987 over half of all assistant professors in the united sates were foreign born, and it is estimated that by 1992 over 75 percent of all engineering professors in the U.S will be foreign-born. Already one out of three engineers with a doctorate working in U.S industry today is an immigrant (Ruben 235).

Certainly Immigrants helps to alleviate labor shortages. There is no question, American economy is dynamic, growing and changing. As it changes, some sectors gain and others lose, the demands that employers have for labor are not matched. Immigration helps solve this problem. Immigrant workers furnish the labor force in three areas of the economy. First they fill various professional post such as doctors. Second they occupy low paid service jobs. Third they go with low paid manufacturing jobs such as clothing and electronics (Bob 93).

Immigrants create long term befits to US economy. According to News Week report Michael, formerly chief economist to George Bush ," The short-term costs of immigration today are much higher but in the long run, immigrants are still great news for our economy" (qtd. in Rich, Andrew 18).

Immigrants pay more taxes than natives. One myth about immigrants is that, they are not paying taxes. Absolutely this is not a fact; Aviva Chomsky said " Immigrants no matter what their status, pay the same taxes that citizens do-sales taxes, real estate taxes, gasoline taxes". Also said, " Some immigrants work in the informal economy don't have federal, state and social security taxes but they don't have access to any .... benefits from the employer"(37).

Immigrants take Americans jobs. But natives are wrong; the fear is largely unfounded. Of the 500 occupation categories studied in its computer analysis, U.S news documented only 6 percent in which new immigrants held 10 percent or more of the jobs (52). Also they are not cause for unemployment. The worst unemployment was happened in 1930 when immigration almost ends

Shanmugasundaram3
(Isbister 14).
SEE ABOVE

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(Chomsky 180-182). "Communications must be improved between law enforcement, intelligence agencies and border patrol personnel. Computer system must be upgraded....borders in the U.S" (Gale 172).

Immigrants do not abuse welfare and social service system. Actually immigrants are less dependent than natives. According to Washington Post evidence, The U.S department of labor survey indicates that immigrants families are less dependent on welfare and receive lower level on welfare payment than natives families. A July 1992 business week article shows that immigrants earns $240 th billion per year, pay $90 billion per year in taxes and receive only $5 billion in welfare (Letter A26). Also they don't abuse health care services. Torres-Gil, the author of California-Mexican connection said, the health of Latino children prevalence of chronic illness conditions, and birth weight patterns is also good compared to non-Latinos , despite with higher poverty rates they rely on emergency and pregnancy related issues but not overuse the public health care system (171).

Another debate is that immigrants harm the environment. It is so absurd. Advocates argued that , "Immigrants maintain the science the technology already have begun to decrease the danger of pollution and to increase farm and industrial productivity" also said "they are all asset not a danger to America future" ( Bischoff 102-103). In American Demographic magazine Francese, president and proponent of open immigrant, said, "By continuing to restrict immigration tightly we shoot ourselves in both feet....the United States need to admit more immigrants now" (qtd. in Bischoff 103).

Although, there are many other arguments against immigration,Immigrants are fortune of diversity; They are a positive influence on United States. So America should welcome Immigration and reduce restrictions on immigration. Wattenberg, Senior fellow at the American Enterprise Institute, said "Immigration [can help] us become a stronger nation[...] in the global competition of civilization" (Gale 80). Being an immigrant I also agree with him. Because they are highly beneficial to this county in various ways. Regardless of benefit, they are harmless and want to be part of America.

Shanmugasundaram5 Works Cited
Kirchoff, Henry. Immigration Issues. Ed. Randall M. Miller. Connecticut: Greenwood press, 2002.
Chomsky, Aviva. They take our Jobs and 20 other myths and Immigration. Boston: Beacon Press, 1992.
Flanigan, James. "Blaming Immigrants won't solve Economic Woes". Los Angles Times15 August. 1993: D1.
Gale, Thomson. Immigration: Opposing View Points Series. Ed. Mary. E. Williams. Minnesota: Greeenhaven Press, 2004.
Isbister, John. Immigration Debate: Remaking America. Connecticut: Kumarian Press, 1996.
Letter, Frank Sharry. Washington Post 27January. 1994: A26.
Lews, Anthony. "The Politics of Nativisim" New York Times 14January. 1994: A9.
Mur, Andrew, and Thomas, Rich. "Economic cost of Immigration" News Week 9August.1993: 18.
Rumbaut, Ruben G."Passages to America". America at Century's End 1991: 235.
Sutcliff, Bob. "Immigration and the World Economy" Creating a New World Economy 1993: 93.
Torres-Gill, Fernando. "Separating Myth From Reality". California-Mexico Connection 1993: 171.
newworld   
Dec 14, 2007
Writing Feedback / Immigration - argument research paper [6]

Want some editing help immediately Please!

