Writing Feedback / Criminal Reoffence - Causes and Solutions [2]

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TOPIC:

Many criminals commit further crimes as soon as they released from prison

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What do you think are the causes of this?
What potential solutions can you suggest?
WORD COUNT: 294.

The issue of criminals re-offence has always been concerning for the authorities. There are some possible reasons why one person still break the law after being in prison. In this essay, I will suggest some ways to help mitigate the problems.

There is no doubt that having a criminal record can dramatically impact a person's life, especially from the personal finance and social perspectives. Coming out from prisons, many offenders are left behind from a fast-growing economy. The lack of trade skills and knowledge refrain ex-criminals from earning an adequate living. I think that low incomes is the major reason that push people to commit wrong doings. In addition, society tends to avoid connections to people with a troubled past, making these individuals a victim of isolation and discrimination. The feeling of bitterness may re-evoke their cognitive law-breaking patterns.

From my perspective, both the government and the society can help to resolve these problems. To start off, the mental health of confined individuals must be well-cared about. There should be well-designed rehabilitation programs that teach them the rights and wrongs, and the responsibilities of a good citizens. With the right techniques, changing a person from his understanding is key to a powerful improvement in behaviors. Besides that, to ensure that criminals can be employed after the imprisonment, apprenticeship programs and safe community jobs can provide these people with skills and experiences. At the same time, we should have more generous view about offenders and encourage them to re-integrate into the community.

It is true that some criminals repeat their mistakes in the past. To me, reasons may varies from financial hardships to the failure to create desirable social relationships. To tackle these issues, governments should provide supportive rehabilitation programs and people in the community should also change their attitudes toward ex-criminals.

Writing Feedback / Discuss: COMPUTER INTELLIGENCE [2]

Computer vs human

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Some scientists believe that in the future computers will be more intelligence than human beings. While some see this as a positive development others worry about the negative consequences.

Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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There is no doubt that the advancement of computers is happening rapidly. While I share the concern with people who worry about the detrimental effects of this trend, I am on the side with the ones that are fascinated by its potential implications.

On the one hand, the fear of intelligence machines is not radical. Many programs, nowadays, deeply analyze the users' behavior patterns and can make an impact on human lives in various ways. One clear example is the daily recommendations of music, next destinations, or suggestions on who to contacts that are provided by smartphones. They can accurately reflect the user's preference and even predict the next decisions. Opponents to the technology development claim that future machines can have increasing controls on human by giving such delicate guidance.

On the other hand, computers are invented and enhanced to serve for a better living experience. Modern people can enjoy the ease of living without the need of doing many household chores. Floors are cleaned by automated vacuum robots, dishes become spotless by the work of the dishwashers. Above all, these works are programmed by humans; we hold firmly the control over these computers. People who support the modernization point out that if the computing engineers design the computers to have narrow specializations, such as the cleaning robots, the fear of the aforementioned opponent is minimized. I think that technology is the future, hence we should take proactive actions to ensure our sustainable prospect, and not to neglect its benefits.

In conclusion, the impact of technology is profound. The worry that computers will overtake humans is reasonable, however, engineers can strictly limit the computer's capability. Overall, I strongly believe that technological advancement will improve human living quality.