Writing Feedback / Spending large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities [5]

In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Transport fundings allocation

Many continents citizens believe that major transport fundings should be used for building new railway lines connecting cities for quick travel. However, others are of the mindset that money ought to be utilized for developing existing transport service for people. In my opinion, it should be based on the needs of the cities and its habitats.

Constructing new train lines will reduce travel time for long distance travelers considerably. For instance, people driving from one town to other daily for better job opportunity waste valuable time traveling that could be spent with their loved one. This will have a direct effect on pollution and traffic problems in a positive way, as trains can carry multiple passengers in one go there will be fewer cars on the road emitting carbon-dioxide into our atmosphere.

On the other hand, for short distance traveler, traffic congestion and road maintenance are of high priorities. These do not use trains daily. Increase population and number of cars on roads has led to heavy traffic and damaged roads. Widening roads, adding lanes and maintaining roads will aid in traffic flow and improve travel time for these short distance drivers. Thus spending money on advancing present public transportation is deemed necessary for these group of people.

In conclusion, I strongly propose to consider the expenditure of the transport service based on the requirement of the people. If there is more inter-city traveler train must be given Importance or vice-versa.

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Writing Feedback / Some countries have a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of elderlies [3]

At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people.
Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

Younger or older society?

Nowadays, in some countries, the ratio of elderly citizens to youths has changed drastically. In my opinion, there is more benefit to this situation than challenges.

Due to the high number of young blood, there is fresh outlook in different fields. Teenagers prefer to think outside the box and are willing to experiment with new ideas for doing things. For instance, most of the work is done using computers, databases that were recorded once in books are now stored in clouds. Learning new technologies and keeping up with the latest knowledge is found challenging by older people. Another, plus point to this scenario is better employment opportunities for adolescents. Many graduates fail to find jobs due to lack of experience and availability of space in business. With the low number of senior employees, new comes will have a wider scope.

On the other hand, young people are very unstable, they are impatient and wish to progress faster, they lack the eye for details for work which only comes with experience. Due to lack of elderly experience staff companies will have to incur heavy expenses to train new inexperienced recruits. Business such as glassware's and pottery will suffer major losses due to their new comer's mistakes. Learning under the guidance of a learned and experienced person will aid in mastering skills faster as you can seek the help required right away rather than spending time self-investigation.

In conclusion, there is some drawback such as instability of workforce and investment in training new youths and bearing the losses they cause in the process of learning; nonetheless, these are minor issues in terms of advantages addressed earlier.

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