Writing Feedback / The issue about protecting wild animals. Give your opinion [3]

saving wild animals - whose duty is it?

Has modern life changes so much that wild animals have no longer existed in the 21st century? It seems to me that it is governments's duty to conserve wildlife and wild animals as they, throughout the ages, play an important role in both our life and environment.

First and foremost, wild animals are believed to protect ecological stability and balance. For instance, predatory like wolves serve a purpose for ecosystem by hunting herbivores such as deer. In other words, were wolves destroyed, deer would be free in eating plans, increasing their population in uncontrollable way, which seriously spoil the nature and wildlife.

What is more, it could be argued that wild animals, in terms of economic, bring a huge amount of revenue for the benefit of human. As a matter of fact that animals appearing on television programs, advertisements and TV shows are attractive and appealing to human. For instance, people are immediately attracted by wild animals as they usually go to the zoos, camping in the mountain or forest, visit the safari and so on. As a result, government and business could easily gain a great deal of money, those which might help to develop a country's economic.

Contrary to popular belief, on the other hand, there are some people who claim that it is a waste of money to protecting wild animals. It cannot be denied that government might have paid a considerable sum of money on saving wildlife, however, compared to the benefit that animals bring, it is worth channelling fund into the conservation of wild animal.

All things considered, I therefore believe that wild animals are in need of being protected, especially the endangered animals. In other words, each one of us has a commission to conserve wild animals as we are protecting our life.

(P/s: Hi, I am profoundly grateful for your review about my essay. Moreover, the question of this essay is: " Wild animals have no place in 21st century, and the protection is a waste of resource. To what extent do you agree or disagree?" Once again, thank you very much!!)

Writing Feedback / Music at school. Give your opinion about it. [2]

Do you think all students should have to study music?

Music, throughout centuries, has played a crucial role in human's spiritual life. For this reason, in terms of education, music is taught as an important subject at school.There for those, however, who feel music is a subsidiary subject claimed that it is no use studying music and abolish it at school. To my way of thinking, I am inclined to the first former.

To begin with, it is widely believed that not only is music a spiritual expression but also a soul healer for students beside most stressful lessons at school. In practice, students are always depressed by a variety of complicate assessment tests given by teacher or even some students are forced to learn around the clock without being rested.In these cases, students are under the pressures that their parents put on them with the hope that they could be excellent at school. For these reasons, they should be allowed to relax and dive in the rhythm in music lessons at school,those which could soothe their depression and heal their soul.These facts that, by studying music and learning to play musical instruments at school, students can ease their pressure and improve their life of spirituality.

Furthermore, by studying music at school, some people could find their talents in music and pursue it.This is shown by the fact that professors believe that it is essential to find young talents by the observations on their daily life, that it is in fact, almost entirely of their time is in school. That is to say, school education must consist music as a compulsory subject in order to discover music potential in students and therefore music educators could easily facilitate their ability to be improved, that considerably influence their future career.

There are those who argue, on the other hand, that music is a redundant subject as it is abolished in some schools. It can not be denied that for some students who do not have a taste for studying music would find it time-consuming to study this subject at school as these times could be spent on their favorite subject.As a result, in some school, studying music may not be required or there may be no music class at all. Nonetheless, these examples are not norm as music is still a favorite subject for most students.

Taking these points into consideration, I would say that the importance of music in schools is unchangeable since its enormous benefits for students.Needless to say, music is seemed as a spiritual healer for students who are frequently under the pressure at school.

(P/s: actually the question of the essay is"In some schools, students must study music and learn to play a musical instrument. In other schools, studying music may not be required or there may be no music classes at all. Do you think all students should have to study music? Support your opinion with reasons and examples.". Thank you for spending time on reading my essay!)