Hello,

My teacher graded my research paper and gave some feedback in clarity and grammer.
I corrected that. Would you please check that for me! The due is tomorrow Help me Please!

1. It has been said that immigrants population impact America. Wattenberg, Senior fellow at the American Enterprise Institute, said "Immigration birthrate is decreasing; Immigrant doesn't added check this quote - grammar is incorrect to global population-he nearly moves from one spot on the planet to another" (Gale 84).

mine is
It has been said that immigrants population impact America. Wattenberg, Senior fellow at the American Enterprise Institute, said "Immigration birthrate is decreasing; An Immigrant doesn't added to global population-he nearly moves from one spot on the planet to another"

2. Although, there are many other arguments against immigration, America should welcome Immigration also should indeed reduce restrictions. Rephrase for clarity.

mine is
Although, there are many other arguments against immigration,Immigrants are fortune of diversity; They are a positive influence on United States.So America should welcome Immigration and reduce restrictions on immigration

Please give me your suggestion.

Thanks
Newworld
newworld   
Nov 28, 2007
Writing Feedback / Immigration - argument research paper [6]

Hello Sarah,

I paste my partial first draft about immigration. It should be Argument/research paper. What do ypu think about it? The structure and the way of telling is ok or not? Feel free to express your thoughts. I am ready change it. Would u Please check the grammer mistakes? By the way I got the grade on my Narrative Essay. It is B+. It all goes to you. Thank you.

Paper due is on friday. Would you please send your opinion? I waiting for your reply. I am working on the remaining portion.

The United States is the Melting pot. America is composed of multicultural people .Of course the U.S citizenship test tells that there is no racial and ethnic requirements than the proficiency of English and U.S history. Immigrants assimilate well into American society also want to join the mainstream; they are not threatening the national culture. Historian Stephan thernstrom writes"Whatever their origins, they will have joined the American majority, which is determined not by bloodiness but by commitment to the principles for which this nation stands" (qtd. in Isbister 19).

Immigrants want to learn English. In the evidence of New York times, A frequent claim, for example, is that today's immigrants do not assimilate as readily as those in the past. But English-Language courses have long waiting lists (Lewis A29). Also immigrants learn English quickly. Older Immigrants learn English extremely difficult, but the second generation quickly realizes that English is essential and becomes fluent rapidly, however, The third and fourth generation's native language tends to be lost; they will have to study their native language in school to try to reconnect with their language (Chomsky 110).

Immigrants are not responsible for crime. The FBI report said," In 2000 no incidents of international terrorism happened inside the U.S, and eight incidents of domestic terrorism happened by U.S citizens belonging to animal rights group or environmental groups. In 2001 there were twelve incidents of domestic and one incident of international (September 11 attacks) terrorism happened. .... Those who were involved in the 9/11 attacks were not citizens however, all but four were legally in the country at the time of attacks.... . Does this mean we need to do better, different screening who want to enter into U.S? possibly."
newworld   
Nov 13, 2007
Essays / Work or a social issue related topic that affects your life. [6]

Hello sarah,

I have some doubts about the topic. What kind of arguement is this? I read from the book, there are different types such as Declares somthing is fact,Support policy, Calls for action Asserts value.

Can you please form the topic like a question? What do i have to do? My teacher said ,I have to use citaion, quotation, documentaion etc.

I lookforward your reply.

Thanks
Newworld
newworld   
Nov 6, 2007
Essays / Work or a social issue related topic that affects your life. [6]

Hello Sarah,

Thank you so much!. I really really apriciate your help! I have no words to say and thank your sincear help. It is hard to see in the world honest like you( i mean you are doing this with out no expectaion). God bless you!

After i write the draft would you please help me that i am into the topic or not?

Thanks
Newworld.
newworld   
Nov 5, 2007
Essays / Work or a social issue related topic that affects your life. [6]

Hello sarah,

I wan t to find a topic for the argument/research paper. My teacher said "Topics can be school or work-related, or related to a social issue that affects your life. "

Also he said "Your paper will provide a context for this problem and then offer possible solutions. " What that means?

