Writing Feedback / Why many prisoners commit crimes as soon as they released? - IELTS WRITING TASK 2 [3]

Topic:

Many criminals commit further crimes as soon as they released from prison.

What do you think are the causes of this?
Response:
Many prisons turn over a new leaf after they released from prison; nevertheless, not all the case are true. Some criminals commit crimes as soon as they get out of prison, and personally, I believe there are reasons to justify this.

Firstly, it is people's prejudice that indirectly make those prisoners give up the idea of re-integrating. Back to the past, criminals were considered a threat to the society, and undoubtedly, people tended to distance themselves from prisoners. That presumption had rooted deeply inside people's mind and made them turn their back at people who commit crimes, even if he or she is only a little thief. As a result, these released prisoners no longer feel they are parts of the society anymore, instead, they feel left-out and abandoned. Without the warm welcoming and the sympathy of the society, these prisoners find no incentive in changing for the better since all of their efforts would meet with negligence and underappreciation.

Secondly, our society lacks of job opportunity for the prisoners. After coming out of prison, a job is of the utmost importance on the grounds that offers the prisoners stable incomes to live by and makes them feel that they have values to the society. However, finding a proper job is a challenge to every prisoner since their crimes are often regarded as acts of fraudulence and untrustworthiness. Clearly, no employers would like to take on these people in their working places. Struggling to find a job, most released prisoners would end up facing financial difficulties. Eventually, they would resort to committing crimes in order to make some money.

In conclusion, reasons why many prisoners commit crimes right after being released could be put down to people's prejudice and the lack of job opportunity for the return criminals.

Writing Feedback / Using computers every day does more harm than good to the children [5]

Using a computer everyday can have more negative than positive effects on children. Agree/Disagree?

It is true that in this temporary society, computers are no stranger to children. While I agree that computers have their own advantages, I believe that using computers every day does more harm than good to the children.

Firstly, staring at the computer on a daily basis affects children's health negatively. One of the most undeniable results of computers on a child's health is short-sightedness. The computer screens emit a particular green light which proved to be harmful to human's eyes in the long term. As a result, looking at the computer day by day could make our eyes tired and eventually leads to myopia. In addition, computers promote a sedentary lifestyle. Children who are absorbed in the virtual world have the tendency to stay at home most of the time. This trend increases the risk of hazardous illness such as heart attack and obesity since those computer addicts are lacking in physical exercises.

Secondly, children would gain access to the unwanted sources of information on the Internet. It is clear that the information updated on computer is unlimited; nevertheless, they are sometimes left unmonitored. Children could inadvertently reach the inappropriate contents related to violence and sexuality. Clearly, a child could take in information easily without filtering; therefore, these types of information would provoke violence among children by lingering images of killings. Take my brother as an example. When he was six, my parents allowed him to use the computer without restrictions. After a few months, he became rigorous towards people since he watched a great deal of violent videos on Youtube. We then became aware of the negative impacts of computers on children's mind.

In conclusion, even though computers might have some positive edges, I strongly believe that they are harmful to children in the main and that children should not be allowed to use computers too often.