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NguyenBinh

Nov 23, 2017

Writing Feedback / Contrast paragraph between adulthood and childhood. [5]

@frankovidaxt
Salute !
There is having majority difference between childhood and adulthood. Apparently, most of child when they come the age of maturation that has mean the change of their appearance is easy to recognize the differences, they become bigger and taller. in addition to their biological development, they also have a clear cognitive development that is highly appreciated. As a child they are nurtured and sufficiently educated on a regular basis by their families and teachers. ..... they think more thoughtful and have a sight more objective and holistic view of life. Children have enough time to play with their friends or indulge in their favorite books or other sources of information, and this helps widen their...

The above is in my opinion. Thanks

NguyenBinh

Nov 22, 2017

Writing Feedback / task 2 essay : Gender Inequality Aspect In The Professional Zone [8]

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gender inequality in work - essay task 2

Naturally, people are believed that women and men have always been differences in the kinds of work they have done. Although nowaday we are in the 21st century, people are living a great freedom both men and women are chosen employment freely. But in my view, it is already necessary elimination about gender problem in a few professional careers, especially exclusion of women in some occupations.

Frist of all, women are apparently considered ...

The second reason is women's character exist weeknesses that's why it is not appropriate to be able to give accurate decisions on serious problems. Most of women are honest and gentle person, have a heart full of love and too soft-hearted so that they are not tough enough to easy perform and accomplish vital decisions. On the other hand, their actions mostly depend on emotion that's momentary and easy to change therefore instead of using the head to think and analyze the problem as men, women are frequently dominated by emotion of the heart. Whereas there are a few certain professions demand high discipline, strict rules, assertiveness, etc..women are too sensitive and effortless to forgive others what in life situations are good but in work are not effective and can lead to bad consequences. Obviously in the US presidential ...

The issues of the gender equality is being considered and gradually improved, the women's role is increasingly appreciated but in order to ensure quality as well as efficiency in work, gender exclusion is absolutely indispensable from some professions.

i have read all comments carefully then i have decided to adjust my first essay. I know my essay still contains a lot of mistakes, therefore i really expect the frank opinions from everybody so much. Thanks by all of my gratitude !!

NguyenBinh

Nov 22, 2017

Undergraduate / Will it be beneficial to teach students of distinct abilities collectively? [5]

@chinkybehl22
Hi,
in my view, i think the summarization are
in paragraph 2. for children they should be developed in the most comprehensive ways hence they need to play and study (interact) with friends of the same age is more important than studying to become a specialist ... Then give an example

in paragraph 3. the intelligent children will learn faster than others so to avoid the boring lessons the particular courses is quite essential... Then give an example

thanks.!!!

NguyenBinh

Nov 22, 2017

Writing Feedback / task 2 essay : Gender Inequality Aspect In The Professional Zone [8]

@Holt
thank you so much . I really appreciate your advice. Wish you have a great time.

NguyenBinh

Nov 22, 2017

Writing Feedback / All young people should be encouraged to try new sports, including extreme sports? [3]

@Kathrin1221
I think it will be better.
-Introduce : in the introduction you need to paraphase the statement and present your opinion . Example all of the young ought be stimulated to attempt new sports, involving hazardous sports. I quite disagree with this point. In my opinion , sport is very important because.....

-Body paragraph 1 : in this paragraph you give the first reason which support your opinion. Attemp a few new sports which people have not ever played before will gives them have an interesting feeling and a new experience. But if people try to play new sports, they will soon find the feeling of frustration as much as boring from it.

-Body paragraph 2 : give the second reason to protect/support your opinion. Example it is believed that the hazardous sports contain lots of risks/dangers/unsafeness.....

-In the conclusion you briefly summarize what you have written before.
Thanks and have a great time.

NguyenBinh

Nov 21, 2017

Writing Feedback / task 2 essay : Gender Inequality Aspect In The Professional Zone [8]

question : Women and men are commonly seen as having different strengths and weaknesses. It is right to exclude males and female from certain profession because of their gender

Professional Equality between women and Men

In a naturally way, it is believed that between women and men are having gaps which relate with many social problems as occupation, equality, privilege and so on. Although we are in 21st century and the differents are not so great obvious. But we aslo have to recognize that a few definite careers are obligating or eliminating about their gender.

In my opinion I think the exception because of there are having some main reasons existing in family and society aslo about physique and spiritualness.

Regarding biologically, women are apparently considered weaker than men. Normally, they are borned in order to believed that they deserve to receive protection from the other gender. Hence in a few hard jobs, women are not healthy enough to make it as the process of training in the military. Even though the women's role in army are worth to admit but the number of women serving in the military is limited. The policy of the government is preferable to men. And probably the women's duty are tied with housework and childcare which are evaluated higher than other works. In family they are nurtured to be able to become a perfect wife, they are affected from their parents. Most of family, the mother will be a person who look after them and cook the food for them and the father will be a person who go out to earn money. They tend to be close to mom and admire to dad. At school, they are taught that they should become a girly person.

In terms of psychology, the women's character are too soft-hearted to decide on serious problem. They are not tough enough to be easy make and accomplish vital decisions. Most of women are honest and gentle person and have a heart full of love. Therefore their thinking are simpler than men but their feeling are complex than men. Besides their actions mostly depend on emotion. Their attitude come from mood which is momentary and too easy to change. Women are easy to cry and often use intuition and heart to solve the problems they encouter. Instead of using the head to think and analyze the problem as men, women are frequently dominated by heart. In addition, they have special traits are too sensitive and effortless to forgive others what in life situations are good but in a lot of works are not effective and can lead to bad consequences. Whereas there are a few certain professions demand high discipline, strict rules, assertiveness, etc. Women are not powerful enough to convince and make others trust them especially in high position athough they all have the capacity. Obviously in the US presidential election Hillary Clinton could not win before Donald Trum to become the 45th president of the United States.

Nowadays, when the exclusion of science and technology is not limited. Human are in the 4th industrial revolution with the development of artificial intelligence. But nothing can substitute for humanity and the different between women and men about strengths and weaknesses is undeniable. So it is suitable, necessary and accurate to exclude male and females in demand of occupation.

thanks for reading it.