Posts by annahoang

annahoang

Apr 11, 2020

Essays / The recycling process in Australia - IELTS Writing Task 1 - Pie Charts [3]

As regard to => with regard to
I know that there are not many information in that picture but some sentences are too short, such as " It is measured by percent.". think and try to improve it!

annahoang

Apr 11, 2020

Writing Feedback / The amount of four different kinds of food used by people in an European nation from 1979 to 2004 [3]

You should improve the grammar. Remember doubled check your essay.
And I think in p4, you should put information more logical. Because the consumption of beef is the highest in 1984, it should mention before "a significantly increase of chicken"

annahoang

Apr 11, 2020

Writing Feedback / The diagram describes how coal is used to generate electricity for human activities. [2]

Writing task 1: ELECTRICITY GENERATION

The diagram illustrates the process of making electricity from coal. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram describes how coal is used to generate electricity for human activities.

It is noticeable from the picture that there are several steps, including a closed cycle, in the producing of electricity. The process begins with grinding coal into powder and ends with transmitting electricity.

At the first stage of generating electricity, the coal is moved to pulverizer in order to be crushed. In the subsequent stage, coal powder is transferred into a furnace where it is burnt to heat the water. The emission from coal combustion is released from smoke stack after treatment process in the precipitator.

Simultaneously, the water turns into steam and this steam goes through a long pipe with the turbine at the end. Then, the turbine which is linked with generator is rotated by high pressure of steam. The electricity is transmitted to a substation and travels along the power lines. Once the steam has passed the turbine, it is condensed by low temperature in cooling towers. Afterwards, this water is supplied for the furnace mentioned in the previous step.

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Thanks for reading and please leave your thoughts

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annahoang

Apr 9, 2020

Writing Feedback / IELTS task 2: Artificial intelligence used to drive car [4]

Hi Linh, I think your essay has quite good grammar and vocabulary. But honestly, I don't really like the way you give the example and develop your idea. I recommend you use example about the safety which was AI give to driver, as you know, many accidents came from drunk divers,...

annahoang

Apr 9, 2020

Essays / How I answer this Question for Fulbright scholarship [8]

I think you should talk about advantages (also disadvantages) of this subject, why you choose it, what do you know about it, your knowledge in this field, and after this course what will you do.

annahoang

Apr 9, 2020

Writing Feedback / Writing Task 1 The changes in the art gallery ground floor in 2015 and present day [3]

The art gallery in 2015 and now

The maps below show the changes in the art gallery ground floor in 2015 and present day

The maps illustrate numerous variations taking place in the art gallery ground floor from 2015 to present day.
It is noticeable from the picture that art gallery has changed considerably and a number of new features can be seen in the second diagram. Significantly, there was a drastic change of the western half of the floor.

Looking at the illustrations in more details, we can see that situated to the southwest and next to entrance, ramp for wheel chair was constructed in order to enable every person to contemplate galleries. Get through the door, in the middle of Enter Hall, there was receptionist which was relocated from top - left corner. In the East, three exhibition room 1, 2, 3 witness no change.

On the contrary, lying in the west, exhibition room 4 was divided into two part: temporary exhibition and children's area. Gallery office which was to the north of the exhibition room 4 was demolished and replaced by vending machine. Similarly, gallery shop which in the north-western area was erected at the position where the café used to be. However shop is smaller than the café with the purpose of making way for stairs. There was the emergence of lift which was on the right-hand side of the stairs, which gave people easy and convenient access to the floor.

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