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Posts by vilender
Name: Linh
Joined: Jun 4, 2019
Last Post: Jun 29, 2019
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From: Vietnam
School: Hanoi

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vilender   
Jun 29, 2019
Writing Feedback / Economic growth is a way to end hunger and poverty or damage the environment [3]

stabil and environmental friendly economy



Some people assert that economic growth is the only way to end starvation and destitution, while others put it down to natural destruction and want it to be prevent. In this essay, I will discuss both perspective and give my opinion.

Economic activities including agriculture, manufacturing or trading and selling,.... Therefore, it is undoubtedly that, the economic has played an pivotal role in alleviate poverty. We can effortlessly come up with the inference that the more advanced in economic, the greater demand for labour. For example, developed country like Japan imports at least 10000 workers annually for producing products, which has helped not only to lower the unemployment rates of the continent by 1.5%, but also minimize hunger. This suggests that by improving a country's economic means enhancing people with long-term payments.

On the other hand, economic growth has raised the standard of living. In other words, company will have to accelerate the mass of production in order to meet up with individuals requirements and for better profit. Nowadays, it can easily be seen that most of farms are using more chemical in fertilizers and pesticides or factories are burning more fuels and releasing tons of wastes together with emissions into the environment. As a results, citizens now have to live with air pollution and serious water contamination. Working and living in this surrounding in a long run will lead to fatal disease such as lung cancer. People making more money because of economic growth, however, they have to spend all of their money to fight back unwanted illness. The circulation of making and spending will one way or another bring them back to poverty and hunger.

In conclusion, I elucidate that economic growth has played an vital role in erasing hunger, however, the way human pushing it at a break-neck pace has destroyed the environment and given counterproductive results. Therefore, in my opinion, I believe that only by enhancing economic with stability and environmental friendly will the problem to be solved.
vilender   
Jun 29, 2019
Writing Feedback / Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation. Others want to try and improve them. [2]

-This may not only bring benefits to only themselves but ...Besides, a problems solved ...

-if an applicant who are is being
-..., although there is are some evidence

I think that your essay is pretty good. You have provide clear argument and explain it, however for the example that you give in the passage I think its quite long and a little bit run on, so I suggest that you should cut it down into different sentences.

For instance, in case of being ...
I will change this to : For instance, people who are unemployed or shortage of money can exploit this opportunities to find new jobs or develop themselves instead of blame or complain others.
vilender   
Jun 4, 2019
Writing Feedback / Some believe that computer technology has made the world and the society a safer place [3]

Some are of the opinion are that the hi-tech ... differ in the opinion. However, In my opinion, I would like ... technology creates has created a safe world ... as causes caused some various problems.

people will have to think twice before commit commiting crimes

... created a safer (better)world for ...

and it is very difficult for police to catch them

put people's lives into dangerous danger
vilender   
Jun 4, 2019
Writing Feedback / Equal numbers of men and women learners in every field of study - is such balance beneficial? [3]

equal numbers of male and female students in every subject



Should universities accept equal numbers of men and women learners in every field has always been a controversial issue throughout the century. To my point of view, I strongly assert that if colleges can set a balance between 2 genders in specific subject, the merits will definitely outweighs the demerits.

To begin with, 21 century has given prominence to the equality among male and female, therefore, by having the same amount of gender enrolling to university, it can, one way or another support to this ideology. Moreover, it can be easily seen that, there has been an unbalance in the ratio of men and women in plethora of works. This might be the result of the discrepancy of sex in different area at school. The disadvantages of the divergence has shown greatly when a student go apply for a job. For example, in technology field, the number of male has outweigh the number of female, hence there will be a high chance that girls will be turn down due to the engrained perspective that boys are better at coding and programming ( the unbalance number is a clear evidence for this case).

On the other hand, it is undoubtedly that each gender has its own advantages,therefore, there are some subjects that will not suitable for others.For instance, sports such as weight lifting or soccer will require player to have good health and mental in order to go under pressure and hard training program, consequently, most of female are not meet up with the requirements, so it will be right for university to accept more men than women in sport subject.

In conclusion, I contend that college should have equal number of both gender in each area since it will not only create a balance of opportunity in each field but also favour the ideology of equality between male and female.
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