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Name: Nguyễn Mai Sao
Joined: Oct 6, 2019
Last Post: Mar 15, 2020
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From: Viet Nam
School: Vinh Phuc Gifted High School

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theamazingshao   
Mar 13, 2020
Writing Feedback / UNIVERSITY EDUCATION SHOULD BE FREE TO EVERYONE, REGARDLESS OF INCOME. [4]

The tuition fees issue



University education should be free to everyone, regardless of income. To what extent do you agree? 300-350 words.

There is currently a contentious argument over whether a zero cost of university tuition fees should be given to every students notwithstanding their income. From my point of view, I am not in favor of this opinion due to the two main reasons.

To begin with, I believe that students are responsible of paying for their own acquisition of knowledge, especially for the precious lessons which they receive at universities. Consequently,they are also likely to be more appreciative and try to develop a methodical study approach. It is a common sense that every movements in life bring experience and have its value. In order to achieve it, a determined money and time investment is compelled. The aforementioned idea can be applied in this case.If undergraduates desire knowledge or experience, they have to pay a price.

Another reason why I do not approve of the notion is that it may cause a deficit in the institutions' budget. Given that the school do not earn any profit from the tuition fees, the school board of managers can have a difficulty remunerating the teaching staff as well as the service workers, not to mention electricity and other facilities. In addition, some of the teachers might resign because of the low-paid salary. This eventually leads to the degradation of the university 's reputation and quality.

In conclusion, I do not agree with the opinion that education at university should be free no matter how much they could afford. This can be put down to two rationales: the responsibility of students to pay for their pursuits and the lack of money in institutions. In this case, I highly recommend applying for a scholarship to lower the cost or searching for a part-time job to earn more money.

P/S: Can u give me my band, contributors?
theamazingshao   
Mar 13, 2020
Writing Feedback / TOPIC: Fewer and fewer people want to become teachers in many countries [3]

First of all, I think you have a wide range of vocabulary that may impress the examiner. However, your essay exceeded the prescribed words so yes, you will lose points.

Try to stick to the topic and condense it into a conciser one
theamazingshao   
Mar 10, 2020
Writing Feedback / THE NEGATIVE EFFECT OF THE FAST PACE AND STRESS OF MODERN LIFE ON FAMILIES. [4]

hectic pace and pressure of contemporary lifestyles



Some people believe that the fast pace and stress of modern life is having a negative effect on families.
To what extent do you agree or disagree ?


A highly controversial issue today relates to whether family life is being detrimentally affected by the hectic pace and pressure of contemporary lifestyles. From my point of view, I totally agree with this opinion due to the two main reasons.

First of all, I would contend that families have less time to gather around because of the high-speed modern days. This may result from members being preoccupied with work and their social lives. These days, people are often so busy updating their social status or chatting with friends that they forget to spend time with their beloved,

not to mention the fact that they only have about six hours in the evening to meet their family members.
Another reason why I support the notion is that people are more likely to argue with each other under great pressure. It is concerned that when getting tired, humans stand bigger chance of being easily annoyed and therefore, quarrel. In the actual world, some married couples eventually choose to get divorced and leave an irreplaceable position in their offspring 's growth.

In conclusion, I believe that the fast-moving and stressful nature of the current competitive world are ruining family relationships. This is owing to family members having less time together and hence, feeling less relaxed. The best prospect might be that the family members try to be more supportive of each other and meet more frequently.
theamazingshao   
Oct 6, 2019
Writing Feedback / Televisions and movies can affect us either in a bad way or in a good way [5]

I think you should not use "we", "they" or especially "you" in an academic writing because one of its features is impersonal style. "They" is fine if you use it for sake of not repeating the former word. But you should limit it as much as possible.

Hope you will read my essay and give me your feedback
theamazingshao   
Oct 6, 2019
Writing Feedback / Will the children benefit from the additional income? Or will they lack support from their parents? [2]

more money or parental love?



In the present age, most couples recognize a necessity for both to exert themselves more to make ends meet. Some believe that the additional income consequentially stands their offsprings in good stead. Meanwhile, others contend that the children may lack the indispensable care from their parents. In this essay, I will elaborate on both these viewpoints and give my own opinion.

On the one hand, it can be concerned that the extra money earned, in many ways, positively affect the children's life. The couples are more likely to pay for a better living standard as well as other household expenses. As a result,the kids may have a better-based background both educationally and socially. For example, a well-being family can afford the great sum of money to send their kids to a prestigious school with high-qualified teaching staff.

On the flipside, I would argue that despite the sufficiency in materials, the children still deprive of the inevitably emotional support from their mom and dad. It is obvious that if parents both go out to work, the kids will be left at home alone and bored. This phenomenon may gradually trigger some insecure feelings or worse, unpredictable behaviour in children, especially in teenagers.

In conclusion, it is important to acknowledge the merits of the two given perspectives. However, I am more convinced of the latter idea and thus, parents' absence in their offspring 's everyday life should be limited as much as possible.
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