Writing Feedback / Discuss some problems of living in large cities [2]

Task :

People living in large cities today face many problems in their everyday life.

What are these problems? Should governments encourage people to move to smaller regional towns?

Task performance

In the context of the megatrend of urbanisation, people tend to move to major cities in hope of having a better life. However, they are now confronted with many daily problems. This essay will discuss two of these problems which justifies why I believe that governments should motivate people to turn to live in suburban areas.

Everyday, people living in big cities constantly have to deal with high living costs and low air quality. The former problem may be the consequence of the nonstop advance of living condition in the city. Therefore, to gain a better life, people have to earn a living to cover their basic expenses such as housing, food, healthcare and utility bills which are often much higher than in other regions. Some people may not be able to earn enough money to make ends meet and have to live in narrow, uncomfortable spaces and suffer from poor life. The latter one is partly due to the greater volume of industrial fumes and exhaustion from vehicles, especially during rush hours. This is the reason why people in big cities like Beijing are more likely to suffer from a variety of respiratory problems related to air contamination.

In my opinion, city residents should be encouraged to move to regional areas. Firstly, costs of living in these regions are much cheaper so that they can afford to pay for a more comfortable life. This as well relieves the pressure on housing supply in cities where many people are forced to live in very narrow accommodation. Moreover, if people move away from metropolises, the population density in these cities will be decreased, which leads to lower volumes of vehicles, critically reducing the levels of air pollution.

To conclude, I can firmly say that high living expenses and air contamination are among the most prevalent problems facing city residents these days. To gradually solve these problems, I believe that governments should motivate people to move to suburban and satellite cities.

I am looking forwards to your comments. Thank you for your reading!

Writing Feedback / Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages? [2]

Write about the following topic.

Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular.

Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Task performance

With the advent of the Internet technology , people tend to purchase things like books, air tickets and groceries online. While I agree that this way of shopping has lots of benefits, I believe there are some drawbacks that is worth mentioning.

On the one hand, it is undeniable that online shopping can bring the buyer several benefits. Firstly, it is much more convenient than going to the stores. Buying things online can be done just by a click, and can be done whenever and wherever you want, even when you are sitting on your bed. It can also save people time and travel expenses. Some people may have to go far to do shopping and sometimes there are traffic jams on the way which is really annoying. Moreover, this shopping way can even prevent the customers from being packed in the crowds in the malls or shops on special occasions. With these reasons, it is understandable why online shopping is becoming so popular these days.

On the other hand, there are still some disadvantages that are caused by shopping in this way. One of them is the authenticity of the products purchased. As the buyer just do shopping online and can only see the products in image through the screen, they cannot assess the real quality of these products as when they themselves go to the shops. And there have been a lot of purchasing cases that the customers do not satisfy with the products they received and they are even totally different from what have been placed on the Internet. Moreover, sometimes, there are some mistakes when delivering such as too long delivery, wrong products or wrong address that receive bad feedback from the customers.

In conclusion, nobody can deny the benefits that online shopping brings to people as it makes our life more convenient and modern than ever. However, there are still some problems in this shopping way that should be solved as soon as possible to give the purchaser the best experience.

P/s: Hope I will receive feedback from you all! Thank you!

Writing Feedback / Writing IELTS Task 2 - Culture and Tradition [5]

Admiring the foreign famous stars, and neglecting own identity

TASK : MANY YOUNG PEOPLE TO KNOW ABOUT INTERNATIONAL POP AND MOVIE STARS FAMOUS PEOPLE IN THE HISTORY OF THEIR COUNTRIES. WHAT ARE THE CAUSES? GIVE SOLUTIONS TO INCREASE THE NUMBER OF PEOPLE TO KNOW ABOUT FAMOUS PEOPLE IN HISTORY.

History is one of the most important parts of every country's culture. However, these days, foreign stars in music and movies seem to be better known among teenagers than historical people in their country. There are some reasons for this issue and I would like to suggest some possible ways to make people know more about the countries historically famous people.

To commence with, this issue comes about as a result of the globalization in this day and age. With the advance of the media and technology, people are able to assess to the for encounter especially through music and films. Secondly, that international stars are more famous is because of people's need of relaxation. Teenagers tend to listen to music and watch movies in their free time as leisure activities. As the foreign music may have more catchy lyrics and foreign idols and stars may be good-looking, young people are easily attracted and try to find out more information. One more reason that contributes to this issue is the fact that national history is not attractive enough to get youngers' interest. Historical documents tend to be so lengthy and boring that they can only attract those who are truly and honestly interested in, not most people. That is a sad reality among teenagers these days.

For these reasons that are some possible actions that should be taken to improve the situation. Obviously we cannot forcr anyone to stop listening to their favorite singers' music or stop watching their favorite actors' films. What we should do is to find the ways to attract more people to historical values. There are some comics and cartoons that are created based on historic events. They are so attractive and appealing that they can raise people's interest in history. This is a good and creative method that should be kept going on. Another way is that the authorities can organize an annual competition about the ideas to make historical events more attractive that can be applied in education. By doing this we can keep historical values alive and better known day by day.

To conclude, knowing much about international stars is good in some ways, as their music and films help you to relax and sometimes give you the motivation to live better. However, no one should forget their own origin, their own country's history, and so do the teenagers. Admiring the foreign famous without ignoring our history is something that we should do in order to integrate without being assimilated.