Posts by Margaret 2019

Margaret 2019

Apr 17, 2019

Writing Feedback / ADVANTAGES AND DISADVANTAGES OF EATING OUT [3]

The pros and cons of eating in restaurants

Nowadays, many people enjoy going out to eat. It is said that this way of eating has both pros and contrast. The pros is its convenience and new atmosphere, the contrast is unhealthiness and high price.

If you are not good at cooking or do not have time, eating out will be an easier choice to get a meal. Cooking includes many steps, which takes much time. When you eat outside, the restaurant would serve you within some minutes. Moreover, eating out is a good occasion to change your view. Eating places often offer great view, so you could try new sight rather than your old kitchen.

Oppositely, eating out could be risky and expensive. First, you do not know where the food comes from. It may be withered vegetables, spoiled meat tasting good thanks to the chemical seasoning. These dishes are harmful for your health and eventually cause death . Second, eating out is pricey. Since there are many people working at restaurants who need to be paid, it costs much more than buying the ingredients and making meals at home.

In short, eating out save your time and offer beautiful view, but it could be unsafe and costly. I suggest learning to cook to enjoy your meal in the best way.

Margaret 2019

Apr 17, 2019

Letters / Celebrating a special occasion in a restaurant and being verysatisfied with the food and service [4]

Your answer is right on the topic and your expression match the situation as well. However, there are still some typo here. Pay attention on the caps letter such as Yours faithfully and While. That's all of my comment on your essay

Margaret 2019

Apr 17, 2019

Writing Feedback / In many countries day by day rubbish (garbage) is increasing. Why is it happening? What can be done? [3]

Let me get it straight for you.
First, in the introduction part, you should state your general opinion on the topic. The topic is about the increasing of rubbish, so just write about it. You can start with " Recently, the amount of trash has been gone up rapidly in many parts of the Earth". The general causes and solutions of the problem should be stated by two sentences following the first one. Pay attention NOT TO COPY the words that given in the question.

Secondly, the length of the body parts should be approximately equal. You wrote the first one quite much longer than the other. The cause and solution is in equality, which means their supporting sentences must be equal as well. Moreover, you had better use academic words and take better care of expression. Instead of saying " There are many reasons..." , you should show them out directly. Instead of saying ~~"We all know"~~, you should get it straight by saying It is clear that... Everything need to be evident and easy to comprehend.

The final issue is your conclusion. "This is" what? Why don't you just simply say it out. Since it is the conclusion, the first thing to write is the conclusive sentence. Get all of your above sentences into this one, short and clear. For further writing, you could also give a suggestion like " I suggest we should take action together in order to cope with the problem more effectively

That's all. We all are learners, so I would be grateful if we can absorb new lessons together. Peace and love!

Margaret 2019

Jan 15, 2019

Writing Feedback / Nowadays, going abroad for studying has been more and more popular, also among Vietnamese students [3]

Advantages and Disadvantages of studying overseas

Nowadays, going abroad for studying has been more and more popular to Vietnamese students. This controversial issue has taken a strong influence to students and even their family, in both positive and negative ways.

On the positive side, study abroad is a wonderful chance to broaden your mind and harden yourself. You will be able to experience the new styles of education and cultures when you go to a foreign country. It will be not only awesome to learn in a different environment but also excited to explore that country. You can know about its traditional food, clothes, crafts and practice languages by speaking to the native speakers.A further advantage of studying overseas is personal development. Usually, you will have to live by your own and work part time to get money to afford courses as well as living expense. Consequently, after dealing with all of these problems, you will be more mature and independent.

On the negative side, there are three main drawbacks of studying overseas : time, money and health. It is undeniable that this way of studying cost too much. Unless you have a full scholarship , your parents will try to do everything to get enough money for you to go for overseas studying. Many of them don't consider the right point of it and may lose too much money when their children can't put up with the situation anymore. In addition, you can also be extremely tired because of studying and working in a long time without eating methodically. This is bad for your health and also for your family who cares for you so much. It will take time to get used to the new styles and sometimes this causes shock, illness, etc.

In conclusion, studying abroad brings both advantages and disadvantages to students in Vietnam. Therefore, I suggest you and your family should think over before going to a foreign country with the aim of studying.