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Posts by phongbilly
Name: NgĂ´ Huy Phong
Joined: Aug 4, 2017
Last Post: Aug 4, 2017
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From: Vietnam
School: Hanoi-Amsterdam

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phongbilly   
Aug 4, 2017
Writing Feedback / "Should state college tuition be free?" Hi All, Can you help me to correct this paragraph [8]

I suggest that you should post your whole essay for better understanding. In this paragraph, you should provide the reader with a little bit more about what the avarage tuition is now, so you can compare how tuition-free college can provide more chances for ppl to get in. And you should find some more pro point in tuition-free college
phongbilly   
Aug 4, 2017
Scholarship / What is one value you have that cannot be compromised? [5]

MY INQUISITIVENESS

Albert Einstein once said "I have no particular talent. I am merely inquisitive."
If I had to talk about one trait of my personality that cannot be compromised, I would indubitably choose my inquistiveness, my eagerness to discover more about this amazing world.

I have always told myself that the sky is not the limit, and it is needless to say that there are many things for me to discover. Questions like "What is beyond space?", "How do we solve most pressing world's problem?", and "What are us human beings?" always pop up in my head and sometimes even keep me awake at night trying to figure out the answers. I would not bother to stay up late just to read articles teaching how to code, set up a website, or articles about World War II airforces. Not only did I read to gain my knowledge but I also tried to learn new skills. I was once curious about how many people could solve the Rubik's cube so fast, so I got myself a Rubik's cube and learn to solve it as fast as I could. In the end, I managed to solve in just 15 seconds after two months of practicing, which made me very proud.

If you asked me "Why do you have to dig in all of those information, doesn't it make you tired?" I would tell you that I am not tired at all, I am proud of the attribute that helps me understand our world better.

I strongly believe that my inquisitiveness will never be compromised. I believe that with my inquisitiveness, I won't have have any problem with my studying. I believe that my inquisitiveness will help me acquire more information, analyze it and thus broaden my intellectual luggage.

What else should I provide with this topic? What should I eliminate? The word limit is 300 and I have already got 295.

THANK YOU ALL IN ADVANCE!
phongbilly   
Aug 4, 2017
Writing Feedback / TOEFL essay- Write a letter about your experience in a foreign country [5]

I think that you should be more specific in how different this country's culture is to yours. In your essay, you have just mentioned how everyone only speaks english but not Arabic. It is obvious that in the USA, people will speak english, which is different.
phongbilly   
Aug 4, 2017
Scholarship / If you could know the answer to anyone question in the world, what would it be? Why? [3]

Henry Miller once said, "Life has to be given a meaning because of the obvious fact that it has no meaning." I do not approve of Henry Miller's opinion. I believe that there is an ultimate meaning for life, and if I had the answer to any one question, I would ask the question:

"What is the purpose of life?"



According to psychologist Abraham Maslowe, even though each person is a unique individual, all humans have certain common needs which include physiological needs, safety needs, love and social needs, self-esteem needs, and self-actualization needs. Humans have all this need, but what for? When I'm asking this question, I want to know the purpose of our existence, since we evetually will all die.

Why do I want to know the true purpose of life? I just simply concern about this question. This question once kept me thinking during the shower, kept me awake at nights. I have thought of a lot of answers like "Is it love, or happiness?" but none seemed to satisfy me at all. I am seeking a reason to the existence of life. As a human, I want to have a logical explanation to everything. That is why I am so curious about the meaning of life. There must be a purpose that we are alive, that we value our life. Else, we could simply kill ourselves.

But when I have the answer to this question, what am I going to do with it? Since I know how life works and why we exist, I will alter myself to be better. I would be like a dog that can see the colours the rainbow. I will have the ability to understand others better.

This is my draft for this essay. What do you suggest I change? Is there anything that doesn't fit in?
Thank you all in advance!

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