I am from different country. Theae things are new to me. But i want to do the assignment well.

Could you please explain to me about this and give some ideas for topic?

Regards
newworld
newworld   
Nov 1, 2007
Writing Feedback / Wanted to my process essay! [3]

Hi Sarah,

Here i post my essay. Please give some suggestion about the essay including the titile (Is it related to the whole essay or not)also would you plz check grammer and sentence stucture?

Thanks
newworld.

Lets get your "pony" breath!
Maintenance is the main key factor, to improve your car's lifespan. Also if you are the person who would likes to consume time, money and some bettor mileage from your "pony", you should check your air filter first. Engine need air more than fuel; though air comes free, It always dirty. For that reason air filters are used. It protect your engine from trapping dirt, dust and other foreign particles outside the air. Dirty filter impact the fuel economy and performance of the car. It is highly recommended that you have to change your filter every 15,000 miles. Changing air filter is not a rocket science,you can do it yourself. It is a inexpensive and quick process. All you need is follow some easy steps and some instruments such as a new filter, flat head screwdriver,vacuum cleaner and adhesive tape.

Step 1: Safe your car and open the hood.
To begin, park your vehicle on the balanced floor. Then turn off your engine. After that open the bonnet and hook it with the metal rod otherwise it will hurt your head.

Step 2: Find the air filter.
It is usually located on the top of the engine. But if you have a new model car( fuel-injected ),air filter housing can be a rectangular shape and you can see near radiator area. If it is a older version(with carburettors ), air filter unit should be round shape like a big pie and can be found near the engine area.

Step 3: Remove the filter
Before you do, unscrew the cover of filter unit first; safe the nuts like a squirrel. Now you can see the filter, made up of paper with a rubber rim. Next pull the filter out from the unit.

Step 4: Clean the filter unit.
First seal the top of the carburettors with adhesive tape; It prevent the engine from dirt while cleaning.
Then clean the housing area with the vacuum cleaner.

Step 5: Replace the new filter.
Put the new filter recommended by the manufacturer. If you use the wrong size filter, it allows unfiltered air into the engine that caused damage your engine and it will run less efficiently. The rubber rim should be faced up, otherwise you won't be able to close the top. Also double check the edges which are sealed by the rubber rim.

Step 6: Reinstall the cover and close the hood.
Before you do, remove the tape from the airconduct. Now carefully reconnect the cover back into the filter unit, screw it back again. Make sure that everything has done and no tools inside. Then close the hood.

After replacing clogged air filter, you should notice the tremendous effect in performance level and horsepower. If you perform this check at regular interval, you can keep your "pony's" breathing at a maximum efficiency. A genuine air filter always increase the mileage and decrease the emission to your car.
newworld   
Oct 31, 2007
Writing Feedback / Wanted to my process essay! [3]

Hello Sarah,

If you have some time,would you please give some suggestion about my process essay?

Thanks.
newworld   
Oct 2, 2007
Essays / Eng101 essay (personal essay); natural disater? [11]

Hello sara,

Thank you so much for editing my work!. I really appreciate it. I got your rules. Definately i will follow that. My paper lenght should be 3 to 4 pages long.I got two pages that until the part you corrected. You are right! I choose the tittle "motherhood". But the assignment is .. please see below

This assignment asks you to relate an experience that altered your life in some way. This event does not necessarily have to be one of the "biggies" in life (i.e. childbirth, death, religious rebirth).

So i wrote about the childbirth. Now could you please tell me what should i do?

Thanks again
Anu.
newworld   
Oct 1, 2007
Essays / Eng101 essay (personal essay); natural disater? [11]

Hello sara,

I pasted my presonal narrative essay here. Can you please edit?Also please give me the correction in grammer, punctuation and sentence structure. Is it a effective conclusion? If it is not plz give some ideas!

Thanks.

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newworld   
Sep 20, 2007
Essays / Eng101 essay (personal essay); natural disater? [11]

Hello,

I choose the biggest moment in my life that is childbirth. But i am worried about the audience. Is this suitable for eng101 narative essay.Because i think i can say more about that. Plz give me a good advice.Thanks for your previous ideas!

Thanks
Newworld
newworld   
Sep 13, 2007
Essays / Eng101 essay (personal essay); natural disater? [11]

Hello ,

I need help to find the topic which is personal experience that altered your life.( for eng101) I have no idea otherthan natural disater . i have short time but i haven't choose the topic yet. could plz help me?

Thanks
newworld.
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