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Name: Pham Thi Thuy Nga
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Last Post: May 18, 2020
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Tynna   
May 18, 2020
Writing Feedback / Compare and contrast essay: The culture of small towns and cities [2]

cities versus the countryside



In a shrinking world, it has become vitally important to recognize and comprehend the concepts of both rural and urban areas once seen as changeable. Improvements in technology and long-distance transportation, along with the rise of the national economy have created a need to identify how society, customs, or even the environment of small towns may be similar or different from cities. Indeed, even though two types of place may differ significantly, frequently enough similarities exist to enable each culture's representatives to find common ground. The rural and urban areas provide a good example of places that entail a lavish lifestyle and have fundamental differences but that still find commonalities.

As many people are aware, there are significant similarities between living in cities and the countryside. In terms of organizing and controlling, both these places have united by the whole apparatus of government. Besides, language seems to be the common means of communication in which both rural and urban areas are using spontaneously. Thus, the aforementioned factors are relatively crucial associating with political concern throughout the flow of innovation today.

Despite the similarities in linguistics, laws, and authorities as well, it is transparently clear that people settling in two places have a distinct lifestyle which becomes a leading cause of choosing where to live. The relationships, for instance, define how close-knit communities the countryside has and how separated surroundings the cities are. Therefore, an ordinate amount of adults tends to abide at these tranquil and peaceful places instead of the hustle and bustle of city life.

Furthermore, a proclivity towards the modern civilization has brought cities much more differences than those small towns. The facilities and constructions have enhanced profoundly by the improvement of technology such as roads, buildings, and public services. Additionally, the variety of transportation during the twentieth century is really conducive to make citizen's life comfortable and convenient compared to difficulties when commuting further from villages. However, although cities can supply adequately all of the incredible services to dwellers, the researchers found that there are a multitude of social problems that should not be underestimated. Dominantly, the population density has increased considerably resulting in some of the pollution such as air, water, or soil. Unlike the countryside, the rate of social crime has regarded burning issues as worthy of consideration occurring in big cities.

All of this being said, there involves multiple differences between living in rural or urban areas in terms of lifestyle or modernity. Nevertheless, the commonalities in other areas, such as language and control of government cannot be ignored. Thereby, it will depend on individual preferences if residents prefer to live for the rest of life.
Tynna   
May 18, 2020
Writing Feedback / Living in the urban areas may cause many awful effects on citizens' health and I am aware of it [4]

Indeed, your essay does not attract me at first sight, indirect introduction would be recommended instead of a direct one. You need to use more complex sentences and more academic words in general. A wide range of vocabulary is needed for writing essays. Besides, you need t use transitional words/phrases competently and smoothly, associated with some suggestions are shown in conclusion which makes a great contribution to improve your score, in fact. probably your score is around 4 to 5.
Tynna   
May 18, 2020
Writing Feedback / Governments should impose heavy tax on car drivers and make improvements to public transportation [3]

Indeed, your main points are apparently clear, you will have a higher score if you use more and more academic words. Hook introduction and conclusion also make a great contribution to improving your score. For example, indirect introduction in lieu of directly one. Besides, in conclusion, some suggestions must be pinpointed to make your essay competent. All of this being said, probably your essay will gain 5.0 and that's my opinion, for what it's worth.
Tynna   
Apr 7, 2020
Writing Feedback / IELTs_Task 2_The causes of stress in college student - the university' life will be colorful and des [2]

Essay about The causes of stress in college students

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Under the present circumstances, students turn out to face with the multitude of difficulties when entering to universities or colleges. Specifically, stress, one of the most debated matters, is assumed to hinder considerably on learners. As this universal phenomenon is relatively dominant, it is undoubted that social scientists are learning more about its financial and academic causes. They have found that stress can lead to both psychological and physical effects.

Finance, initially turns out to be one of the fundamental causes which makes teens and adolescents stressed out. For example, tuition housing and necessities are noticed factors since attending universities in which students take a high concern on. Thus, finding part-time job to support their parents' income brings some obstacles for studying because of feeling guilty about spending their parents' money. Furthermore, today, teenagers are overly stressed out since influencing from their professors, parents as well as guardian in school curriculum. As school grades or even scholarship are intensely competitive for students among others.

Notwithstanding, every cause is relative to its consequence. Stress at least in some cases can stem from financial and academic aspects. Thereby, these result in two main fields, both are psychologically and physically. The first outcome is on psychological platform. Students in the long term have to suffer from depression and anxiety due to being put under the pressure. Also, problems coordinated with cognitive functioning inevitably bring to students who tend too unable to concentrate on studying in regular. Physical effects, besides, would not be underestimated. Headaches and insomnia in a specific instance are demonstrated to devastate health when suffering for a long time. Hence, these offer detrimental downsides on both mentally and physically to younger generations in universities these days.

All of this being said that, although these adverse effects could originate from financial and academic causes of stress, if youngster are more aware of those mishaps and continually investigate methods to go through it, I believe the university' life will be colorful and desirable.
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