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Posts by Nhat Px [Suspended]
Name: Nguyen Thi Minh Nhat
Joined: Jul 26, 2018
Last Post: Mar 29, 2019
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Nhat Px   
Mar 29, 2019
Writing Feedback / Government invest in the arts vs public services [3]

I think in the para "First and foremost...society" u shoul focus on the society benefits like: music and theatre help pp release from pressure of works; give them inspiration to create.... because in the intro you argue that "Some people believe that art brings no value to the society" if you just mention the benefits for artist I think it is not clear for the intro.
Nhat Px   
Sep 15, 2018
Writing Feedback / Task 2:Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject or not [3]

Topic: Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

Nowadays, more and more people attend higher education. In my opinion, I strongly agree that both genders are equally provided with the opportunities to study in each major.

To begin with, balance in the number of students in different genders make the classes become incredibly lively. It has been regarded as a lesion participated by the equivalence of males and females that is really interesting for them to absorb knowledge. With a very high competitiveness of showing opinions between men and women, students are encouraged to be more active in learning as well as more social to share their own ideas with friends. A ton of amazing concepts might be invented and developed ranging from academic understandings to personal lifestyle, which results from equal attendees of both genders. Students additionally learn from their friends of different sex about their thought, perception; moreover, they can easily mutually respect each other and create deeply networking later time.

Additionally, students get more chances to find their proper careers. For instant, there is a prejudice that IT or technology are generally considered to be suitable for males, which somehow reduce the opportunities for female students to study in these subjects. Providing that universities accept both men and women in the same rate, they help society to find the most favorable and qualified future labor force since student have the similar permit to study to pursuit their dreams.

By way of conclusion, I reaffirm that students should be equally selected into universities regardless of their gender.
Nhat Px   
Sep 14, 2018
Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 2 - Discussion on giving financial or practical aid to developing countries [3]

I think you should give your opinion in the opening like : While people think.... I personally believe.... Remember that the topic require you to discuss both of view and give your opinion. So, let us see what your point of view

"giving money means the country ..." = Financing emergent nations enables them to have ....(I think it is clearer to understand).

"... of free objects and stimulate (stimulate/promptly stimulate) the domestic ...". This sentence is hard to follow.
Nhat Px   
Sep 14, 2018
Writing Feedback / Task 2: Opinion about video games - more problems than benefits [7]

@Holt
You commented that this essay is about personal view so I mustn't give some research information, right? So, should I put some example like "According to a recent Harvard study...." or my own experienced example?
Nhat Px   
Sep 13, 2018
Writing Feedback / Task 2: Opinion about video games - more problems than benefits [7]

Topic: Some people regard video games as a harmless fun, or even as a useful education tool. Others, however believe that video games are having an adverse effect on the people who play them. In your opinion, do the draw back of video games outweigh the benefits.

video games evil influences



Nowadays video games are a familiar method for human beings to release. While I accept that this type of entertainment temporarily makes people happy , its disadvantages prevail far more than its advantages.

To begin with, playing video games is incredibly detrimental to physical health. Focusing too excess on the monitors may impair eyesight which highly likely lead to an array of uncured eye diseases. People additionally struggle with their headaches providing they waste most of their time on the games. Furthermore, the gesture would be negatively affected since people have to sit to play game instead of going outside practicing exercises. There are more and more people all over the world, especially the yongter have troubles with their body only because they have no ideas how to be right in gesture on playing games.

Equally importantly, video games provided harmful knowledge to those who frequently expose to them. This fact can be attributed to myriads of factors. For instant prostitution advertisements popping up when a person is playing video games may fascinate him to click unsafe websites. Thus, he may update his mind with some negative information - the seed of devaluing personality. Besides, game online addiction is not a less dangerous problem. If people are induced in digital game, they will be in their dream that they are living another magic world . This situation prevents additive players from being social with their beloved ones. Nobody can predict or understand what they behave once they deeply live in the life of video game platform.

By way of conclusion, although video games still have their places for those who are in need of relaxing, their evil influences are undeniably overwhelmed the strong points.
Nhat Px   
Sep 13, 2018
Writing Feedback / My topic is choosing subjects to study university, subjects what they like or related to future job. [2]

Some of your sentence makes me confused as: Choosing fields suitable for each ... ( I think it should be: choosing a suitable major when studying higher education...);

"In this essay, I will support and ..." (What's opinion you support? You just mention there are two flow of opinion, but which one do you choose?)

I think you should focus more on your grammars.
Nhat Px   
Jul 31, 2018
Writing Feedback / Alternative resources - an effective solution that should be encouraged to use in the near future. [3]

ALTERNATIVE energy RESOURCES



Topic: Fossil fuel such as coal, oil and natural gas are used in many country. The use of alternative source of energy, including wind and solar power is encourage. Is this trend a positive or negative development.

Nowadays human beings are facing the shortage of essential natural resources as coals, oil, which forces us to explore the new ones to provide promptly growing demand of society. Green energy is a wonderful solution addressing the serious problem in terms of there incredible features.

To begin with, conventional fuels hold significant economic cost. A wide range of industries have to spend to much on exploiting raw materials. Moreover the budget of processing domain a large rate on manufacturing cost resulting in inflating selling price and decreasing competitiveness. At the same time, that the fuels are transported from mines to factories also costs much that corporations should attempt to reduce and control this logistics process. Thus, people waste time and money in paying for complex things.

Equally importantly, the utility of non-renewable resources causes serious climate change. Take the case of Shanghai, China as an example. Its residents definately suffer from breathing toxics for numerous factories release contaminated airon generating product from traditional fuels. Unless people use face mask or other protective clothes, they could not go outside whether it is day or night.

Last but not least, Using alternative energy allows society to take full advantage of natural power and maintain our environment balance and health. It is simple for us to acknowledge renewable energy ranging from solar system, heat-themal. Not only do they cost as less as conventional ones but it also impulse the related technology. Furthermore, once being taken into production, green fuels will contribute significant parts into reducing environmental problems.

By way of conclusion, while people are facing the diminish of non-renewable, demand for energy keeps growing. Alternative resources is a effective solution that should be encouraged to use in the near future.
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