minhthu121
Apr 22, 2020
Writing Feedback / Learning by a failure? Mistakes can teach you a lesson. [6]
I don't know much about this kind of essay so I can only point out your grammar and vocab mistakes. Hopefully, someone else will give you feedback about the writing style.
It should be "... grades canafter some time sometimes become ..."
"... or twice, you'll score ...". Remember to put a comma when use conditional.
view of point => point of view
It should be "But for peopleto learn learning something ..."
So in contrary=> On the contrary/ By contrast
"In the end, life is an...". A comma is compulsory
I don't know much about this kind of essay so I can only point out your grammar and vocab mistakes. Hopefully, someone else will give you feedback about the writing style.
It should be "... grades can
"... or twice, you'll score ...". Remember to put a comma when use conditional.
view of point => point of view
It should be "But for people
So in contrary=> On the contrary/ By contrast
"In the end, life is an...". A comma is compulsory